A State of Separation

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A State Of Separation He looks and sees yon desk there'd be, a missing book, so he searched his tattered mind. Yet, be surprised wherein, he'd find, a mind of clear consciousness-- with open eyes, again surprised... Yon shelf there'd be his book, but wore a troubled look, for whence he knew not how'd it came to be. Afraid, yet ventured 'tis curiosity, but, for what he feared has now returned, a tattered mind once again. With open eyes, he looks around, yon desk and shelf, and oddly gazed a floor, as a book, sits unfound once more. 2019 May 25 *5th Place* CONTEST 600,ANY FREE VERSE ,ANY THEME,UP TO A MAX OF 20 LINES ~~Brian Strand

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Susan Ashley

Date: 6/2/2019 8:21:00 PM

A haunting and potent poem, William, conveyed with such stirring artistry. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/2/2019 8:41:00 PM

A tight finale it be, TG for niceties sake Susan, keeps my head and heart up for effort, Aloha William

Caycay Jennings

Date: 5/29/2019 8:07:00 AM

Tantalizing - this poem shall sit with me for a good while. It stirred my mind into contemplation - in a very good way poetically. It moved me. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/29/2019 9:05:00 AM

I am touched by your heartfelt words this morning CayCay, Aloha William

Line Gauthier

Date: 5/26/2019 7:37:00 AM

Well penned with impact, William.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/26/2019 7:45:00 AM

Thanks again Line for stopping by for the above, Aloha wk