Alien Feet

I found you on the humbled wheat fields,
Out in the dramatically flattened open
They used to stand so tall, and now, 
In only a moment…all fell before you
So very little, in contrast,
You towered over their severed stalks

Your light radiated and pulsed from your frame,
Leaving rainbow-electro ripples in the sky
You beckoned me closer and closer,
And as I glided toward you in terror and wonder,
Life itself became pleasantly unclear

The word, how
Remained on my parted lips...

Instantly, all that mattered was your existence,
How you swayed back and forth so enchantingly,
Teasing the wheat that bowed before you
Your eyes, intelligent, dreamlike, and wide,
Having seen beyond my every capability,
Knowing answers I have died over every night…
I was drawn to you like the honey bee to the giant hyssop
Though instead of brushing against fragrant petals,
There was a looming gloom of potential doom

Marvel drowned out all such fear as I drew ever near
As questions, so many questions, ached to be articulated
This inquisitive soul salivated in your shimmer
With a prayer for all humanity to see what I see…

When time became merely a silly story rhyme,
You answered every question like a parent to a child
The awe of your wisdom burned my stubbornness,
For in that moment, learning was living
No science, no reliance,
No fact, no future to fumble

Only truth today
Was fed to a child who once thought she knew all
Screaming and pouting in hopes for victory
She knows nothing until she grows taller than the earnest wheat
To fall effortlessly at your strange, alien feet

Inspired by the song “Tiny Alien” By Katie Melua
“Just how far can you fall,
When you still feel so small?
Will you love me through the sorrows, tomorrows,
Whatever the future will bring?
Tiny alien”
And for the contest sponsored by: Silent One
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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March 18, 2016 at 3:40 PM
Your awe for this person is fascinating. Whoever it is that has these epics written to them is one lucky guy ... it's marvelous the way you express yourself. "The word, how Remained on my parted lips.." Were you reading my mind as I was reading this poem? The idea of wheat bowing down ... it reminds of the the wheat stalks that bowed down before Joseph in his dreams. I wonder if this is where you got the inspiration or something else.
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March 18, 2016 at 8:30 PM
Yay! I love that you read in between the lines, Timothy. Thanks so much for reading this one and for your thoughts..(: It's funny, Joseph's dream did run through my mind while I was writing this..the concept with the wheat bowing down was also inspired by the mysterious crop circles that have appeared in remote areas around the world. Quite the alieny feel which I thought would work good for the theme in which I chose to write. ~Laura
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September 11, 2015 at 7:39 AM
You are such a wonderful storyteller! There are so many cool lines in this poem, especially "life itself became pleasantly unclear." I so relate to that line - I am constantly fascinated by life's mysteries. Do you write short stories? I feel like you would be really good at it.
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August 13, 2015 at 8:10 PM
We all need someone who can not only recognize our beauty and strength but who can also stimulate the growth of our hearts. Encountering someone who is able to elevate the passions that impell us to raise our standards of success is a gift that endures past this lifetime Laura, "For in that moment learning was living, no science, no reliance, no fact, no future to fumble..." truth must breathe, as these wonderful lines speak, and the alliteration throughout this poem is expert! J.A.B.
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August 13, 2015 at 9:17 PM
Your smart use of alliteration inspired many of my newer poems, Justin... this composition was actually a very humbling experience for me...sometimes we think we know everything... and then, pleasantly, we are surprised. I love your visits; thank you! ~Laura
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August 13, 2015 at 8:12 PM
This poem coneys a majestically sensual infatuation that leads to soul empowerment Laura..J.A.B.
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August 4, 2015 at 4:35 AM
Awesome poetry here, Laura. All the verses are but the last one is sheer beauty. congratulations! hugs!
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August 9, 2015 at 12:22 AM
Thanks lots!!! ~Laura
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August 1, 2015 at 12:44 AM
Congrats on ur wonderful winning verse Laura! Can hear the melody of your work!
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August 3, 2015 at 6:56 PM
Many thanks Dr. Upma! To me, the song is brilliant. ~Laura
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August 1, 2015 at 12:02 AM
Wonderful win...SKAT
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August 9, 2015 at 12:24 AM
Thanks very kindly, SKAT!~Laura
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July 31, 2015 at 11:33 PM
Laura, Congratulations on your win. nice to see this contest by Silent One.... Always ~LINDA~
Breidenthal Avatar
August 3, 2015 at 6:55 PM
Thanks very much for reading! I had a lot of fun writing this poem for his contest. ~Laura
Smith Avatar
July 31, 2015 at 10:29 PM
A beautiful loving verse Laura. I had to go listen to the song...She has an amazing voice....congrats Tim
Breidenthal Avatar
August 3, 2015 at 6:55 PM
Yes, she has some wonderful songs! I really like this song. It really sparks my curiosity of the unknown. I just want to hold what's unclear and be lost forever in its mystery! ~Laura
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July 31, 2015 at 7:48 AM
It all makes sense, and then it doesn't. That is the world in which we live, and you describe it with such ease. There are no simple answers, but perhaps there are--I don't know. So you fling me into a field and leave me there! OMG, I am just laughing and surrounded by a wheat field. Fun.
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August 2, 2015 at 1:16 AM
You are such a fun person Duke, and you always make me smile...your comments blow me away sometimes! ~Laura
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July 29, 2015 at 10:42 AM
YOU ARE A BRILLIANT WRITER, my dear sweet Laura! I am SO SO IMPRESSED! Your descriptive lines flow so easily... they're like music to the ear! Did I say I was impressed! Love you Laura my sweet! Jack xxx
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July 29, 2015 at 2:52 PM
You always make me feel like a million dollars, Jack. Love you too dear, and thank you so so much for such praise! ~Laura
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July 29, 2015 at 5:06 AM
- Laura, very well written !!!! (I do not know this song) - I wish you good luck in the contest - ..... and a lovely day :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Breidenthal Avatar
July 29, 2015 at 2:48 PM
Thanks for reading! I had a lot of fun with this one: ) Your comments are always so pleasant and sweet. Hope you have a great rest of the week! Always, Laura
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