Across the universe

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Written: June 1st, 2025 for contest by Charles Messina 8 Syllables per line, checked by HMS.COM *************** Flashing stars blush when caught—ignite Through blue rock darts in sparkling light "Across the universe"—swart crown Pools of grief—waves of mirth are down Scribes bid adieu in sapphire smoke Spilling gold in a dying stroke I doubt whether the sky still roused The stars that once blazed and have doused

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Paige Hind

Date: 6/1/2025 6:40:00 PM

Woah!! Gorgeous, Sotto. I love the opening stanza.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/1/2025 11:38:00 AM

What a great job you did here! It's the one new contest I need to look into.

Silent One

Date: 6/1/2025 11:22:00 AM

This is such a delicately woven poem, rich in imagery and emotion. I love how you personify the stars in the first line, “Flashing stars blush when caught—ignite”—it’s so vivid and immediate, almost like the universe is shy under observation. Your use of colour and movement throughout “blue rock darts,” “sapphire smoke,” “spilling gold” makes the cosmos feel alive, but also tinged with melancholy.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/1/2025 10:51:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Across the universe" write. Great Picture... "Good Luck" Have a fun day writing away..........