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A Train Journey

lets go on a train ride back to the 80s its the day the smiths decided they need to be in London as desired where there are factories open offering work for men or orphan early at dawn the parents awake nudged the children to rise and shake away with sleep and on with the task all the hustle and bustle to pack there goes the family the kids in queue john, tim, linda and casey too through the fields towards the station awaits the carriage to the destination Excited on seeing the giant making its way towards them puffing as it halts they go onboard naughty tim behind lagging there he emerge covered in soot Like a chimney sweeper barefoot wanting to be by the window gazing a furious brawl seen on going The engine rumbles to motion as familiar scenery pass by they glimpsed the sun peeping in between the huge trees weeping leaving behind the meadow and pasture how beatific and serene the vision as they progress they see less of nature trees vanishing driven out of sight and more of dreadful barren land as if in an alien world of sand. In the train many faces snuggled one powdered, another rugged you could see the latest fashion of suits and gowns of silk and cotton vibrant colours and masked men with lack of genuine feelings As they neared their destination a flurry of movement excited faces soon to be disappointed emerging out of the carriage vanished was the life they knew for before them lay a vary world and they are lost in the crowd so new. © Nadiya (18 Jan '15) *Won 5th place on 26 Jan 2015 in the contest 'Railway Journeys' by Shadow Hamilton

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Date: 5/11/2015 8:01:00 AM
I enjoyed the journey... Well-written poem. Julia, :)
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Date: 2/1/2015 1:59:00 PM
NADIYA, CONGRATULATIONS on your RAILWAY JOURNEY win *ALWAYS* SKAT
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Date: 2/1/2015 2:07:00 PM
Thank you again friend... hugs
Date: 1/29/2015 1:59:00 AM
G'day Nadiya... Described nicely Nadiya, and you know, you have the reader feeling like they are a passenger which makes your poem so good. Thank you Nadiya - Lindsay
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Date: 1/29/2015 5:00:00 AM
Thank you Lindsay... appreciate your visit and lovely words... lov nad!
Date: 1/26/2015 12:33:00 PM
Huge congratulations, Nad, on a well-deserved win! I enjoyed traveling on this train and thank you for sharing an amazing journey! Warmest regards. Pandita.
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Date: 1/26/2015 1:51:00 PM
Thank you again for going through my poems dear friend...
Date: 1/26/2015 10:09:00 AM
Congrats Nad. I am so happy. Best wishes.God bless.>>>rajat
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Date: 1/26/2015 1:50:00 PM
Thank you friend for your continued support and genuine comments on my poems.
Date: 1/26/2015 8:00:00 AM
Congrats on your win my lovely friend. Loved always,bl
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Date: 1/26/2015 9:08:00 AM
Thank you dear friend... appreciate your visit.
Date: 1/26/2015 12:14:00 AM
Congrats on the win with this nice tke on the theme,
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:31:00 AM
Thank you Dr. Ram.. appreciate and value your comments in my poems...
Date: 1/25/2015 7:44:00 PM
Nadiya, very wonderful descriptive train ride, you have written, congratulations on your win a 7. Blessings and hugs eve
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:31:00 AM
Thank you very much Eve... happy that u gave a visit... hugs,nad!
Date: 1/25/2015 3:55:00 PM
such vivid imagery Nadiya many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:30:00 AM
Thank you Jan... pleased that you liked it.lov,nad!
Date: 1/25/2015 2:19:00 PM
nice journey Nadiya congrats on placing hugs
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:29:00 AM
Thank you Shadow... appreciate your visit and lovely words. Hugs, nad
Date: 1/18/2015 10:24:00 AM
Railway train is the major mode of communication in Asia and other developing countries.My father was a Railway employee. So I had the chance to go to so many places in India. Free of cost of course. Your poem has sent me to my boyhood. Your train journey is not a simple day to day train journey it speaks of human relations,interactions and other subtle areas of human experience.Love Nadiya. God bless you>>>rajat
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Date: 1/18/2015 10:30:00 AM
Thank you... your comments are always pleasant to read... its always in detail and very encouraging... happy that you took your time to go through my poems... nad!

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