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A Whale's View of the Ocean

Oh graceful enchanting Ocean! Your brilliant mesmerising waves captivated my heart, I can hear them calling to me, can feel them embracing me gently As you summon them back and forth, They invitingly drag me along, As the sirens sing their song. Oh resplendent sparkling sea! I long for a life filled with wonder On your infinite azure blue, Waving my tail joyfully As the day starts anew, Orange and yellow lights dancing radiantly in the waters, A miraculous sight. As the dazzling sun sets, Shining slanted beams of sunlight Stretching across the vast ocean As stars brighten the night. Oh mysterious tides! A world filled with endless possibilities, Bathing calmly in this boundless sapphire-filled bathtub, As your sprays tenderly brush my face While partying with the sunlight With beauty and grace. Upon you I sail, Transcending beyond imaginations to lands afar, Freedom and adventure Is what you are. 29/01/17

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Date: 2/7/2017 5:56:00 AM
Wonderful POV. Wish I lived in the sea! :)
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Jamie Pan
Date: 2/8/2017 5:33:00 PM
Thanks! :)
Date: 2/4/2017 9:44:00 AM
Hi Jamie, Your imagery is captivating!
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Jamie Pan
Date: 2/9/2017 9:23:00 PM
Thanks you!
Date: 2/4/2017 8:12:00 AM
Beautifully inked down. As deficiency is just a perception. Maybe for you it is but for others it is their pillar of strength.
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Date: 2/9/2017 9:23:00 PM
Thanks Samiha!
Date: 2/3/2017 11:42:00 PM
the whale's god is the sea. Nicely put, Jamie. Wish you the best in the contest. Can't think of anything to enter; but you needn't worry about competition. This is powerful writing. Great personification and super imagery.
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Jamie Pan
Date: 2/9/2017 9:23:00 PM
Thanks!
Date: 1/31/2017 9:17:00 AM
Love your whale poem but especially the verse about the boundary-less sapphire filled bathtub; great depiction of the freedom they must feel out in the ocean!~Che :)
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Jamie Pan
Date: 2/1/2017 5:42:00 AM
Thank you, Cheryl! :)
Date: 1/30/2017 2:08:00 PM
This poem has great imagery, and much of it. Mike
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Jamie Pan
Date: 1/30/2017 11:35:00 PM
Thank you,Mike! :)
Date: 1/29/2017 4:01:00 AM
This is a lovely poem, Jamie:)
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Jamie Pan
Date: 1/29/2017 4:06:00 AM
Thanks, Jo!

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