A Tempting Fate

(Inspired by the humorous short story, "Angel Of The Odd", by Edgar Allan Poe.)



This young man had just been visiting his mother,
His wife disapproved of spending his time with another,
He grabbed his coat and hat, but not an umbrella,
For, he was quite an unwise and careless fella.

The rain began to pour with thunder and lightning,
This foolish man did not find it a bit frightening,
He was looking forward to a warm hug and a kiss,
Although, it was her cooking that he really did miss.

He quickly jumped over puddles and leapt the gate,
But, little did he know, that he was tempting fate,
He knocked and pounded his fist on the front door,
The house remained dark, though it never was before.

Now, all that he needed to do was simply unlock it,
But, he found the key was no longer in his pocket,
He picked up a rock and shattered the window pane,
It didn't matter to him, if he disturbed their entire lane.

He cooked and ate his dinner, now he wanted dessert,
In his mind he thought, what could one more bite hurt?,
The young man could not silence the feeling to crave,
Yet, that is what would put him right into the grave.

His wife's specialty was a heavenly, angel food cake,
And, into this one, a secret ingredient, she did bake,
A drop of deadly poison to keep her husband at home,
For, she never liked the idea of being left all alone.

He was very much in love with this pretty, young baker,
Yet, she had planned a date with the local undertaker,
Her selfish plans to tempt him, had worked all too well,
His new home, six feet under, is now where he would dwell.




