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Adventures of a Rakish Teenage Heel

In the springtime when the carnival comes to town On the dizzying tilt-a-whirl and fearsome Ferris wheel, The haunting calliope in the musical merry-go-round Calls to mind the adventures of a rakish teenage heel. On the dizzying tilt-a-whirl and fearsome Ferris wheel, She snuggles in, grabs my hand, head on my shoulder Calls to mind the adventures of a rakish teenage heel Back seat of my sedan in the parking lot, feeling bolder. She snuggles in, grabs my hand, head on my shoulder The haunting calliope in the musical merry-go-round Back seat of my sedan in the parking lot, feeling bolder In the springtime when the carnival comes to town. In the springtime when the carnival comes to town On the dizzying tilt-a-whirl and fearsome Ferris wheel, The haunting calliope in the musical merry-go-round Calls to mind the adventures of a rakish teenage heel. SECOND PLACE WINNER Reworked and Modified Pantoum on May 9, 2021 for "Say It Again" Poetry Contest sponsored by William Kekaula FIRST PLACE WINNER Submitted to "Your Choice" Poetry Contest Sponsored by Briand Strand March 12, 2021

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/17/2021 2:35:00 PM

this is light and fun and SO awesome. Congrats for the win, Milt.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/16/2021 11:10:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a fun write. Have a blessed day with your win...............

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/17/2021 7:02:00 PM

Thanks, Paula, I appreciate your read and your comment.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/15/2021 10:24:00 PM

Congratulations!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/16/2021 8:45:00 AM

Thanks so much Christuraj. I had no idea the poem would receive such an accolade. Glad you enjoyed it.

Kim Merryman

Date: 5/15/2021 7:19:00 PM

A well written Pantoum, Milton! I remember carnival days or state fairs many, many years ago. Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/15/2021 7:37:00 PM

Thanks, Kim. I certainly appreciate your encouraging thoughts and comments.

Hilo Poet

Date: 5/15/2021 5:38:00 PM

Ah, memories of the circus and borrowed parent car years--seamstress mom knows leather, ere those you mentioned, happened in college days--an ocean away. Yours probably is the best pantoum that I've read, cheers my friend on your deserving placement, Aloha!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/15/2021 6:39:00 PM

Thanks so much, William. To place so high in one of your contests is a rare pleasure. I loved your contest. You're too kind..."the best pantoum that I've read" is an awesome compliment!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/10/2021 8:52:00 AM

On a small island like mine, it's rare to get a circus. I love your pantoum. I have used it often. You did well.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/10/2021 10:20:00 AM

Victor, I appreciated your visit. Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 5/9/2021 3:53:00 PM

You have taken a very difficult form and aced it Milton. I remembered the days of circus , merry go rounds, and teenage life. Many great memories, Life was good back then. Thanks for the smiles. :)

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/9/2021 4:44:00 PM

Thanks so much for your kind encouragement, Mystic Rose Rose. Those were fun times, indeed, and the poem brought back many memories. I hope it will do the same for everyone who reads it.