Lin Lane Poet Triolet

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A Vision In My Dreams

Peter Duggan posted a Triolet today and said it would be a challenge to do it in 8 syllables...so here's my attempt.

His face, a vision in my dreams
He will never belong to me
Cruel fate bellows out her screams
His face, a vision in my dreams
I curse life for her heartless schemes
Treacherous heart, please set me free
His face, a vision in my dreams
He will never belong to me

I dare not sleep or close my eyes
and risk seeing him once again
I will not wake to anguished cries
I dare not sleep or close my eyes
My sorrow I cannot disguise
Love calls him more than just a friend
I dare not sleep or close my eyes
and risk seeing him once again

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Gail Underwood February 5, 2016 at 6:25 PM A really good write Lin Lin Lane February 5, 2016 at 6:32 PM Thank you very much, Gail ;)

White Sage February 2, 2016 at 3:48 PM Lin...if he comes back, get a bat, close your eyes and hit his head (I hope no mistakes though) lol....that's a powerful write, well penned, you've met the challenge...fantastic you! Lin Lane February 2, 2016 at 4:23 PM I'm the one who left him and would never take him back. Thanks for the protective ideas thought, Sage, and for liking this one.

Steven Henderson February 2, 2016 at 8:16 AM A powerful write to me. Peace and many blessings Lin! Lin Lane February 2, 2016 at 8:21 AM Thanks for the visit and your comments, Steven.

Alexis Y. February 1, 2016 at 11:39 AM Lin, you penned a well written piece with raw emotions. I sensed the sorrow in each line. You have rose to the challenge, I have a feeling Peter will think so too. Well done- Alexis 7 Lin Lane February 1, 2016 at 12:09 PM Thank you very much, Alexis. Nice to see you.