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Adam and Eve

‘.’’’…………..’’. Lush Eden was the garden of Eve Bored with Adam, she took a leave The snake enticed her with red apples And got rich selling creamy truffles Adam formed a new wife from clay Not asking the Master, he needed a ray But other men admired this woman slim Adam's disobedience, another original sin? © * this is just for fun..according to TPS, " a clerihew is usually whimsical, showing the subject from an unusual point of view;but it is hardly ever satirical, abusive or obscene." ‘’’’ ‘ ‘’’’’ P.D.’s Battle of the Clerihew By nette onclaud

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Kim Merryman

Date: 1/29/2012 3:43:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Nette. Love, Kim

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/28/2012 9:35:00 AM

congrats Nette luv on an awesome win for this cool and clerver Clerihew.. perfect one..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/27/2012 8:16:00 PM

Hey, I remember yours, Nette, the new look at Adam and Eve. Congrats on the winners circle and how are you doing these days?

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 1/27/2012 11:46:00 AM

Nice one,Nette.Congratulations on your win...

David Williams

Date: 1/27/2012 8:50:00 AM

Nette congrats on your win..David

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/27/2012 7:22:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in P.D.'s "Double Contest" Nette. Love, Carol

Gwendolen Song

Date: 1/27/2012 5:25:00 AM

There is so much depth to this winning clerihew, Nette. Your intellect makes this one shine. Loved it on day one!! Gwendolen

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/27/2012 1:08:00 AM

NETTE, CONGRATULATIONS with your wonderful win in my contest* hugs ;-)~p.d... ~~ps~~ I WAS THINKING OF USING ADAM AND EVE..LOL.. YOU BEAT ME TO IT... AND YES YOU DID A LOVELY FORM.. EXCEPT ON YOUR START.. YOUR ONLY SUPPOSE TO USE THE NAME.. ON FIRST LINE.. NOT A WHOLE DESCRIPTION... STILL LOVE IT... made me smile

David Williams

Date: 1/26/2012 12:19:00 PM

Nette great job, well done..David

Jack Horne

Date: 1/25/2012 2:10:00 PM

Lovely fun piece, Nette - hope Soup Admin do something about the anonymous poison pen

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 1/25/2012 10:17:00 AM

A special view of the old story that never fails to fascinate. A wonderful entry for the contest Nette.

Debra Squyres

Date: 1/25/2012 8:36:00 AM

I see the comments, under others comments. Two below...wasn't aware someone other than the owner of the page could comment under someone's comment. If that makes sense. This clerihew is different than the others I read, but cute and points to ponder. Enjoyed !!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/25/2012 8:22:00 AM

well seems comments have bwewn removed Nette luv.. we all enjoy your fantastic poetry.. do not dwell ..just ignore unkind critique.. your words are creative and special my friend.. continue to entertain us all..

Gwendolen Song

Date: 1/25/2012 5:04:00 AM

Morning Nette, I find it odd that someone could make anonymous remarks like they have below..It seems that someone has nothing more important to do..This poem is very cute and laced with biblical fruit..I don't think anyone tackled Adam and Eve..The note at the bottom was very helpful too.GWendolen

Harry Horsman

Date: 1/25/2012 4:10:00 AM

Oh to have been in the garden of Eden. i just love apples! love this nette, it's different, and thought provoking. harry

Andrew Crisci

Date: 1/25/2012 12:23:00 AM

Eh, Nette...wasn't Adam the only Man in Eden? If that were true, Eve must have been very beautiful to have so many admires! I love how you penned this witty Clerihew. Good luck with the contest. Hugs, Andrew.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/24/2012 11:00:00 PM

Nette. I enjoyed your creativity here. Why did he form a new wife? Eve was his one and only!! haha

Russell Sivey

Date: 1/24/2012 2:00:00 PM

I loved the creativity is this write Nette! It's quite the intuitive way to go about the subject! Awesome Work!!

John Loving Iii

Date: 1/24/2012 11:19:00 AM

I can't...no I won't comment.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/24/2012 9:08:00 AM

Interesting thoughts penned about the Beginning..Don't think that it happened that way but great imagination..Reads like winning material.Glad that you took the time to read my lastest work..Your presence at my work was uplifting...Sara

Kash Poet

Date: 1/24/2012 4:25:00 AM

enjoyed the humour very much Nette.Nice Clerihew here.Best wishes.

Date: 1/24/2012 11:21:00 AM

Nothing funny about it

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/24/2012 2:33:00 AM

Well done....cute and funny....love it. oxox love Anne-Lise

Date: 1/24/2012 11:20:00 AM

Your joking of course.

M.I.A .

Date: 1/24/2012 1:53:00 AM

creamy truffles?! Oh, that is so witty of you. I love this piece yours nette, you are soo talented dear poet. good luck on the contest and thanks for the visit.