Absence of Light

There is a darkness in my life, 
a forecast of torrential rain that drowns my heart with sorrow,
and its gloom clouds my mind, 
washing away any hope for tomorrow,

This darkness overshadows me, 
eclipsing whatever light that remains within my soul, 
and the more I try to fight it,
the less I feel in control,

Tears spill onto my cheeks, 
tracing the outlines of a smile seldom shown, 
as I sit alone in this cave of a home, 
hidden from the world and hardening like stone, 

It's as if I'm dying inside, 
trapped within the confines of an epidermis tomb, 
while my cries for help echo through the barrenness of my existence, 
resonating with apprise of my impending doom, 

But in this aphotic zone in the depths of my core, 
my words are a sconce on the walls of my heart, 
illuminating the halls of my soul, 
so that others may navigate their way through the dark.
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Date: 3/20/2024 8:46:00 AM
Dear shane, apologies for the late visit to your page, and i must say im not disappointed with what ive read, i always enjoy and appreciate a poem that speaks from the heart, and touches readers soul, this one flows with sincere emotions woven in the most poetic manner with clever diction and metaphors and depth, i really love how youv described darkness that overshadows, I believe to accept light sometimes we do need to accept the darkness within too: what a profound write! Pleasure reading.FAV
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Shane Thacker
Date: 3/27/2024 4:41:00 PM
Thank you so much for the kind words, Empress. It's truly a pleasure to share my writings with all of you on Soup. It means so much that would not only read it, but to leave a comment, as well. Thank you again!
Date: 3/1/2024 12:46:00 AM
How challenging Shane..' also for me in commenting, there is a challenge..My best Wishes to you, may you be fired with inspiration In your writing.'
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Shane Thacker
Date: 3/27/2024 4:32:00 PM
Thank you, Joe. Thanks for the encouraging and motivating comment!
Date: 2/14/2024 6:08:00 PM
In your poem, you paint a picture of desperation. A lantern running low on oil and seemingly Non available at any price. Yet there is hope, for the voice of your heart and soul realizes that their voice can be heard through your poetry. We hear you and all those that cry out through the written word. Our thoughts and prayers, we hope will comfort. Thanks for sharing this deeply emotional and personal poem with us. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Shane Thacker
Date: 2/14/2024 7:41:00 PM
Thank you, Bill. Writing has been such a wonderful outlet for me. It's been a life-raft to cling too, but it's the connection with all of you that pulls me to safety. I can't express how much it means to me.
Date: 2/12/2024 8:34:00 AM
Wow this very creative awesome eriting
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Shane Thacker
Date: 2/12/2024 9:14:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate you.
Date: 2/12/2024 8:34:00 AM
Wow this very creative awesome eriting
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Date: 2/11/2024 1:00:00 PM
Dear Shane, The opening line immediately plunges the reader into your emotional darkness, using powerful imagery of drowning hearts and clouded minds. The repetition of "darkness" emphasizes the weight it carries, while the struggle for control adds a layer of desperation. The line "as if I'm dying inside" is particularly impactful, conveying the depth of your pain. Yet, even in the "zone” you find a flicker of hope through your words, a beacon for others struggling in the dark. Wonderful Read! Blessing- Daniel
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Shane Thacker
Date: 2/11/2024 1:20:00 PM
Thank you, Daniel. You're too kind. I appreciate that you read it and took the time to leave a comment. It was a very personal poem, and one that I'm proud of, so it's a pleasure to share it with all of you.
Date: 2/11/2024 12:59:00 PM
You have permeated a very dark veil with your poem Shane. Excellent writing. its all wonderful but the 4th stanza is a stand-out for me. You have excelled in capturing the essence of the required theme. Best wishes for the contest, it should do extremely well. Cheers Wen.
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Shane Thacker
Date: 2/11/2024 1:16:00 PM
Thank you so much, Wen. Your feedback always means a lot to me. As we've spoken about before, the contest ignited a spark which helped me to write, and that's the best part of it all. Good luck to you as well!
Date: 2/11/2024 10:21:00 AM
Deeply expressed my thoughts are depressive disorder you are never alone many blessings such bravery I adored reading your fine poem
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Shane Thacker
Date: 2/11/2024 10:36:00 AM
Thank you, Yolanda. I appreciate you taking the time to read it and for leaving a comment.
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