Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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A World of Boundless Black

In my distal conception you shine like a lucent star
whose touch fondles the fret and strings of my guitar.
An image worth painting in oils with my sable brush,
your voice like the recherche love song of a thrush.

You are the faint break of day in dawn's somber skies.
A sanctum of refuge in times of angst and weeping eyes.
My ardent lover, seducing me with each lustful thought.
You are life's pulse beating rhythmically within my heart.

If I am blinded tomorrow, visions of you I shall not lack.
And if I were entrapped in a world of boundless black,
wavering shadows would not fill my heart with fright,
for with you at my side, I would not have need of sight.

No demands would I make, but humbly I would beseech
you to please make me aware that you're within my reach.
You are the assuasive waves that quell my restless soul
and I, a brigantine moored in the shallows of your shoal.



November 12, 2022
2022 Marathon Mile 20 Contest
Sponsored by Mark Toney

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Susan Ashley November 24, 2022 at 5:18 PM Dear Lin, your poetic brilliance shines in the artistic facets of this metaphorical gem. Your wonderful rhymes and rich, textured imagery are exquisitely expressive of a romantic heart’s sincere surrender. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. I hope you’re enjoying a happy Thanksgiving. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan Lin Lane November 26, 2022 at 7:41 AM You flatter my lines, Susan, and for your support and encouragement, I am always grateful. It was written at a time in my life when I was vulnerable, but all is well now. My Thanksgiving was FanTurkeytastic! Hoping you celebrated with your family in equal measure!

Andrea Dietrich November 24, 2022 at 9:25 AM So beautiful and easy to see how it got a top spot. Congrats! Lin Lane November 26, 2022 at 7:40 AM Thank you for such a supportive comment, Andrea.

Mark Toney November 24, 2022 at 8:27 AM Lin, love your poetic world of boundless similes and metaphors, especially the entire first stanza and the last line "and I, a brigantine moored in the shallows of your shoal." Au mon Dieu ! Congratulations on your podium finish on Mile 20 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on because Mile 21 has already started. Also, check out my blog post to view your current standing in the Marathon. Lin Lane November 26, 2022 at 7:38 AM Thank you ever so much for valuing this poem as being worthy of a placement in Mile 20, Mark. I appreciate the 4th place standing at the moment, and since I missed running in the first 7 miles, I feel fortunate to be anywhere among the pack.

Darlene De Beaulieu April 25, 2018 at 8:12 PM hello Lin, I was really drawn in while reading thiw poem. have a nice evening my friend. Lin Lane April 25, 2018 at 8:45 PM Thanks for stopping by and leaving such a kind comment, Darlene.

John Hamilton April 22, 2018 at 3:08 PM This is stunning writing Lin, I'm speechless this has to be a fave! Lin Lane April 25, 2018 at 8:45 PM Your sincerity is never taken lightly, John. Thanks ever so much.

Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 5:10 PM Oh, I adore this Lin, (going into my favs for sure) ... I love nautical themes, as you know, but this is woven with an ethereal, romantic quality that is tinged with sensuality and deep, abiding affection - all my favorite qualities! This is one of my favorites of yours - love it - superb!! <3 Lin Lane April 25, 2018 at 8:44 PM Thank you for liking and faving this one, Greg. We learn about others through their creative poetry as well as through their comments.

Robert Lindley April 1, 2018 at 1:16 PM This to me represents not only a brilliant and beautiful sonnet but also one written from a truly deep and pure poetic heart! Every verse in perfect harmony and purpose.. A rare feat for any poet in my opinion. A fav and most worthy brilliant gem as well. Lin Lane April 25, 2018 at 8:44 PM Robert, your thoughts about this poem and my heart are greatly appreciated. I'm touched by your tenderness. Thank you.

Dale Gregory Cozart March 29, 2018 at 11:25 AM Your very literate word choices are absolutely beautiful. Fave. Lin Lane March 29, 2018 at 1:02 PM Thank you, vocabularian. It's your new title, Dale. ;-)

Frederic Parker March 28, 2018 at 5:47 PM Really touched by the form and execution of this sonnet my poetic friend...and you know how much I love sonnets...really like this one Lin Lane March 28, 2018 at 7:57 PM Thanks ever so much, Frederic. Coming from you, these comments are of great value to me.

Jan Allison March 28, 2018 at 1:08 PM wow Lin this is so beautiful and romantic with so many wonderful lines and the final couplet is so touching. I will never be able to write something so exquisite and i've learned several new words too! ! hugs jan xx Lin Lane March 28, 2018 at 7:56 PM I thank you, Jan, but I've no doubt you are capable of writing any genre' of poetry that you set your mind to write.