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A Teen's Foolishness

He wasn't such a bright kid, big ideas filled his head... my advice was always useless, see him now in his madness! He thought he was a genius, flashing hundred dollars bills as fools, and spending money on silly things, he didn't appreciate their worthiness. And worst of all, he quit his job as salesperson and baby-sits his baby all day to prove his fatherly affection; his fiance works nights to bring home the bread: is this teen a responsible young man or a knucklehead? An attractive young lady shouldn't be allowed to work in places where temptations abound, or where danger lurks behind the stools of a bar as drunken customers can lure anyone and drive far. Does anyone, sane as me, see this teen's foolishness; and what your advice would be in a matter such as this? Am I judging him wrong? Should I look away and approve his naive thinking by helping him increase his criminal groove? Written for Natalie:) The Rouge Rhymer's contest, " Genius or Criminal "

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 10/5/2011 9:25:00 AM
Amazing poem. The teen boy truly is being more childish than he should, and leaving his fiance to work in a bar at nights is irresponsible. Great work! Keep writing :)
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Date: 9/30/2011 1:07:00 PM
Dear Andrew, I usually feel it's not my place to judge, but I would make an exception here. This teenage boy probably didn't even want to be a father and now to have his fiance working in a bar so he can laze around at home...grrr. Gets my dander up! Awesome poem. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/29/2011 11:42:00 AM
Nice one Andrew-congrats. on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 9/29/2011 7:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in this contest Andrew. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/29/2011 5:57:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of Natalie, Andrew
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Date: 9/29/2011 12:29:00 AM
Congratulations in the contest, Andrew.This sounds like someone close to you? A relative maybe? Not a criminal, just YOUNG hahaha
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Date: 9/28/2011 10:36:00 PM
Congrats Andrew on another excellent win with these brilliant words reflecting contest theme my friend..luv..
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Date: 9/19/2011 3:12:00 AM
teenage romps can be confusing, andrew... a smart arite, indeed! beat of luck! :) huggs,nette
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Date: 9/19/2011 2:15:00 AM
truly teen foolishness and some adults....lol...this is great Andrew....smiles...chiquita
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