Robert Gorelick Poet Rhyme

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For Abandoned Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Constance La France
8/19/23

Abandoned

Awashed out from shore tempest tossed in the night
Behold sands once golden fade from sight
Alone I must plumb the depths of my sorrow
No one to be with if there is a tomorrow
Drenched are my spirits, a dark heavy toll
Overwhelmed is my vacant aching soul
No compass not guide nor north star above
Exiled into a land of dark clouds, no white dove
Dream sweetly my dear, my life, my love

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Constance La France September 12, 2023 at 5:30 PM Robert, beautiful poem and congratulations on your win in my contest, like the image, Constance

Christina Bowring August 27, 2023 at 8:25 PM A beautiful poem Robert that captures the sense, loss, emptiness of abandonment so well. Very moving indeed. So well written. I love the line, ‘ Beholds sands once golden fade from sight’ in particular. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you.

The Situation August 24, 2023 at 10:52 AM Sounnds like a prison she put you in. But it has excelence I just got twisted in the last line.

Anne-Lise Andresen August 23, 2023 at 10:46 AM - Congratulations with this moving Abandoned poem ... lovely written, Robert - Robert Gorelick August 23, 2023 at 3:53 PM Thank you for the read and the congratulations, Anne! Cheers, Robert

I Am Anaya August 22, 2023 at 8:55 PM Congratulations on your top win, Robert! Soulful and isolating stark reality! Love it Robert Gorelick August 23, 2023 at 4:03 PM Your commiserating words make such abandonment much more tolerant to bear. See you on land, Robert.

Paula Goldsmith August 22, 2023 at 2:17 PM Congratulations on your win. A creative Rhyme write. Pretty picture. I enjoyed reading it. Have a great day............. Robert Gorelick August 23, 2023 at 4:00 PM Thank you for the congratulations and the compliments. Glad you enjoyed, my executive secretary thanks you for noticing the picture. Have a great day! Robert

Hiya Sharma August 21, 2023 at 3:21 AM Such an immensely breathtaking, bewitching and moving take for the contest. I'm absolutely in awe of how creatively you've crafted the acrostic, whilst weaving a surreal tapestry of melancholic emotions and gloomy ambience.. This definitely touched my heart.. "No compass not guide nor North Star above", " Exiled into a land of dark clouds, no white dove" Soul stirring descriptions.. Robert Gorelick August 23, 2023 at 3:52 PM So many feel-like motherless children somehow born into exile, never really at home, sad comment on our times. Please I was able to connect with you the way I did. Your compliments appreciated, Robert.

Michael Tor August 19, 2023 at 8:23 PM Robert you have captured such an isolated dark lonely heartfelt write my friend. That captures the emotions and feelings of abandoned. Best wishes in this contest I think you did a marvelous effort in theme. Thanks for sharing... Robert Gorelick August 23, 2023 at 3:56 PM Communion seems to be the most soothing and therapeutic in the deep and shaded valleys of our hearts. Thank you, Michael for your abiding presence! Robert

Speaks Volumes August 19, 2023 at 2:06 PM Such a melancholy tale. To be lost and abandoned. So well told Robert. A sinking feeling as I read your emotion filled poem. BOL and best wishes. from SV Robert Gorelick August 19, 2023 at 5:17 PM A sensitive and well received take on my words. All the best, Robert