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A Twilight Tumble

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I’m on a twilight stroll with my beau, we take a route we’ve often walked before. Mystical moonlight flickers in the trees, “whose woods these are, I think I know”* A hooting owl startles me, I fall and twist my knee, I try to stand, cry out pain; I cannot walk with ease. We can see twinkling lights in the distance, perhaps someone’s at home who can help me. My beau covers me with his warm coat, He hurries away so he can get assistance. I pray that he doesn’t have too far to go, and that the cottage is not too remote. He soon returns with another guy, I know his face, oh hello Steve I cry. I was almost certain he lived close by, as he sells wood carvings which I buy! Lines to Awaken your Muse Poetry Contest Sponsored by Joseph May *Chosen line - Whose woods these are I think I know - Robert Frost 02/27/20

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John Watt

Date: 3/3/2020 7:12:00 PM

Excellent work forming your tale into a challenging rhyme scheme! Congrats on your win in the muse contest ~ John

Jan Allison
Date: 3/4/2020 2:37:00 AM

Thanks John it really was a challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 3/2/2020 9:53:00 PM

Things can go awry in the woods, Very nicely penned Jan...Congrats on your win..

Jan Allison
Date: 3/4/2020 2:37:00 AM

Thanks Joseph:-) i enjoyed writing for the contest and I did behave for you nothing bawdy going on in the woods!:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 2/28/2020 4:01:00 PM

So wonderful! What a beautiful poem. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2020 4:20:00 PM

thanks Mark do look at the contests and have a go - if you get stuck I will try and help you out, its a great way to learn new poetry styles:-)hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 2/28/2020 11:56:00 AM

I love tit for tat poetry! Well done, Jan! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2020 12:48:00 PM

thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan xx

Quoth Theraven

Date: 2/28/2020 10:34:00 AM

Jan, The woods are themselves a great protector. A haven for the rescuer and rescued alike. Good luck in the contest! -Richard

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2020 12:48:00 PM

Thanks so much Richard:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/28/2020 8:36:00 AM

WoW! Jan, I really enjoyed this. You took the reader on stroll with you. Everything looks amazing. Good he came back with help, I didn’t know what think a first. Good job. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day and weekend:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2020 12:48:00 PM

Thanks Alexis it has been a challenge to get my muse to behave recently and this was a difficult poem to write because of the form Joseph created to inspire us, I hope he likes my effort:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Adams

Date: 2/28/2020 5:16:00 AM

You did a great job with this contest. That was the line I liked most but I struggle with rhyme and haven’t had much time to write much these days ... best wishes in the contest. Glad it had a happy ending :) hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2020 7:34:00 AM

I was away 3 weeks then came home and got hubby's cold but finally the muse is awakened and I enjoyed the challenge made even more difficult with the rhyme form Joseph created for us:-) If time permits then I recommend you give it a try Sandy! :-) hugs Jan xx

John Watt

Date: 2/27/2020 11:42:00 PM

Jan, loved your take on this Frost line. Best wishes in the "Awaken" contest with your delightful poem. ~ John

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2020 7:31:00 AM

Thanks so much John, i have been trying for some time to write for the contest and once i put my mind to it yesterday i enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/27/2020 2:12:00 PM

Love your interpretation of Frosts line Jan, the image I got was like the start of one of those where bad things happen in the woods, thankfully a happy ending. Good luck.. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 2/27/2020 2:19:00 PM

Thanks so much Tom, as a person who never liked poetry at school I have never read Frosts work nor many of the 'greats' so I enjoyed the challenge Joseph set us - I have been trying to get the muse back into gear for writing after my holiday and sickness - least its only a chest infection.:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/27/2020 1:51:00 PM

- A great poem using Robert Frost's line ... best wishes in the contest, Jan - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 2/27/2020 1:56:00 PM

It was really challenging to write this with the required rhyme scheme:-) thanks for dropping by:-) hugs Jan xx