Adrift the Mist

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i remember most your eyes the way they always seemed to follow me then left me in a sudden haste drown at the altar of nostalgia alone in my bog of memories you didn't mean to die but left me adrift in the misty silences of yesterday's waterlily remnants AP: 1st place 2020 Submitted on August 31, 2020 for contest SONG I - COLD - QUIET NOW sponsored by ROB CARMACK - RANKED 4TH

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/24/2020 10:44:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I love your line, "alone in my bog of memories." In life all we have left are our memories. A wonderful write. Enjoy your day and win..........

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/24/2020 1:52:00 PM

Thank you so much, Paula. Most appreciated ~

Eve Roper

Date: 9/23/2020 9:35:00 PM

sad verse, Line, well done. congratulations on your win.

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/23/2020 6:26:00 PM

Congratulations on your Win, Line.!! A lovely succinct Win. Very valuable words 'altar of nostalgia' sound beautiful.

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/23/2020 9:27:00 PM

Thank you very much, Sigrid. Most appreciated.

Rob Carmack

Date: 9/23/2020 5:33:00 PM

The waterlily - the pupil and iris for just behind them - the memories of which his eyes are the most. Not sure if this was your intention, but it is where your poem took me. Congrats.

Line Gauthier
Date: 9/23/2020 9:29:00 PM

Thank, Rob. Much appreciated.