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A Welcome For Timorous Tim

Poor Tim, the timorous, one cold dark day set out to prove that TIMID he was not! He ventured one whole night alone to stay inside the empty house his friends had sought. The house was old. . . unlocked, it beckoned Tim. He neared its door; his trepidation grew. His laughing friends grew silent watching him. He deeply breathed, then vanished from their view. Inside, Tim heard below the house a sound. He could not be a coward! With a sigh, he took the creaking stairway down and found before his eyes, a scraggly toothless guy who greeted, smilingly, the trembling lad: “It ain’t the Ritz, but welcome to my pad!” For the "Smile You're On Candid Camera Contest of vienna bombardieri

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 3/20/2013 1:01:00 AM
Is it shallow of me to click on this simply because my name was written all over it?? Lol... Well either way it was a nice lighthearted read... I for someone reason pictured the toothless old man to have a kindly British accent... Not sure why!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/20/2013 3:13:00 PM
hahaha
Date: 12/3/2012 8:18:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in this "Candid Camera" contest Andrea. I am sorry it is late. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/1/2012 5:44:00 AM
My big congratulations on your fantastic win my dear friend, Andrea! love always, Leonora
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Date: 11/29/2012 8:56:00 PM
Andrea, congrats with your awesome poem ..always~ PD
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Date: 11/29/2012 1:55:00 PM
Very enjoyable read... Congratulations on the win!
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Date: 11/29/2012 9:43:00 AM
Ha hahahah....love that ending line!!! Very very cool! Congrats Andrea! This story could continue on ya know?...hahah
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Date: 11/29/2012 7:09:00 AM
You twisted your way to victory, well done.
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Date: 11/29/2012 6:42:00 AM
Congratulations my friend Andrea on you win. Cheers!! (^_^)
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Date: 11/29/2012 5:07:00 AM
Love the finsih here Andy congratulations girl xx
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Date: 11/20/2012 5:13:00 PM
Had me wondering but love the end of this poem. love phyl
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Date: 11/20/2012 10:31:00 AM
I'm way behind - had a couple of miserable days and the e-mail piled up. I hope that kid had a clothespin on his nose. Got a chuckle out of this one. Luck in the contest. Love, daver
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Date: 11/13/2012 4:21:00 PM
Didn't know where this was leading me but am happy with the ending. Nice there's a place for the old guy. Neat entry Andrea, all the best! Love, Lizzie
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Date: 11/13/2012 1:52:00 PM
Sounds like you had fun writing this one. Good luck.
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Date: 11/12/2012 4:45:00 PM
lol....nice write Andrea...thanks for stopping by....hugs
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Date: 11/12/2012 2:16:00 PM
The guy couldn't have been a vampire - he had no teeth. A great twist ending, dear Andrea. Love, daver
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Date: 11/12/2012 9:36:00 AM
A nice picture of imagination. Good luck always and loved always, bl
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Date: 11/12/2012 8:19:00 AM
Lol, I'll be smiling before sleeping tonight my friend for this beautiful poem of yours! I love it! Again, thank you so much for stopping by and your wonderful comments. Good night! love/hugs, Leonora
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Date: 11/12/2012 7:46:00 AM
A nice fantasy poem here. Best of luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 11/12/2012 3:47:00 AM
I like this poem of yours friend sunflower girl Andrea (^_^)... a sure winner for me :) like the twist... thanks always for your nice comments on my poems. Love, Maria
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Date: 11/11/2012 8:50:00 PM
Not the ending I expected, nice twist.
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Date: 11/11/2012 7:34:00 PM
Lol, it ain't the Ritz, alright. Scared poor old Tim. I like "scraggly, toothless guy" that you described. I can just see him standing there grinning at our timorous Tim. Like it. Love ya, Toquyen
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Date: 11/11/2012 6:54:00 PM
Oooow scary
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Date: 11/11/2012 5:14:00 PM
this one was too cute...love the way it ended, good luck in the contest! Enjoyed reading your poem!
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Date: 11/11/2012 5:11:00 PM
Hi Andrea' poor, Tim , why would he want to prove and set out for a ventured night' A home is a home. And I sure like the ending. Fits the contest well I agree with others. ~SKAT~
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Date: 11/11/2012 11:41:00 AM
A real hoot reading about Tim Andrea, wishing you a top win with this one.."
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