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A Warrior's Vow

Oh My Jhansi, you are my Paradise, My whole-hearted goal to win the fierce fights, Every drop of blood I will sacrifice, Acquire the precious land, back to our life. When he left, promised to my beloved, I will strongly protect his cherished land, Will keep my promise, never deviate, The final words to my dearest husband. I glimpse a ruthless long fight on our way, The people with us, we are not alone, I will cherish their love, to God I pray, I don't accept defeat as an option. Prepared to win or die - to lay my life, For my people, come death, come any strife! September 18, 2020 For A Warrior Sonnet Poetry Contest Sponsor: John Lawless Checked syllables by howmanysyllables.com (14 lines, 10 syllables in each - three Quatrains and one Couplet: following Shakesperean Sonnet Format)

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Date: 9/20/2020 11:34:00 PM
Excellent! So well depicted the emblem of a warrior's heart . I love the two last parting lines, "Prepared to win or die - to lay my life, For my people, come death, come any strife! Great piece ..Goodluck for the sure win! dear Mala.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 9/22/2020 5:00:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dear Poet. The last couplet is my favourite too! The sonnet is a challenging form, but it was a good learning experience to compose one following Shakesperean format. Really appreciate your thoughtful comments. Love, Mala
Date: 9/18/2020 4:58:00 PM
What a beautiful promise made to your warrior, Mala. "I will protect his cherished land." This line has so many dimensions to it. I see a knight off to battle in your sonnet. This is powerful yet delicate. Best wishes for the contest! All the best blessings my friend.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 9/18/2020 5:28:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sam, for your inspiring words. Really delighted to know you have enjoyed this poem. A promise by a Warrior Queen - perhaps Sonnet is the best form for this theme. Love, Mala
Date: 9/18/2020 8:23:00 AM
very well done!! I find this challenge a most difficult one. Not for the form, but for the theme!!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 9/18/2020 9:55:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea. I found this a bit challenging too - I have to admit. The theme is unusual, and Shakespearean Sonnet format is not easy! I am so glad to receive an encouraging comment from you. Love and best wishes, Mala