Paul Callus Poet Tanka

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A Wilted Rose

in a slender vase
on the bare bedside table
a faded rose droops...
my love, drained and time consumed
succumbs to fragility

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Contest: One of Three~Tanka
Sponsor: Laura Loo
© 25th June 2017

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Susan Ashley December 11, 2017 at 7:38 PM Such gorgeous imagery of melancholy emotion Paul. The image of a faded and wilted rose relates well to the delicate vulnerability of love. An alluring and poignant poem my friend. Warmest wishes ~Susan Paul Callus December 12, 2017 at 6:49 AM Thank you, Susan. Your honest feedback is always regarded with sincere appreciation. ~ Warm regards // paul

Lynn Marie August 22, 2017 at 12:57 PM The imagery through your words is just stunning and so apropos of how nature and us are one in the same. The title with the first word being rather forlorn next to the "Rose" known for awe inspiring beauty, is quite stark and sets up your poem wonderfully. A gem Paul:) Paul Callus August 22, 2017 at 3:27 PM I love your visits, Lynn. You have this ability of not only reading, but also of savoring the contents and getting to the roots of the writer's mind. Thank you for the continued support and encouraging comments. Warm regards // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu July 11, 2017 at 11:47 AM A wilted rose is not pretty. I have enjoyed the tanka.? I found a poem on Friend Builder I began to read it then got interrupted,now I don't know where to find it. Do you know where I can find this poem? I do not know who wrote this poem. Thank you. Paul Callus July 22, 2017 at 4:50 PM I am pleased you found it, Darlene. I love the idea of your homemade poetry book!! Regards ~ paul Darlene De Beaulieu July 11, 2017 at 7:09 PM Thank you Paul I found the poem and then I wrote the whole poem out by hand to put into my homemade poetry book. Toread when I need a booth. This poem was speaking to me. Now i am glad to have it. Thank you. Paul Callus July 11, 2017 at 2:00 PM Thank you for reading and liking, Darlene. // Go to the top of the page, find the search box and type Friend Builder in it; you might get lucky and find it. Not knowing the author is not in your favor. Regards // paul

Maria Williams July 9, 2017 at 7:39 AM I missed this beautiful piece of melancholy Paul, once again we were away at an Expo at the time - I can almost smell the redolence of the wilted rose...Maria Paul Callus July 10, 2017 at 4:35 AM Thank you for stopping by with lovely comments, Maria. Your encouragement and support are truly appreciated. Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian July 8, 2017 at 11:55 AM Your writing is ever in bloom, dear. :) I'm proud to know you. Paul Callus July 10, 2017 at 3:58 AM Thank you, Eileen:) I'm lucky to have also met you in person! Hugs // paul

Ravi Sathasivam July 2, 2017 at 2:23 AM Excellent tanka. Well expressed. Thanks for sharing it. Paul Callus July 2, 2017 at 11:33 AM Many thanks, Ravi. Your visit is appreciated. Regards // paul

Jack Horne July 1, 2017 at 2:43 PM so much said in so few words - love this, Paul Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 5:08 PM Hi Jack...pleased to have you stopping by, my friend...thank you. Hope you're keeping well. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen July 1, 2017 at 2:18 PM - Congratulations, Paul :) - Best wishes for a peaceful and lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 5:09 PM Thank you, Anne-Lise:) May you too have a most enjoyable weekend. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison July 1, 2017 at 12:57 PM Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 5:02 PM Thank you Jan; I saw your winning entry way up above mine:) Hugs // paul

Faye Gibson July 1, 2017 at 12:33 PM This is beautiful, Paul; congratulations on your placement. Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 4:56 PM Hi Faye, lovely to have you visiting! Thank you:) Regards // paul

Janice Canerdy July 1, 2017 at 8:51 AM Great tanka, Paul--CONGRATS on your win. Janice Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 5:01 PM Glad you liked it, Janice...thank you! Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues July 1, 2017 at 8:30 AM Paul, your feelings so aptly expressed!Congrats! Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 4:55 PM Thank you, Kim. I enjoyed your lovely winning entry, too. Regards // paul

Beautiful Scars July 1, 2017 at 7:38 AM I was not surprised to see your name on this list Paul. Beautifully expressed! Thank you Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 4:53 PM Thank you, Laura:) Hope you enjoy the weekend. Regards // paul

Afzal Nusker June 29, 2017 at 7:41 AM Very emotive tanka, Paul. Good Luck with the contest. Paul Callus June 30, 2017 at 4:37 PM Hi Afzal...thank you; just read your wilted rose tanka...in my eyes, a winner! // paul

Eve Roper June 27, 2017 at 7:05 PM Excellent, Paul, a winning write ~* Paul Callus June 28, 2017 at 1:16 PM I'm definitely sure I replied to your comment yesterday, Eve, yet there is none!! Once again I thank you for the trust you have in this poem! Warm regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen June 27, 2017 at 11:21 AM - Excellent written, Paul :) - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus June 27, 2017 at 4:39 PM I'm so pleased that you like it, Anne-Lise:) Thank you & hugs ~ paul

Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2017 at 9:51 PM now THIS is really good and it has a great haiku feel to it as well!! I'll be surprised if it's not a winner. Paul Callus June 27, 2017 at 4:38 PM Your judgment already makes it a 'winner', Andrea:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Joseph May June 26, 2017 at 5:29 PM Beautiful tanka Paul, best wishes in the contest Paul Callus June 27, 2017 at 4:36 PM Many thanks, Joseph...regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong June 26, 2017 at 3:46 PM This tanka is really beautifully composed Paul. The comparison between the fragility of love and the Rose is wonderful! : ) Paul Callus June 27, 2017 at 4:35 PM You nailed it, Connie:) Thank you tuning in to my wavelength! Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan June 26, 2017 at 4:12 AM Great tanka with a powerful ending... Beautifully written... Good luck with the contest.... Paul Callus June 26, 2017 at 5:10 PM Thank you, Supraja. Your words sing:) Regards // paul

Joanna Daniel June 26, 2017 at 12:53 AM Your tanka is hard to beat, Paul, I'm sure to see this on the winner's list :) Paul Callus June 26, 2017 at 4:53 PM Your faith is unwavering, Jo:) Thank you!! Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues June 25, 2017 at 9:35 PM Superb tanka! Paul Callus June 26, 2017 at 4:35 PM Thank you, Kim:)

Janis Medders Tobechi June 25, 2017 at 4:10 PM This is beautiful Paul. So great that you compared your emotions to the rose. Good luck in the contest. Paul Callus June 25, 2017 at 4:37 PM Thank you for the meaningful feedback, Janis. Regards // paul

Jan Allison June 25, 2017 at 4:07 PM beautifully penned sad tanka Paul. Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Paul Callus June 25, 2017 at 4:39 PM Glad you enjoyed it, Jan. Thought I'd better write something before my pen goes rusty:) Hugs // paul

Daniel Turner June 25, 2017 at 4:03 PM They make little blue pills for that, these days:) Seriously, it's a lovely tanka, Paul. Just a little sad. Paul Callus June 25, 2017 at 4:37 PM Thank you for the pleasant visit and lovely comments, Danny:) Regards // paul