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Abandoned

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For Abandoned Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Constance La France
8/19/23

Awashed out from shore tempest tossed in the night Behold sands once golden fade from sight Alone I must plumb the depths of my sorrow No one to be with if there is a tomorrow Drenched are my spirits, a dark heavy toll Overwhelmed is my vacant aching soul No compass not guide nor north star above Exiled into a land of dark clouds, no white dove Dream sweetly my dear, my life, my love

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Constance La France

Date: 9/12/2023 5:30:00 PM

Robert, beautiful poem and congratulations on your win in my contest, like the image, Constance

Christina Bowring

Date: 8/27/2023 8:25:00 PM

A beautiful poem Robert that captures the sense, loss, emptiness of abandonment so well. Very moving indeed. So well written. I love the line, ‘ Beholds sands once golden fade from sight’ in particular. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you.

The Situation

Date: 8/24/2023 10:52:00 AM

Sounnds like a prison she put you in. But it has excelence I just got twisted in the last line.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/23/2023 10:46:00 AM

- Congratulations with this moving Abandoned poem ... lovely written, Robert -

Robert Gorelick
Date: 8/23/2023 3:53:00 PM

Thank you for the read and the congratulations, Anne! Cheers, Robert

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/22/2023 8:55:00 PM

Congratulations on your top win, Robert! Soulful and isolating stark reality! Love it

Robert Gorelick
Date: 8/23/2023 4:03:00 PM

Your commiserating words make such abandonment much more tolerant to bear. See you on land, Robert.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/22/2023 2:17:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. A creative Rhyme write. Pretty picture. I enjoyed reading it. Have a great day.............

Robert Gorelick
Date: 8/23/2023 4:00:00 PM

Thank you for the congratulations and the compliments. Glad you enjoyed, my executive secretary thanks you for noticing the picture. Have a great day! Robert

Hiya Sharma

Date: 8/21/2023 3:21:00 AM

Such an immensely breathtaking, bewitching and moving take for the contest. I'm absolutely in awe of how creatively you've crafted the acrostic, whilst weaving a surreal tapestry of melancholic emotions and gloomy ambience.. This definitely touched my heart.. "No compass not guide nor North Star above", " Exiled into a land of dark clouds, no white dove" Soul stirring descriptions..

Robert Gorelick
Date: 8/23/2023 3:52:00 PM

So many feel-like motherless children somehow born into exile, never really at home, sad comment on our times. Please I was able to connect with you the way I did. Your compliments appreciated, Robert.

Michael Tor

Date: 8/19/2023 8:23:00 PM

Robert you have captured such an isolated dark lonely heartfelt write my friend. That captures the emotions and feelings of abandoned. Best wishes in this contest I think you did a marvelous effort in theme. Thanks for sharing...

Robert Gorelick
Date: 8/23/2023 3:56:00 PM

Communion seems to be the most soothing and therapeutic in the deep and shaded valleys of our hearts. Thank you, Michael for your abiding presence! Robert

Speaks Volumes

Date: 8/19/2023 2:06:00 PM

Such a melancholy tale. To be lost and abandoned. So well told Robert. A sinking feeling as I read your emotion filled poem. BOL and best wishes. from SV

Robert Gorelick
Date: 8/19/2023 5:17:00 PM

A sensitive and well received take on my words. All the best, Robert