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A Somber Song

Rainy days and Mondays guide my journey Looking for rich harvest in barren fields, Disappointing me with grudging demeanor For you my love have never lived there. My morning awakens as if from a dream Roaming still, to capture feelings of glee Set free by your soul departing mournfully, Looking meekly at what could have been. Though the butterflies still roam our lawn No longer do they invite forlorn dawn To glisten rose-blossoms you left behind Knowing they too have lost their charm. Winds keep twirling remnants of fragrance Hoping rich-scent will mimic your presence Discarding sullen gloom of rainy day vibes, Ignoring pessimism of despondent skies. As I set out to write: together we belong, Words I penned changed their meaning Soon after a comma held me spellbound, Shifting my verses to form a somber song. February 21, 2018 Placed first in mid-January 2019 contest by Brian Strand Placed 2nd:Rainy days and Mondays contest by Silent One

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Valsa George

Date: 4/24/2023 8:53:00 AM

A somber song falls in my ears. As ever, lovely penning, dear Vijay

Brandy Nicole

Date: 1/19/2019 11:07:00 PM

Beautiful, emotional and tender. Your thoughts softly curl around me. A touch of sadness lingers. Love remains, yet- drifts at the same time. Congratulations Vijay, on both wins. ~ Brandy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/17/2019 7:30:00 PM

looks like you won again a year later with this one, Vijay. BElated Congrats. So glad for you it made Brian's list.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/16/2019 3:42:00 PM

Well written, Vijay, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve ~`*

Vladislav Raven

Date: 12/20/2018 10:34:00 AM

Hi Vijay, your pen can set its nib to any theme and bring forth excellence. An excellent write, and worthy of Silent's placement in the contest. Much belated congratulations in the contest my friend. Your heart does sing a true somber song. Such a deep write my friend. Wonderful to read you this afternoon. Have a wonderful Wednesday. your friend always....Mike.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/27/2018 5:16:00 PM

CONGRATS on your well-deserved win, Vijay! Janice

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/27/2018 9:36:00 AM

Congratulations for your win Vijay :)

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/24/2018 6:48:00 PM

Congrats on your fine win, Vijay.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/25/2018 11:50:00 AM

Thank you Line.

Probir Gupta

Date: 2/24/2018 10:40:00 AM

Congratulations for the wonderful win of this great poem , Vijay ... Plenty of alliteration and rhyme, the free verse form notwithstanding ...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/25/2018 11:50:00 AM

Thank you Probir..appreciate your comments.

Sathya Babu

Date: 2/23/2018 9:07:00 PM

I love this Poem. Great Write. Many Congrats on your WIN!!! Regards,Sathya

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2018 5:36:00 AM

Thank you Sathya.

Barbara Barry-Nishanian

Date: 2/23/2018 2:48:00 PM

Beautifully sad. You touch hearts easily. Congrats. bbn

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 5:01:00 PM

Thank you barbara.

Joseph May

Date: 2/23/2018 1:14:00 PM

Congrats on your win Vijay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 5:01:00 PM

Thank you Joseph.

Charlie Smith

Date: 2/23/2018 11:26:00 AM

Wonderful, mournful write Vijay, congratulations...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 5:01:00 PM

Thank you Charlie.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/23/2018 6:27:00 AM

- Bautiful written, Vijay :) - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs and happy weekend // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 5:01:00 PM

Thank you Anne-Lise.

Silent One

Date: 2/23/2018 5:46:00 AM

A melancholic song Vijay, great rhyme and flow.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 5:02:00 PM

Thank you Silent One.

Eve Roper

Date: 2/23/2018 12:47:00 AM

Beautiful write perfect rhyme! Good luck in the contest.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 5:19:00 AM

Thank you Eve..appreciate your comments.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/22/2018 5:52:00 PM

I love your reference to the song rainy days and Mondays always get me down. I really like that song a lot. It sets a beautiful tone for the rest of your poem. Lovely! Best of luck in the contest. : )

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 5:19:00 AM

Thank you Connie..appreciate your kind words.

Joseph May

Date: 2/22/2018 7:26:00 AM

A journey through gray skies and somber songs..GL in the contest Vijay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/22/2018 11:32:00 AM

Thank you Joseph..appreciate your comments.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/21/2018 3:33:00 PM

I like how you let the Monday morning blues capture you in this poetic moment, Vijay. Good work.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/21/2018 4:26:00 PM

Thank you Andrea..appreciate your kind words.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/21/2018 2:26:00 PM

wow, you took the sullen, deep trail, vijay.. amazing poem!... huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/21/2018 2:56:00 PM

Thank you nette..appreciate your comments.

Mike Gentile

Date: 2/21/2018 12:28:00 PM

A poignant write, Vijay. I especially like the last line, Good Luck !!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/21/2018 1:32:00 PM

Appreciate your comments Mike--many thanks.

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/21/2018 11:55:00 AM

Very nice Vijay. I like the line - winds keep twirling remnants of fragrance -. Good luck in the contest :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/21/2018 1:32:00 PM

Thank you Heidi..appreciate your kind words.

Maria Williams

Date: 2/21/2018 6:25:00 AM

My goodness Vijay, you are such a prolific writer of any genre and this is no exception. I enjoyed your nostalgic poem and all the best in the Contest...Maria

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/21/2018 8:37:00 AM

Always enjoy your visit and comments..many thanks Maria.

Supraja Kannan

Date: 2/21/2018 6:23:00 AM

This is so deep but beautiful... Reads like a winner... So unique... Good luck in the contest....

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/21/2018 8:36:00 AM

Thank you Supraja. In keeping with the theme, I scripted a somber scene.