Written February, 27th, 2014  For Craig Cornish's contest - "Angel Of The Odd"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Vaso Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 6:30 PM
Loved this! :)
Deschler Avatar
July 3, 2015 at 12:11 AM
Thank you, Arthur. I thought you might! :)
Dom Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 4:15 AM
a enjoyed the humour in this fantastic rhyming. Congratulations on the top spot!
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May 16, 2014 at 12:32 AM
Thank you so much for the nice comments, Michael. I'm glad that you enjoyed the dark humor in this poem! :)
Nance Avatar
May 13, 2014 at 7:45 AM
Awesome, Well done, you have me right from the start and told the story so great I didn't want to stop reading. Grats!
Deschler Avatar
May 15, 2014 at 1:19 PM
Thank you so much, Casarah! I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and didn't want it to end. Sometimes it's difficult to keep the reader's attention with a long poem. Your nice comments really meant a lot!
Halliday Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 1:36 PM
Cleverly done. Congrat~s
Deschler Avatar
May 14, 2014 at 8:04 PM
Thank you very much, Mark!
Andresen Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 11:42 AM
- A really great winning poem Kelly - (it's been a while since I've participated in any contest) - Congratulations, well deserved! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Deschler Avatar
May 14, 2014 at 3:03 PM
Thank you so much, Anne-Lise! It is nice to see you back again and taking part in the contests. :)
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 6:02 AM
tremendously written :) wow.. :) love the rhymes and how it is written .. :), GBU, olive.. :)
Deschler Avatar
May 14, 2014 at 1:43 PM
Thank you so much, Olive Eloisa! I always appreciate your kind and encouraging comments. :) :)
May Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 8:33 PM
Such a dark and sad story...congrats on the win
Deschler Avatar
May 13, 2014 at 2:00 PM
Thank you so much, Joseph!
Johnson Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 6:49 PM
Poor fellow and he was only visiting his mother. Congratulations on your big win. Love, Joyce
Deschler Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 11:20 PM
Yes, such a tragic story. Well, at least this one was fictional!... Thank you so much for stopping by, Joyce. I do appreciate your nice comments! :)
Gibson Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 3:42 PM
Congratulations on a great win, Kelly.
Deschler Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 10:51 PM
Thank you very much, Faye!
Callus Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 2:09 PM
Kelly this is so good! You could start writing stories in poetry form!! // Congrats on a deserved win:) // paul
Deschler Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 10:04 PM
Thank you so much, Paul. I really did enjoy writing this story, and I will have to do more poetry like this in the future. It reminds me of classic poems like "The Night Before Christmas" by Clement C. Moore, which was always a favorite of mine. :)
Richards Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 9:48 AM
You are a great story-teller! What an imagination...a great poem of suspense!! Congrats!!
Deschler Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 6:15 PM
Thank you so much for the nice comments, Carrie. It means a lot, and I really do appreciate it!
Bateson Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 7:09 AM
Great story. Congrats on your win..
Deschler Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 3:08 PM
Thank you very much, Betty!
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May 11, 2014 at 5:57 AM
Wow Kelly really wonderful ,, masterpiece,, congrats on top win ! Great ideas great poetry indeed !
Deschler Avatar
May 12, 2014 at 12:01 AM
Thank you so much, Dr. Upma. Your kind words really meant a lot to me!
Mehta Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 5:14 AM
Congratulations on a fine win for interesting write, Kelly
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May 11, 2014 at 11:52 PM
Thank you, Dr. Ram!
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May 11, 2014 at 2:00 AM
Hello Kelly, thank you so much for this one... I enjoyed this. If it wasn't for this poem, I'd have no #1... LOL, then by morning, many would be talking about my grading all over again. So really thank you so much. Mostly I love what and who inspired this poem.... Cheers, and have yourself a happy mother's day... Enjoy my latest blog if you like...Linda
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March 26, 2014 at 9:28 PM
Woah. thats... beyond words, I really liked it congrats on your win -Yours Truly tmp3589 (jose)
Deschler Avatar
March 26, 2014 at 10:27 PM
Thank you once again, Jose! This poem was a fun one to write, because I don't write humorously too often! I'm happy that you liked it. :)
A  Avatar
March 15, 2014 at 10:25 AM
Kelly, .. Congratulations with your awesome win...~SKAT~ :)
Deschler Avatar
March 17, 2014 at 5:12 PM
Thank you once again, SKAT! Your comments meant a lot to me! :)
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March 14, 2014 at 1:15 PM
Ahh!! Great quality poetry!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara
Deschler Avatar
March 15, 2014 at 4:28 PM
Thank you, Sara! Your comments really meant a lot to me! I appreciate you stopping by.:)
Jerden Avatar
March 10, 2014 at 3:36 PM
Now that is truly scary! Congratulations!
Deschler Avatar
March 12, 2014 at 7:00 PM
I completely agree with you, Roy! Just knowing that this kind of thing could happen is a scary thought! Thank you very much for stopping by and for the kind comments. :)
Mehta Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 11:18 PM
Brilliant write on the Angel of the Odd. Congrats on a fine win, kelly
Deschler Avatar
March 12, 2014 at 5:28 PM
Thank you so much, Dr. Ram. Your comments really meant a lot to me! :)
Harper Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 4:52 PM
Kelly, naughty little baker girl in this poem, lol, congratulations on your win
Deschler Avatar
March 11, 2014 at 7:46 PM
Yes, she was being very naughty in this poem. And, I'm sure that she will pay for it someday! LOL...Thank you very much, Sheri! I appreciate you stopping by, and I'm happy you enjoyed my poem! :)
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March 3, 2014 at 10:46 PM
What an imagination you have Kelly, that was brilliant, rhyming absolutely wonderful and easy to read, good luck in the contest you deserve to win................Vera..............
Deschler Avatar
March 6, 2014 at 4:32 PM
Thank you so much, Vera! Glad you enjoyed my poem! I always appreciate your support. This story just came into my head the other day, and this poem almost wrote itself! Poetry can be fun when the inspiration is there and the imagination is running wild. Then, the words just flow effortlessly! :)
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February 28, 2014 at 5:51 PM
*.*, Bates Motel, And Her Baby Girl Just Wanted His Love, Sweet Beautiful Kelly ~ I Admire These Past Two Poems That I Have Just Viewed For Their Exceptional Quality In Story Telling Not To Mention, Creativity: Super Ku's Girl! ~ Love John
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February 28, 2014 at 9:24 PM
Thank you so much, John! I loved your Bates Motel reference! I am a fan of that new television series, and Alfred Hitchcock's Psycho is one of my favorite movies. Thank you for understanding the dark humor that I was aiming for with this poem. Glad you enjoyed it, John! I do appreciate you stopping by. :) Love, Kelly
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