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After the Ice Storm - hiku for Brian

ice-encased tree limbs glisten in dawn’s stillness . . . a lone fawn wanders

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Silent One

Date: 1/9/2024 2:14:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest..maybe we all should enter this form lol..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/9/2024 2:24:00 AM

Ahhh!!! Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Poor fawn, I am now wondering about his/her situation. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Mulu Magdalinos

Date: 1/9/2024 12:21:00 AM

Hello Andrea,a beautiful hiku! Blessings!

Robert Warlov

Date: 1/8/2024 5:21:00 AM

Growing pains.

Joseph May

Date: 1/7/2024 12:39:00 PM

You depict the stillness of a wintry scene well Andrea, I enjoyed the read

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/7/2024 11:10:00 PM

thanks, Joseph.

Ink Empress

Date: 1/7/2024 9:58:00 AM

This is so well written dear andrea. You always do these short forms so well and hiku too i bet brian will enjoy, i especially love the opening and the last line, so unique and picturesque, i wonder what the weather is like where you are at? Do you get snow? best wishes for the contest dear andrea

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/7/2024 10:45:00 AM

Not as much snow as in the old days. In Kentucky once I experienced an ice storm which dazzled all the trees. This is kind of my memory of it. Thanks.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 1/7/2024 9:07:00 AM

This creates a very strong image in my head and that tells me you did really well with this. I wonder if a screenwriter would ever make a movie storyboard entirely of haikus. You could do it for them....no doubt. Funny thought, but you would be able to do it. It's hard for me to comprehend how productive you are in terms of all this art, but I am very thankful you are!

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/7/2024 9:43:00 AM

Thanks even if I don't really know if I did really well with this. Thanks for your sweet compliment, Duke.

James Peranteau

Date: 1/6/2024 11:43:00 PM

brrrrr....i'm dig'n this write Andrea; i love bucolic scenery..i live smack in it! i gotta read the write right quick about where you grew up...later, me

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/7/2024 10:46:00 AM

Thanks, James

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/6/2024 4:40:00 PM

I enjoyed it, Andrea...you didn't have to tell, I felt the fawn's loneliness. Have a great evening, Sara

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/6/2024 8:40:00 PM

Thanks for commenting

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/6/2024 8:39:00 PM

I meant lone as the only fawn around. Doesn't mean he was necessarily lonely

Silent One

Date: 1/6/2024 11:42:00 AM

I dont know what this form is, but well done.. I think.. :)