A Welcome For Timorous Tim

Poor Tim, the timorous, one cold dark day set out to prove that TIMID he was not! He ventured one whole night alone to stay inside the empty house his friends had sought. The house was old. . . unlocked, it beckoned Tim. He neared its door; his trepidation grew. His laughing friends grew silent watching him. He deeply breathed, then vanished from their view. Inside, Tim heard below the house a sound. He could not be a coward! With a sigh, he took the creaking stairway down and found before his eyes, a scraggly toothless guy who greeted, smilingly, the trembling lad: “It ain’t the Ritz, but welcome to my pad!” For the "Smile You're On Candid Camera Contest of vienna bombardieri
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Hicks Avatar
March 20, 2013 at 1:01 AM
Is it shallow of me to click on this simply because my name was written all over it?? Lol... Well either way it was a nice lighthearted read... I for someone reason pictured the toothless old man to have a kindly British accent... Not sure why!
Dietrich Avatar
March 20, 2013 at 3:13 PM
hahaha
Brown Avatar
December 3, 2012 at 8:18 AM
Congratulations on your win in this "Candid Camera" contest Andrea. I am sorry it is late. Love, Carol
Gasun Avatar
December 1, 2012 at 5:44 AM
My big congratulations on your fantastic win my dear friend, Andrea! love always, Leonora
A   Avatar
November 29, 2012 at 8:56 PM
Andrea, congrats with your awesome poem ..always~ PD
Eastman Avatar
November 29, 2012 at 1:55 PM
Very enjoyable read... Congratulations on the win!
Song Avatar
November 29, 2012 at 9:43 AM
Ha hahahah....love that ending line!!! Very very cool! Congrats Andrea! This story could continue on ya know?...hahah
Lamoureux Avatar
November 29, 2012 at 7:09 AM
You twisted your way to victory, well done.
Liwayway Avatar
November 29, 2012 at 6:42 AM
Congratulations my friend Andrea on you win. Cheers!! (^_^)
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
November 29, 2012 at 5:07 AM
Love the finsih here Andy congratulations girl xx
Babcock Avatar
November 20, 2012 at 5:13 PM
Had me wondering but love the end of this poem. love phyl
Austin Avatar
November 20, 2012 at 10:31 AM
I'm way behind - had a couple of miserable days and the e-mail piled up. I hope that kid had a clothespin on his nose. Got a chuckle out of this one. Luck in the contest. Love, daver
Wesley Avatar
November 13, 2012 at 4:21 PM
Didn't know where this was leading me but am happy with the ending. Nice there's a place for the old guy. Neat entry Andrea, all the best! Love, Lizzie
Johnson Avatar
November 13, 2012 at 1:52 PM
Sounds like you had fun writing this one. Good luck.
May Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 4:45 PM
lol....nice write Andrea...thanks for stopping by....hugs
Austin Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 2:16 PM
The guy couldn't have been a vampire - he had no teeth. A great twist ending, dear Andrea. Love, daver
Devnath  Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 9:36 AM
A nice picture of imagination. Good luck always and loved always, bl
Gasun Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 8:19 AM
Lol, I'll be smiling before sleeping tonight my friend for this beautiful poem of yours! I love it! Again, thank you so much for stopping by and your wonderful comments. Good night! love/hugs, Leonora
Anish Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 7:46 AM
A nice fantasy poem here. Best of luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Liwayway Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 3:47 AM
I like this poem of yours friend sunflower girl Andrea (^_^)... a sure winner for me :) like the twist... thanks always for your nice comments on my poems. Love, Maria
Lamoureux Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 8:50 PM
Not the ending I expected, nice twist.
Harrell Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 7:34 PM
Lol, it ain't the Ritz, alright. Scared poor old Tim. I like "scraggly, toothless guy" that you described. I can just see him standing there grinning at our timorous Tim. Like it. Love ya, Toquyen
Adams Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 5:14 PM
this one was too cute...love the way it ended, good luck in the contest! Enjoyed reading your poem!
A  Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 5:11 PM
Hi Andrea' poor, Tim , why would he want to prove and set out for a ventured night' A home is a home. And I sure like the ending. Fits the contest well I agree with others. ~SKAT~
Maverick Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 11:41 AM
A real hoot reading about Tim Andrea, wishing you a top win with this one.."
A   Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 11:00 AM
I'm not seeing your sexy haiku... Hummm..maybe not your take... LOL...It is okay... I think this contest is breaking all the rules.. Something you know nothing about... ha ha ha... Anyways~ I have to check this contest out.. I never do good in contest.. Sometimes I think my thinking is way out of the box for these simple poets.. he he he... love this verse.. Good luck in the contest..pd
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