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A Visit From the Comment Fairy

I had a visit from the comment fairy
Her pencil dull, her arms quite hairy
He said that she didn’t like my verse
A critique quite subtle and sharply terse
He said that she said they want it re-wrote
Enclosing a hint, and a final verse quote
He said that she said that errors were made
Implied that the poem just won’t make the grade
Suggested the lines too often repeated
Should be rewritten, or at least deleted 
And so I took paper, and pencil, and then
Started the computer and logged in again
Did all the things that he she and they
Said would make it the “Poem of the Day”
But after I’d done it – done it their way
I crumpled it up and threw it away
Perhaps, in truth, it might have been stronger
But the words and the tone weren’t mine any longer.


John G. Lawless
9/10/2021

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Gary Radice

Date: 9/21/2021 5:20:00 AM

I really like this. I have been guilty a few times in the past of writing poems that I think others want to read. Feeling happy on your own terms with what you have written has to be the most important attribute of any poet. Cheers - Gary

Virginia Gelok

Date: 9/14/2021 5:45:00 PM

Since I am pretty new at this. "I hear you". I've been thinking to visit that fairy myself, but do I dare? lol I really enjoyed these piece.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/14/2021 1:20:00 PM

haha. and I love how you got the gender pronouns into it. That whole deal is SO MESSED UP!! Good one, John

L Milton Hankins

Date: 9/10/2021 9:32:00 AM

Ah, wonderful writing, John. And, so true. I love to get constructive criticism on my work, but I find that so often I like it better my way. I once refused a publisher a book manuscript because when he got done with it, it would no longer have been MY book, but his. You have expressed all of this angst so well in your "nonsense" verse. Thank you!