Nette Onclaud Poet Clerihew

Adam and Eve

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Lush Eden was the garden of Eve
Bored with Adam, she took a leave
The snake enticed her with red apples
And got rich selling creamy truffles

Adam formed a new wife from clay
Not asking the Master, he needed a ray
But other men admired this woman slim
Adam's disobedience, another original sin?

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* this is just for fun..according to TPS, 
" a clerihew is usually whimsical, showing the subject
from an unusual point of view;but it is hardly ever satirical,
abusive or obscene."

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P.D.’s Battle of the Clerihew
By nette onclaud

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Kim Merryman January 29, 2012 at 3:43 PM Congrats on your win, Nette. Love, Kim

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 28, 2012 at 9:35 AM congrats Nette luv on an awesome win for this cool and clerver Clerihew.. perfect one..

Andrea Dietrich January 27, 2012 at 8:16 PM Hey, I remember yours, Nette, the new look at Adam and Eve. Congrats on the winners circle and how are you doing these days?

Olusegun Arowolo January 27, 2012 at 11:46 AM Nice one,Nette.Congratulations on your win...

David Williams January 27, 2012 at 8:50 AM Nette congrats on your win..David

Carol Sunshine Brown January 27, 2012 at 7:22 AM Congratulations on your placement in P.D.'s "Double Contest" Nette. Love, Carol

Gwendolen Song January 27, 2012 at 5:25 AM There is so much depth to this winning clerihew, Nette. Your intellect makes this one shine. Loved it on day one!! Gwendolen

Poet Destroyer A January 27, 2012 at 1:08 AM NETTE, CONGRATULATIONS with your wonderful win in my contest* hugs ;-)~p.d... ~~ps~~ I WAS THINKING OF USING ADAM AND EVE..LOL.. YOU BEAT ME TO IT... AND YES YOU DID A LOVELY FORM.. EXCEPT ON YOUR START.. YOUR ONLY SUPPOSE TO USE THE NAME.. ON FIRST LINE.. NOT A WHOLE DESCRIPTION... STILL LOVE IT... made me smile

David Williams January 26, 2012 at 12:19 PM Nette great job, well done..David

Jack Horne January 25, 2012 at 2:10 PM Lovely fun piece, Nette - hope Soup Admin do something about the anonymous poison pen

Elizabeth Wesley January 25, 2012 at 10:17 AM A special view of the old story that never fails to fascinate. A wonderful entry for the contest Nette.

Debra Squyres January 25, 2012 at 8:36 AM I see the comments, under others comments. Two below...wasn't aware someone other than the owner of the page could comment under someone's comment. If that makes sense. This clerihew is different than the others I read, but cute and points to ponder. Enjoyed !!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 25, 2012 at 8:22 AM well seems comments have bwewn removed Nette luv.. we all enjoy your fantastic poetry.. do not dwell ..just ignore unkind critique.. your words are creative and special my friend.. continue to entertain us all..

Gwendolen Song January 25, 2012 at 5:04 AM Morning Nette, I find it odd that someone could make anonymous remarks like they have below..It seems that someone has nothing more important to do..This poem is very cute and laced with biblical fruit..I don't think anyone tackled Adam and Eve..The note at the bottom was very helpful too.GWendolen

Harry Horsman January 25, 2012 at 4:10 AM Oh to have been in the garden of Eden. i just love apples! love this nette, it's different, and thought provoking. harry

Andrew Crisci January 25, 2012 at 12:23 AM Eh, Nette...wasn't Adam the only Man in Eden? If that were true, Eve must have been very beautiful to have so many admires! I love how you penned this witty Clerihew. Good luck with the contest. Hugs, Andrew.

Andrea Dietrich January 24, 2012 at 11:00 PM Nette. I enjoyed your creativity here. Why did he form a new wife? Eve was his one and only!! haha

Russell Sivey January 24, 2012 at 2:00 PM I loved the creativity is this write Nette! It's quite the intuitive way to go about the subject! Awesome Work!!

John Loving Iii January 24, 2012 at 11:19 AM I can't...no I won't comment.

Sara Kendrick January 24, 2012 at 9:08 AM Interesting thoughts penned about the Beginning..Don't think that it happened that way but great imagination..Reads like winning material.Glad that you took the time to read my lastest work..Your presence at my work was uplifting...Sara

Kash Poet January 24, 2012 at 4:25 AM enjoyed the humour very much Nette.Nice Clerihew here.Best wishes. January 24, 2012 at 11:21 AM Nothing funny about it

Anne-Lise Andresen January 24, 2012 at 2:33 AM Well done....cute and funny....love it. oxox love Anne-Lise January 24, 2012 at 11:20 AM Your joking of course.

M.I.A . January 24, 2012 at 1:53 AM creamy truffles?! Oh, that is so witty of you. I love this piece yours nette, you are soo talented dear poet. good luck on the contest and thanks for the visit.