A Trio of Whiteness

The One Lilies were lifting white faces up to the sun. I gazed up at him as he leaned down to kiss me. . . He - a white knight - was the one. White - A Love Story White was the blanket on which we lay under the clouds of that warm April day. White were the lilies perfuming the air. How happy was I - my white knight was there. Summer arrived; on sand gleaming white we lay in the sun and kissed until night. White was the gold of the ring that I wore and bright like the love of the one I adored. White was the dress I carefully chose for our special day, and white was the rose he placed on our bed, its sheets - white as milk - were smooth like his skin and woven in silk. White was the snow our first Christmas day before all the whiteness got swept away! In the dark casket, his face seemed so pale as I bent to kiss my true love farewell. At My White Knight’s Grave into stone cold ground his black casket was lowered. . . snow fell all around tanka/rhyme/senryu Inspired by Anthony Slauson's Whiteness Poetry Contest
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Brown Avatar
December 3, 2012 at 1:28 PM
Congratulations on your win in Anthony's "Whiteness" contest Andrea. Love, Carol
Richards Avatar
December 1, 2012 at 5:54 PM
Not only one, but three beautiful examples of the whiteness of poetic genius!! Great job..., Andrea!
Harper Avatar
December 1, 2012 at 3:29 PM
Creative use of format in this lovely but hauntingly sad poem, Andrea! Congratulations on your win!
Ober Avatar
November 30, 2012 at 12:15 PM
You have a way with words, lady! Your descriptions are reminiscent of some of my favourite Tennyson poems (i.e. The Lady of Shalott). Big congratulations on your well-deserved win!!
A   Avatar
November 30, 2012 at 11:56 AM
Andrea, congratulations with your awesome win,, always~pd
May Avatar
November 30, 2012 at 11:54 AM
congrats on a great win Andrea
Adams Avatar
October 18, 2012 at 6:52 PM
this series was very well written, a beautiful love story that ended leaving me with the chill of winter and death's hands...well done!
Babcock Avatar
October 13, 2012 at 12:36 PM
I must say this is an awesome poem and I am such a romantic with this white knight story. Wow outstanding. love phyl
Patrikar Avatar
October 11, 2012 at 9:41 AM
wow! drove me speechless.... a definite winner!
Onclaud Avatar
October 10, 2012 at 4:29 PM
my, andie...a series of rose poems by you has given me a deeper appreciation of white's various images... just super!..:) huggs
Johnson Avatar
October 10, 2012 at 3:49 PM
Wow, quite the ride. Beautifully done Andrea.
Horne Avatar
October 10, 2012 at 9:44 AM
beautiful but sad write, my friend.
Pettit Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 11:18 PM
Written very well. Looks like a tough competitor for Anthony's contest.
Austin Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 12:56 PM
This would make a wonderful song, Andrea. I got all goose-bumply all the way through. GREAT! Love, daver
Sweetheart Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 9:50 AM
uniquely different and intriguing Andrea as u take the reader through the facets of whiteness so wonderfully my friend .. sure to be at the top of the winners list .. luv the white-a love story best luv ..my romantic heart chimes ..
Gasun Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 1:19 AM
Super wow!!! So speechless on this outstanding write of yours my dear Andrea! A very delightful one to read! GRAND WINNER FOR ME!! Good luck and best wishes always! love and hugs:) Leonora
A   Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 10:33 PM
wow, Andrea,, after reading your Tanka, and story,,, i'm not to sure i want to use mine for any contest... besides... Susan, only asked for one... you did lots of good and crazy things up there... wow.... Thank you for this awesome read... wish I could figure it out????????. Goodnight :-)~ PD
Liwayway Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 9:35 PM
Superb! Excellent!! these words describe your poem friend Andrea...Good luck!! It's a sure winner to me..hugs (^_^)
Nutter Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 8:28 PM
Glad you were inspired to write this wonderful piece or we all would have been deprived. Enjoyed, Loved the little twist at the end as the knight is laid to rest in a black coffin and snow swirling aroound.
Sivey Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 11:26 AM
Wow what a powerful trilogy my friend, I loved the insightfulness you exuded between the three! You have used your infinite wisdom of the forms to create a masterpiece here! Or should I say three of them! What a fantastic powerful piece Andrea, Great Work!!
Bauer Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 9:52 AM
wow! this is masterfully done. all three meld together so effortlessly and tell a beautiful, sad story. bravo!
Horsman Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 9:51 AM
wow Andrea, yes i agree with Joann these are bound together, wonderful poetry as only you can write,,
Grisetti Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 8:46 AM
These three poems read almost as one, yet each stands on its own merit as well. magnificently written. I know you will do well in the contest, but beyond that, this is why I love your work.
May Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 6:25 AM
great trio Andrea....winning wishes....hugs...Joseph
Kendrick Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 6:01 AM
So romantic with the so sad twist at the end..I felt roller coast ride emotions..Great attention getter..Winner in my book..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by..I was not happy with mine but I went ahead and posted and entered it..It still needs some work..Sara
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