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A Warriors Vow

O My Jhansi, you are my Paradise, 
                  My whole-hearted goal to win the fierce fights, 
                          Every drop of blood I will sacrifice, 
                     Acquire the precious land, back to our life. 


                        When he left, promised to my beloved, 
                       I will strongly protect his cherished land,
                         Will keep my promise, never deviate, 
                        The final words to my valiant husband. 


                       I glimpse a ruthless long fight on our way,
                         The people with us, we are not alone, 
                         I will cherish their love, to God I pray, 
                            defeat for me is not an option. 

                          Prepared to win or die - to lay my life, 
                     For my people, come death, come any strife!


Reference: Lakshmibai, the Rani of Jhansi was an Indian queen of the Maratha princely state of Jhansi in North India. She was one of the leading figures of the Indian Rebellion of 1857 and became a symbol of resistance. (Wikipedia)



                                        September 18, 2020
                           For A Warrior Sonnet Poetry Contest
                                      Sponsor: John Lawless
Checked syllables by howmanysyllables.com (14 lines, 10 syllables in each - three Quatrains and one Couplet: following Shakesperean Sonnet Forma

                                             FIRST  PLACE
                               A Brian Strand Sonnet Poetry Contest
                                             SECOND PLACE
                                 For V - Old Or New Poetry Contest
                                             Theme: Valiant
                                     Sponsor: Constance La France
                              
                           For "Sonnet's Salutation" Poetry Contest
                                        Sponsor: William Kekaula

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Date: 11/29/2021 1:16:00 PM
Mala, congratulations on your Second place win in my "V" New or Old Poems Contest. Your poem is wonderful and I like the image too ~ love and serenity _Constance
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Date: 11/24/2021 8:58:00 AM
This is such an inspiring write on Jhansi Rani - someone who I love and appreciate - her dauntless spirit...congrats on your win with this beautiful write dear Mala...Hugs...~ Ani
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Date: 11/23/2021 7:47:00 PM
Malabika, congratulations on your win in Constance's contest. Have a great Thanksgiving with family. Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/1/2021 10:49:00 PM
A sonnet that recalls history and well done, and a winner, congratulations
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 8/9/2021 6:17:00 AM
I am really glad you liked the sonnet. This part of the Indian history is very touching - She is my favourite historical figure.
Date: 7/30/2021 8:42:00 PM
She is one of the persons of Indian History who I love and appreciate so much. Your write brings in my mind memories of the First War of Independence.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/31/2021 5:31:00 AM
Yes, Christuraj, She is the personality in Indian history I worship - her courage was indomitable. Thank you for reading the poem, and for your thoughtful comments.
Date: 9/20/2020 11:34:00 PM
Excellent! So well depicted the emblem of a warrior's heart . I love the two last parting lines, "Prepared to win or die - to lay my life, For my people, come death, come any strife! Great piece ..Goodluck for the sure win! dear Mala.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 9/22/2020 5:00:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dear Poet. The last couplet is my favourite too! The sonnet is a challenging form, but it was a good learning experience to compose one following Shakesperean format. Really appreciate your thoughtful comments. Love, Mala
Date: 9/18/2020 4:58:00 PM
What a beautiful promise made to your warrior, Mala. "I will protect his cherished land." This line has so many dimensions to it. I see a knight off to battle in your sonnet. This is powerful yet delicate. Best wishes for the contest! All the best blessings my friend.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 9/18/2020 5:28:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sam, for your inspiring words. Really delighted to know you have enjoyed this poem. A promise by a Warrior Queen - perhaps Sonnet is the best form for this theme. Love, Mala
Date: 9/18/2020 8:23:00 AM
very well done!! I find this challenge a most difficult one. Not for the form, but for the theme!!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 9/18/2020 9:55:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea. I found this a bit challenging too - I have to admit. The theme is unusual, and Shakespearean Sonnet format is not easy! I am so glad to receive an encouraging comment from you. Love and best wishes, Mala
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