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A Train Journey

lets go on a train ride back to the 80s

its the day the smiths decided
they need to be in London as desired
where there are factories open
offering work for men or orphan
early at dawn the parents awake
nudged the children to rise and shake
away with sleep and on with the task
all the hustle and bustle to pack
there goes the family the kids in queue
john, tim, linda and casey too
through the fields towards the station
awaits the carriage to the destination

Excited on seeing the giant
making its way towards them puffing 
as it halts they go onboard 
naughty tim behind lagging
there he emerge covered in soot
Like a chimney sweeper barefoot
wanting to be by the window gazing
a furious brawl seen on going

The engine rumbles to motion
as familiar scenery pass by
they glimpsed the sun peeping
in between the huge trees weeping
leaving behind the meadow and pasture
how beatific and serene the vision
as they progress they see less of nature
trees vanishing driven out of sight
and more of dreadful barren land 
as if in an alien world of sand.

In the train many faces snuggled
one powdered, another rugged
you could see the latest fashion
of suits and gowns of silk and cotton
vibrant colours and masked men
with lack of genuine feelings

As they neared their destination
a flurry of movement
excited faces
soon to be disappointed 
emerging out of the carriage
vanished was the life they knew
for before them lay a vary world
and they are lost in the crowd so new.

© Nadiya (18 Jan '15)

*Won 5th place on 26 Jan 2015 in the contest 'Railway Journeys' by Shadow Hamilton

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 5/11/2015 8:01:00 AM
I enjoyed the journey... Well-written poem. Julia, :)
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Date: 2/1/2015 1:59:00 PM
NADIYA, CONGRATULATIONS on your RAILWAY JOURNEY win *ALWAYS* SKAT
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Date: 2/1/2015 2:07:00 PM
Thank you again friend... hugs
Date: 1/29/2015 7:04:00 PM
Nadiya.. Congrats on a wonderful write. Oh, I enjoyed reading it! You're a Winner!!
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Date: 1/29/2015 10:12:00 PM
Thank you Dave for your kind words... appreciate your visit my friend.
Date: 1/29/2015 1:59:00 AM
G'day Nadiya... Described nicely Nadiya, and you know, you have the reader feeling like they are a passenger which makes your poem so good. Thank you Nadiya - Lindsay
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Date: 1/29/2015 5:00:00 AM
Thank you Lindsay... appreciate your visit and lovely words... lov nad!
Date: 1/26/2015 12:33:00 PM
Huge congratulations, Nad, on a well-deserved win! I enjoyed traveling on this train and thank you for sharing an amazing journey! Warmest regards. Pandita.
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Date: 1/26/2015 1:51:00 PM
Thank you again for going through my poems dear friend...
Date: 1/26/2015 10:09:00 AM
Congrats Nad. I am so happy. Best wishes.God bless.>>>rajat
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Date: 1/26/2015 1:50:00 PM
Thank you friend for your continued support and genuine comments on my poems.
Date: 1/26/2015 8:00:00 AM
Congrats on your win my lovely friend. Loved always,bl
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Date: 1/26/2015 9:08:00 AM
Thank you dear friend... appreciate your visit.
Date: 1/26/2015 12:14:00 AM
Congrats on the win with this nice tke on the theme,
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:31:00 AM
Thank you Dr. Ram.. appreciate and value your comments in my poems...
Date: 1/25/2015 7:44:00 PM
Nadiya, very wonderful descriptive train ride, you have written, congratulations on your win a 7. Blessings and hugs eve
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:31:00 AM
Thank you very much Eve... happy that u gave a visit... hugs,nad!
Date: 1/25/2015 3:55:00 PM
such vivid imagery Nadiya many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:30:00 AM
Thank you Jan... pleased that you liked it.lov,nad!
Date: 1/25/2015 2:19:00 PM
nice journey Nadiya congrats on placing hugs
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:29:00 AM
Thank you Shadow... appreciate your visit and lovely words. Hugs, nad
Date: 1/18/2015 10:24:00 AM
Railway train is the major mode of communication in Asia and other developing countries.My father was a Railway employee. So I had the chance to go to so many places in India. Free of cost of course. Your poem has sent me to my boyhood. Your train journey is not a simple day to day train journey it speaks of human relations,interactions and other subtle areas of human experience.Love Nadiya. God bless you>>>rajat
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Date: 1/18/2015 10:30:00 AM
Thank you... your comments are always pleasant to read... its always in detail and very encouraging... happy that you took your time to go through my poems... nad!