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Abrasions of Lost Love

Reality pangs my existence,
Every breath chokes my dreams.
What am I without you?

Nothing but a lone...desolate soul,
Living in a scraped sheet of skin.
Marked with incisions of past hurts.

I feel completely alone,
Abandoned in the corners of reality.
Numb...longing your affection.

Here I am once again...
Crouched on the bathroom floor.
Knowing this is the last time I will miss you.



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*Note: A poem on suicide

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James Fraser Date: 12/26/2009 5:51:00 AM Heartfelt and sad piece Raul, and i do hope this is just another write to add to your portfolio and not a thought in your mind >> James Login to Reply

Tamra Amato Date: 12/20/2009 3:59:00 PM Thank you for sharing this excellent poem. Very painful and true ... lost love. Writing poetry saves my life over and over... I sincerely want to read more of yours. Login to Reply

Doris Culverhouse Date: 12/18/2009 6:28:00 PM sounds final and desperate, good write, sad topic, no one should go there!! Login to Reply

Caroline Cécile Delacroix Date: 12/14/2009 4:02:00 PM Ohm how poignant a write, the emotions, the devastation and longing is felt deeply through the lines. Awesome poetry. Thank you for sharing. Caroline. Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 12/12/2009 3:13:00 PM So sad but so well phrased Raul.. many feel that is the only answer ... there is another route to living life... and we are getting ready to celebrate His birthday in a few days... thankxxx for sharing this poignant poem tonight... blessings ... luv... Linda-Marie, "Sweetheart" of P.S. Login to Reply

Laura Mckenzie Date: 12/10/2009 8:59:00 PM Ah wow painful love ,this is so vivid my friend well done you took me there with full emotions right till the end! Laura :) Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 12/10/2009 2:44:00 PM You have found the deeper side of lost love....so painful for some, there seems no light left to live for. So often with younger people...lost love feels so final...if only they would see that life offers a bright future...the pain does ease given time, and then one can see with new perspective. Especially this time of year loss can be so very hard....the depth of this is crying in truth of that pain. So Well written. Love, Carrie Login to Reply

Audrey Haick Date: 12/10/2009 2:32:00 PM Raul, this is really deep. A very sad poem about despair. I sincerely hope this is not personal. Love and peace, Audrey Login to Reply

Chris Goombi Date: 12/10/2009 12:57:00 PM It's sad to know people get to this point. You have opened my eyes in a new way. CG Login to Reply

Abe Lopez Date: 12/10/2009 12:55:00 PM a very emotional read ......... RM Login to Reply

Tyler Martin Date: 12/10/2009 12:05:00 PM You put the reader in the sorrow of this piece, the perspective is articulated well, nice work. Login to Reply

Michael Jordan Date: 12/10/2009 12:04:00 PM Raul, if you were going for deep I think you have succeeded - Its rather sad when people reach this point - I am one who takes breakups pretty hard - I hope this is not a reflection of your personal feelings because you mean a great deal to a number of people; myself included. Merry Christmas & God Bless, mj Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 12/10/2009 11:54:00 AM Ow Raul ,this is deep and Sad,you send the reader to a journey in a desperate moment of pain and loss,to a moment of death..excellent work,and glad its just a poem..Bravo--Charma Login to Reply