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Frail leaves fall...I sweep them to the back of my mind. _____________________ Contest: Monoku Madness Sponsor: John Hamilton Placed 2nd © 18th August, 2016

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Sarban Bhattacharya

Date: 9/12/2016 10:26:00 AM

It is a wonderful epigram. Keep writing, Paul. I want to read you more.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/13/2016 12:37:00 PM

Thank you for yet another visit, Sarban; your comments are much appreciated. // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 8/31/2016 4:27:00 PM

So deceptively simple and yet ... a light goes off in my mind and I instantly know the feeling. You have the humble skill of some of greats in haiku / monoku, Paul. Excellent one-liner to say the least.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2016 5:18:00 AM

Good morning Timothy! Pleased to have you stopping by; I take it you're a busy man these days:) Looking forward to seeing a new post of yours. All the best, my friend. Regards // paul

Red Fiery

Date: 8/23/2016 9:07:00 PM

How i missed your poems....ur amazing in everything you do...swept my mind away again with this ...7/7..hugs Red

Paul Callus
Date: 8/24/2016 2:46:00 PM

How lovely to have you stopping by, Red! Thank you for the generous comments and high rating:) It's good to see you posting again....hugs ~ paul

Laura Hay

Date: 8/23/2016 5:02:00 PM

WOW, amazing!!! A fantastic 7, Warm Regards, Laura.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2016 5:51:00 PM

That's quite an encouraging reaction, Laura!! You are too kind. Thank you:) ~ Warm regards // paul

Lu Loo

Date: 8/23/2016 4:07:00 PM

Paul, loved this one, very true and wise...congrats on your placement! :)-luloo

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2016 5:32:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Laura:) Pleased to see your entry on the winners' list! Best regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 8/23/2016 3:46:00 PM

wow, so much said in so few words. Amazing write, my friend

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2016 5:30:00 PM

Pleased that you found it to your liking, Jack:) Always a pleasure to have you stopping by, my friend! Regards // paul

John Fleming

Date: 8/23/2016 1:11:00 AM

Reminds me ever so much of Ezra Pound. Indeed old Eza would have been proud to have wrote this line...Superb, Paul! My very best regards - As always! :) john P s A 7+

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2016 5:22:00 PM

Hi John! It's a pleasure to see you back, and making waves with your potd! Thank you for the lovely comments and high rating; you are too kind! Regards // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/22/2016 8:40:00 PM

To think Paul that it is just this morning that I am saying to James that I wish us to walk on falling foliage, and i ask if can i roll or toss them up to the air like a kid so carefree... Hahahah i see you won! But am so sure your poems will always be recognized... They are lovely Paul and I can still remember the first poem i read from yours: sweet memory.. Hugs and smiles, olive eloisa :)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2016 8:36:00 AM

Hi Olive_eloi:) ..emm Mrs Fraser...It is so lovely to have you back commenting in your inimitable style:) I appreciate your feedback; shows you read and search for hidden meanings, too. Yes, Sweet Memory was one of the first, though I have a feeling there was Light & Dark prior to that:):) Hugs and smiles to you too:) Warm regards ~ paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 8/22/2016 8:42:00 PM

Let me say comment regarding the poem: maybe im wrong but i say there is something deep with the last words of your poem sweeping to the back of my mind and frail leaves... Frail leaves... I can interpret this in two ways... But maybe am wrong... :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 8/22/2016 8:42:00 PM

The title is clever too!

Sonia Walker

Date: 8/22/2016 7:37:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your winning 'Monoku Madness' poem. It is a clean sweep for sure. All the best, Sonia

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2016 8:28:00 AM

I like your witty, pleasant comments, Sonia:) Thank you for a lovely visit! Regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/22/2016 3:49:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 5:11:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. All the best & hugs :) paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/22/2016 2:02:00 PM

ohhh, love the imagery here, paul.. my sweet congrats and huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 5:08:00 PM

Many thanks, Nette; pleased that we're standing on the same podium:) Hugs // paul

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 8/22/2016 9:45:00 AM

Sweeping the leaves is so real and beautiful,Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 4:54:00 PM

Thank you, Sara. pleased that you found beauty in it:) Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/22/2016 8:51:00 AM

I see from the comments that this is a winning piece. I commend John on his excellent taste.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 4:52:00 PM

And I commend you for the nice choice of words, Richard:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/22/2016 7:10:00 AM

Oh I am so glad to see this place high Paul. Back to congratulate you on your win! 7 ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 4:35:00 PM

Thank you for coming back with lovely remarks and congrats, Connie. I do appreciate it:) Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 8/22/2016 1:49:00 AM

Excellent metaphor and well said. Thanks for sharing it.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 4:26:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Ravi! Best regards // paul

Janis Thompson

Date: 8/21/2016 10:53:00 PM

Congratulations. Well written.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 12:08:00 PM

Thank you Janis; lovely of you to stop by. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/21/2016 8:16:00 PM

wow, this was really good, Paul. Love seeing these winners. Congrats.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 12:07:00 PM

Thank you lots, Andrea. All the best. // paul

David Mohn

Date: 8/21/2016 8:14:00 PM

congrats Paul...very introspective

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 12:05:00 PM

Thank you David. All the best. // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/21/2016 7:54:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your nice win in the Monoku contest! Great metaphor. Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 11:41:00 AM

Thank you, Sandra; pleased to see you next to me on the podium:) Regards // paul

Joseph May

Date: 8/21/2016 6:26:00 PM

Great monoku Paul ... Congrats on your win

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 11:39:00 AM

Thank you Joseph. Best regards // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/21/2016 4:53:00 PM

Hi Paul, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your fine win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis P.S, Thanks for wishing me a pain free weekend. Unfortunately I'm still suffering from a toothache my friend. It's a long story: -) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 11:22:00 AM

Thank you, Alexis; pleased to be sharing the same podium with you:) Sorry about that toothache...hope it won't be a long hurtful story:( Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 8/21/2016 4:23:00 PM

Would be nice to sweep those leaves:-) congratulations on your win Hugs Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 11:20:00 AM

I'll bring along a spare broom, Eve:) Thank you for a pleasant visit! Regards & hugs // paul

John Hamilton

Date: 8/21/2016 4:10:00 PM

Loved this one Paul thanks for your quality entry!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 11:13:00 AM

I am glad that you liked it, John; pleased with my high placement, too. All the best. // paul

Laura Leiser

Date: 8/21/2016 3:43:00 PM

I love the thought provoking message in your fine Monoku, Paul! Excellent:)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2016 11:10:00 AM

Thank you for the 'excellent' comment, Laura. Glad you enjoyed it. ~ Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/21/2016 1:08:00 PM

Very well written, dear. Some things must never be swept away...though they may cause pain. Enjoyed reading you again. Thanks for your many visits....

Paul Callus
Date: 8/21/2016 2:23:00 PM

Thank you for your visits, too, Eileen. Unknowingly, what we sweep away is still there waiting to emerge at an appropriate moment in time. Hugs // paul