Afternoon (Two Cinquain)

AFTERNOON ( two Cinquain)

Deep breath
Winter is done
Spring breath rustles the trees
And here I sit       all afternoon
Thinking     (winter is done)
You foolish man!
Live NOW!


Warm flute
And Debussy
“Afternoon of a Faun”
I can almost see the meadow
Sense his young innocence
He’s safe    quite calm
Respite

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 7/23/2010 11:33:00 AM
OH, man, finally I thought i found one I had not seen before, but I have a comment here too. Gosh, DAver, I can't seem to find a poem of yours I have not read. Gues I will start at the end next time and work backwards rereading them!! this was sure good again! Luv, Andrea PS your Medusa comment made me LOL! I hate snakes too!!
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Date: 4/6/2010 12:14:00 AM
Lovely poem...Excellent..Charma
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Date: 4/5/2010 8:19:00 PM
Two very pleasant and mellow cinqains, daver and the first one is my favorite. Luv, andrea
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Date: 4/4/2010 7:02:00 PM
Absloutely beautiful, Daver. I too can see the scene and experience the sensing. coolness personified. Thanks for your comments.-your friend -Robert
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Date: 4/4/2010 6:45:00 PM
Much to reflect on in this poem. Nice use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Keep on writing! Karen
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Date: 4/4/2010 12:57:00 PM
Spring has been long awaited. Refreshing poem.
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Date: 4/4/2010 12:08:00 PM
pretty poem
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Date: 4/4/2010 8:42:00 AM
lovely, Have a very Happy Easter
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Date: 4/4/2010 8:17:00 AM
very nice write thank you so much for your sweet comments hope you have a happy happy easter faleshia
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Date: 4/4/2010 6:58:00 AM
A nice piece Daver. Have yourself a nice breath of Easter while your young soul enjoys the view from the inside. Love Irma.
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Date: 4/4/2010 6:55:00 AM
You touch all the senses here, Daver. So pleasing is the melody, the warmth of spring and the innocence of the "Faun." It was such a pleasure talking to you yesterday. Hope you have a wonderful Easter! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/4/2010 6:48:00 AM
Great write...Play it again.. Sara
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