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Alaskan Nights

I want to take a walk along the pier
I'll then drain out my eyes upon the shore
I wonder why he ever put me here

The sea - it seems to feel more than we dare
To manifest the lust it has for gore
I want to take a walk along the pier

Impossible it is my life to steer
A horse unbridled gallops all the more
I wonder why he ever put me here

A night of blackness is a cause for fear
Alaskan night. I do not know what for
I want to take a walk along the pier

And if that walk (I hope) is not so sheer
I'll ponder me down to the very core
I wonder why he ever put me here

To warn the masses that the end is near
And tell them heaven shut its narrow doors
I then will take a walk along the shore
And ponder why he ever put me here

Copyright © Jonathan White | Year Posted 2008

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Keith Bickerstaffe Date: 12/19/2008 10:46:00 AM Perfect form and execution... the necessary repeats are most effective. Fine rhyming anf faultless flow. BRAVO my friend! Best wishes, Keith Login to Reply

Denis Joe Date: 12/10/2008 10:50:00 AM 'Impossible it is my life to steer' is a little awkward. i read it through a couple of times and still feel that it doesn't work. But this is a great use of the form. the repetition is good and adds a lot to the stress of the narrative. I'm not sure I agree with the feeling of the poem but that doesn't extract from the skillfullness that has gone into producing it. Login to Reply