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A Somber Vow

My somber vow: I’ll fix my gaze on you
And light for you an all-consuming flame,
Yet you won’t even know it when I do.

This promissory bond is burning true,
Not just a smoky wisp or idle game.
My somber vow: I’ll fix my gaze on you.

Your timidness I’ll blindly blaze right through
Without a hint of vanity or shame,
Yet you won’t even know it when I do.

It’s you I have so ruthlessly in view;
I care not for your riches or your fame.
My somber vow: I’ll fix my gaze on you.

Yet until then I calmly bid adieu;
Weep not, nor wait for me to wail your name,
Since you won’t even know it when I do.

For I am Death. My fire is fiercely due;
On every soul I set my searing claim.
My somber vow: I’ll fix my gaze on you,
Yet you won’t even know it when I do.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 2/15/2019 6:38:00 PM
Hi Ed-- How nice to read an intelligent poem which doesn't stoop to hokey "poetic" disfiguring of proper English word order and diction, or non- or almost-rhymes (all right in less formal structures but inappropriate for villanelles or sonnets); and the subject matter is well chosen for the form. Well done!
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Date: 2/11/2019 9:09:00 PM
Brrr... quite an impact. A lovely poem, Ed. Bravo. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Ed Morris
Date: 2/12/2019 11:02:00 AM
Thank you, Line.
Date: 2/2/2019 1:06:00 PM
Back with congratulations!!!
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Date: 2/1/2019 7:21:00 PM
Ed, a brilliant theme for a Villanelle! The tone is haunting and the form adds to it with its repetition. Surprising reveal at the end! Congratulations on your win on mile 15 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon Contest. Thank you so much for supporting my contests. By continuing to place in the contests you are accumulating points toward the final. ~Mark
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Ed Morris
Date: 2/1/2019 9:42:00 PM
Thank you, Mark.
Date: 1/29/2019 11:44:00 PM
Whoa! very cool! ditto the comments below. I thought the guy was a little creepy...and well what's creepier than the Grim Reaper himself!
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Date: 1/30/2019 1:19:00 PM
Thank you, P.S.
Date: 1/29/2019 10:41:00 AM
Gah! I thought it was a stalker, then it turned out to be the ULTIMATE stalker. Man, I hate that guy. Great, great villanelle Ed!
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Date: 1/29/2019 10:59:00 AM
Thank you, Nina. Hope I didn't freak you out too much. :-)
Date: 1/28/2019 6:07:00 PM
Ed, A villanelle with a twist at the end. It started like a love story and ended quite dark. The rhyme scheme in a villanelle is not easy to do, but you did it nicely. Blessings, Susan
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Date: 1/28/2019 8:59:00 PM
That's pretty much the effect I was going for, making it get darker and darker until the actor is revealed to be Death. Thank for letting me know it worked. :-)
Date: 1/28/2019 8:36:00 AM
Wow wonderful lines
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Date: 1/28/2019 8:57:00 PM
Thank you, Hamzat.