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Aborted Dreams

Frail leaves fall...I sweep them to the back of my mind.

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Contest: Monoku Madness
Sponsor: John Hamilton
Placed 2nd
© 18th August, 2016

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2016

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Sarban Bhattacharya Date: 9/12/2016 10:26:00 AM It is a wonderful epigram. Keep writing, Paul. I want to read you more. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/13/2016 12:37:00 PM Thank you for yet another visit, Sarban; your comments are much appreciated. // paul

Timothy Hicks Date: 8/31/2016 4:27:00 PM So deceptively simple and yet ... a light goes off in my mind and I instantly know the feeling. You have the humble skill of some of greats in haiku / monoku, Paul. Excellent one-liner to say the least. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/1/2016 5:18:00 AM Good morning Timothy! Pleased to have you stopping by; I take it you're a busy man these days:) Looking forward to seeing a new post of yours. All the best, my friend. Regards // paul

Red Fiery Date: 8/23/2016 9:07:00 PM How i missed your poems....ur amazing in everything you do...swept my mind away again with this ...7/7..hugs Red Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/24/2016 2:46:00 PM How lovely to have you stopping by, Red! Thank you for the generous comments and high rating:) It's good to see you posting again....hugs ~ paul

Laura Hay Date: 8/23/2016 5:02:00 PM WOW, amazing!!! A fantastic 7, Warm Regards, Laura. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2016 5:51:00 PM That's quite an encouraging reaction, Laura!! You are too kind. Thank you:) ~ Warm regards // paul

Beautiful Scars Date: 8/23/2016 4:07:00 PM Paul, loved this one, very true and wise...congrats on your placement! :)-luloo Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2016 5:32:00 PM Thank you for reading and liking, Laura:) Pleased to see your entry on the winners' list! Best regards // paul

Jack Horne Date: 8/23/2016 3:46:00 PM wow, so much said in so few words. Amazing write, my friend Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2016 5:30:00 PM Pleased that you found it to your liking, Jack:) Always a pleasure to have you stopping by, my friend! Regards // paul

John Fleming Date: 8/23/2016 1:11:00 AM Reminds me ever so much of Ezra Pound. Indeed old Eza would have been proud to have wrote this line...Superb, Paul! My very best regards - As always! :) john P s A 7+ Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2016 5:22:00 PM Hi John! It's a pleasure to see you back, and making waves with your potd! Thank you for the lovely comments and high rating; you are too kind! Regards // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 8/22/2016 8:40:00 PM To think Paul that it is just this morning that I am saying to James that I wish us to walk on falling foliage, and i ask if can i roll or toss them up to the air like a kid so carefree... Hahahah i see you won! But am so sure your poems will always be recognized... They are lovely Paul and I can still remember the first poem i read from yours: sweet memory.. Hugs and smiles, olive eloisa :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2016 8:36:00 AM Hi Olive_eloi:) ..emm Mrs Fraser...It is so lovely to have you back commenting in your inimitable style:) I appreciate your feedback; shows you read and search for hidden meanings, too. Yes, Sweet Memory was one of the first, though I have a feeling there was Light & Dark prior to that:):) Hugs and smiles to you too:) Warm regards ~ paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 8/22/2016 8:42:00 PM Let me say comment regarding the poem: maybe im wrong but i say there is something deep with the last words of your poem sweeping to the back of my mind and frail leaves... Frail leaves... I can interpret this in two ways... But maybe am wrong... :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 8/22/2016 8:42:00 PM The title is clever too!

Sonia Walker Date: 8/22/2016 7:37:00 PM Paul, congratulations on your winning 'Monoku Madness' poem. It is a clean sweep for sure. All the best, Sonia Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2016 8:28:00 AM I like your witty, pleasant comments, Sonia:) Thank you for a lovely visit! Regards // paul

Jan Allison Date: 8/22/2016 3:49:00 PM Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 5:11:00 PM Thank you, Jan. All the best & hugs :) paul

Nette Onclaud Date: 8/22/2016 2:02:00 PM ohhh, love the imagery here, paul.. my sweet congrats and huggs Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 5:08:00 PM Many thanks, Nette; pleased that we're standing on the same podium:) Hugs // paul

Sara Chansarkar Date: 8/22/2016 9:45:00 AM Sweeping the leaves is so real and beautiful,Paul! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 4:54:00 PM Thank you, Sara. pleased that you found beauty in it:) Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/22/2016 8:51:00 AM I see from the comments that this is a winning piece. I commend John on his excellent taste. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 4:52:00 PM And I commend you for the nice choice of words, Richard:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 8/22/2016 7:10:00 AM Oh I am so glad to see this place high Paul. Back to congratulate you on your win! 7 ; ) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 4:35:00 PM Thank you for coming back with lovely remarks and congrats, Connie. I do appreciate it:) Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 8/22/2016 1:49:00 AM Excellent metaphor and well said. Thanks for sharing it. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 4:26:00 PM Thank you for the lovely comments, Ravi! Best regards // paul

Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 8/21/2016 10:53:00 PM Congratulations. Well written. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 12:08:00 PM Thank you Janis; lovely of you to stop by. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/21/2016 8:16:00 PM wow, this was really good, Paul. Love seeing these winners. Congrats. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 12:07:00 PM Thank you lots, Andrea. All the best. // paul

David Mohn Date: 8/21/2016 8:14:00 PM congrats Paul...very introspective Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 12:05:00 PM Thank you David. All the best. // paul

Sandra Haight Date: 8/21/2016 7:54:00 PM Paul, congratulations on your nice win in the Monoku contest! Great metaphor. Sandra Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 11:41:00 AM Thank you, Sandra; pleased to see you next to me on the podium:) Regards // paul

Joseph May Date: 8/21/2016 6:26:00 PM Great monoku Paul ... Congrats on your win Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 11:39:00 AM Thank you Joseph. Best regards // paul

Alexis Y. Date: 8/21/2016 4:53:00 PM Hi Paul, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your fine win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis P.S, Thanks for wishing me a pain free weekend. Unfortunately I'm still suffering from a toothache my friend. It's a long story: -) Alexis Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 11:22:00 AM Thank you, Alexis; pleased to be sharing the same podium with you:) Sorry about that toothache...hope it won't be a long hurtful story:( Regards // paul

Eve Roper Date: 8/21/2016 4:23:00 PM Would be nice to sweep those leaves:-) congratulations on your win Hugs Eve Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 11:20:00 AM I'll bring along a spare broom, Eve:) Thank you for a pleasant visit! Regards & hugs // paul

John Hamilton Date: 8/21/2016 4:10:00 PM Loved this one Paul thanks for your quality entry! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 11:13:00 AM I am glad that you liked it, John; pleased with my high placement, too. All the best. // paul

Laura Leiser Date: 8/21/2016 3:43:00 PM I love the thought provoking message in your fine Monoku, Paul! Excellent:) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/22/2016 11:10:00 AM Thank you for the 'excellent' comment, Laura. Glad you enjoyed it. ~ Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian Date: 8/21/2016 1:08:00 PM Very well written, dear. Some things must never be swept away...though they may cause pain. Enjoyed reading you again. Thanks for your many visits.... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/21/2016 2:23:00 PM Thank you for your visits, too, Eileen. Unknowingly, what we sweep away is still there waiting to emerge at an appropriate moment in time. Hugs // paul

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