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After the War

11/10/12 war remains small ones smell obscurity smoke lifts—gone

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 3/18/2013 9:41:00 PM
This sounds like the aftermath of war. Though it officially ended the children are living in the rubble of it. Line three makes me think of loss in a profound way... as if there's no possible way you could bring back their innocent minds that were tainted by all the horrible things they've seen. Your few words paint a much bigger picture and story than the actual content... it's what turns good haiku into GREAT haiku. Love it!
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Date: 1/4/2013 6:42:00 AM
i DONT KNOW MUCH ABOUT THIS STYLE BUT NEVER THE LESS WELL SAID ON THEAME XXX DAVIDSCOTT
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