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'Keelmen Heaving in Coals by Night' by Turner

(1835, National Gallery of Art, Washington),



Aflame Reversed

Burnished gold, aged bronze patinaed by the firelight
singed by sullen Sol, not stayed by Poseidon's hand;
aflame, aflame, the tall ship burns, see the masts ignite.

Unpenitent the sky rains ash blackening the night
the fire sends a smoky pall upon the sea and land
burnished gold, aged bronze patinaed by the firelight.

Fire eats the air, it snuffs man's breath, death maybe their plight,
yet, all hands come to the Captains call, his to command
aflame, aflame, the tall ship burns, see the masts ignite.

Hell's inferno's come a calling on this sun lit night
a foul wind blows, the fire roars, and so the flames are fanned
burnished gold, aged bronze patinaed by the firelight.

Without their ship, the crew were lost, debtors they'd alight
they went up like straw scarecrows shriven by the brand
aflame, aflame, the tall ships burn, see their masts ignite.

Burning cinders catch the dock, the workers run in fright.
Pain and heart ache fill the wharf still they must disband.
Burnished gold, aged bronze patinaed by the firelight
aflame, aflame, the tall ship burns, see the masts ignite.


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Yamin Avatar
September 2, 2013 at 12:46 PM
An awesome write to win the Reverse Poem Contest of Craig Cornish on 8/27/2013. I haven't seen something like this written, lately. Congrats! -Mohammad
Onclaud Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 11:26 PM
blazing all over, debbie... sweet congrats on your win!..:) huggs
Ryerson Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 5:07 PM
A freakin villanelle reverse poem?...No way cher!... I must be hallucinating but I SWEAR I haven't dropped acid in years...
Dietrich Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 2:57 PM
wow, a villanelle no less!! that's what I call an achievement. Awesome win with your stunning poem, Debs.
Kendrick Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 10:58 AM
Congrats on your creative winning work..I think this is one of the best..The repeating lines lend to easier reading backwards and forwards..Sara
Crisci Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 9:41 AM
Big congratulations on your win, Debbie! I love the images of a ship aflame. Great action is felt throughout the poem as if I were there watching the masts ignite! Best Wishes. have a wonderful weekend. Peace & Love, Andrew.
Macfarlane Avatar
August 28, 2013 at 9:59 AM
A sizzling write and win!
A   Avatar
August 28, 2013 at 9:06 AM
good going DG... PD
Lamoureux Avatar
August 28, 2013 at 7:21 AM
Haunting quality to this piece. Congratulations.
Adams Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 6:22 PM
beautiful! congrats on your win!
Morgan Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 6:18 PM
Congrats to you on your win. Morgan
May Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 4:09 PM
congrats on a great win Debbie
Jones Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 4:06 PM
Ah....wonderful....congratulations....
May Avatar
August 26, 2013 at 1:41 PM
great write.....I like the form you used ...
Goff Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 3:37 PM
My fave...read in reverse! My fave lines....13/14/15....LINE 16 is the best line on soup I have read....to mine faves....A REAL soup classic! Needs to be published....I can see you worked hard on this, love....BRAVO! jimbo
Goff Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 9:09 AM
A glowing image! Beautiful, Deb! jimbo
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