A Wish In Vain

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December.17.2024
Premiere V- Open Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Rob Carmack

 

( An old poem, slightly modified) How I wish my poems could, soar higher and higher like a bird of limitless wingspan, dashing into horizons far! But they skim like web footed water birds, tilting their wings in vain, unable to fly to any desired destination helplessly watching larks and eagles flying to the far edges of the sky. How I wish my poems could, sail across the limitless expanse like parting ships bound to distant lands carrying my fancies to the ends of the Earth! But they remain like paper boats set to sail by mischievous kids that drift hither n’ thither on muddy puddles. How I wish my poems could, wind their way down slopes and dales like a fountain stream running down to join the sea, travelling miles. But they slither like snakes, struggling to move on polished floors. How I wish my poems could, grow out from chrysalis to butterflies to flit around flowers and feed on nectar. But they ever remain such creepy worms, destined to hide behind blades of leaves. How I wish, like an inspired artist, I could paint on my canvas, with deft hands, the luster and glory of the setting sun, the freshness and beauty of the spring flowers the scary grandeur of the mountains the silence of the lonesome lagoon the dark majesty of the unlit groves the sunlit glades of trackless forests and scenes and sights, so varied and myriad that I could array before you in magic shades, the wonders of an unseen paradise! But, Alas! What I leave on my canvas is just a banal scene! My poems, like kites tangled, among the branches of trees are denied forward movement! Still I don’t regret my efforts….. Like the lyrics of a half forgotten melody, my poems delight me, in my sequestered hours of loneliness!

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Date: 12/22/2024 10:07:00 AM
Dear Valsa, we all wish to attain some high pinnacle of perfection. Not all are endowed with such talents and occasionally we even plummet down. Not your muse, I am sure. Happy Christmas.
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Date: 12/19/2024 3:59:00 AM
Valsa, what a beautiful expression and one that I share with you! Though it is extremely unlikely that I could develop the talent and/or the opportunity to be recognized, it matters not! I love to write, for me!! PS, you poetry is very beautiful xxoo
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Date: 12/18/2024 9:10:00 PM
To someone somewhere, you are a favorite poet. We all have talent. Your doing a great job. I like the introspection.
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Date: 12/18/2024 1:14:00 PM
wow, I hope Rob likes this one because it's so heartfelt and passionate. And it only proves how well you DO write!!!
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Date: 12/18/2024 10:20:00 AM
Valsa, this effort is very poetic. I like it.
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Date: 12/18/2024 9:55:00 AM
Beautiful masterpiece poem. My FAVE.
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Date: 12/18/2024 4:39:00 AM
just wonderful, a masterpiece, indeed, "one of your best" , your wishes are so touching, blessings poet
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Date: 12/17/2024 9:22:00 PM
Thanks for sharing your beautiful wishes Valsa, Your wishes are not in vain but are already documented in your beautiful write. Now all you will need to do is visualise them and they will manifest in mysterious ways you may not even realise. Besma wrote a beautiful poem on 30/9 called 'I wish' It is also posted on my Youtube channel. Now it is my turn to Wish you and your family a Merry and Joyful Christmas filled with peace, laughter and most of all the gift of health. Hugs Maria
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Date: 12/17/2024 9:04:00 PM
Dear sweet valsa, your poems are beautiful and all that you wish for your poems to be, you do havr them in your poems, but i think sometimes its good to be humble. I never read my poems again after posting, unless necessary cus i always find faults. And sometimes i dont know why, it is so hard to write in simple words for me. Strange. But anyway all i would like to say is, you are an amazing poet! Really, Seamless the way you write, and in this poem too how youv described things is beyond impressive! Keep writing and sharing! And because it resonates i would just Fave This! Sending you light today and always
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Date: 12/17/2024 9:09:00 AM
Valsa, I like the imagery you created for your poems to have been lifted to its max. Then explain that they were created on a canvas to come to life. Enjoyed reading. We all have the same spiritual inspiration. Good luck in the contest. Merry Christmas to you and yours
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Date: 12/17/2024 7:51:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful write.  You paint wonderful words on your canvas called poems. Hooray!!! "Good Luck"  Have a Blessed Day. Merry Christmas.......
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Date: 12/17/2024 12:08:00 AM
Your wish has been granted Valsa, you're a brilliant poet and you should be proud of your work. I sometimes come across a poem I'd written and find as I got better at writing, glaring errors jump out at me so I make a few changes and 'polish' it up a bit. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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