Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

A Somber Song

Rainy days and Mondays guide my journey
Looking for rich harvest in barren fields,
Disappointing me with grudging demeanor
For you my love have never lived there.

My morning awakens as if from a dream
Roaming still, to capture feelings of glee
Set free by your soul departing mournfully,
Looking meekly at what could have been.

Though the butterflies still roam our lawn
No longer do they invite forlorn dawn
To glisten rose-blossoms you left behind
Knowing they too have lost their charm.

Winds keep twirling remnants of fragrance
Hoping rich-scent will mimic your presence
Discarding sullen gloom of rainy day vibes,
Ignoring pessimism of despondent skies.

As I set out to write: together we belong,
Words I penned changed their meaning
Soon after a comma held me spellbound,
Shifting my verses to form a somber song.

February 21, 2018
Placed first in mid-January 2019 contest by Brian Strand
Placed 2nd:Rainy days and Mondays contest by Silent One

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Valsa George April 24, 2023 at 8:53 AM A somber song falls in my ears. As ever, lovely penning, dear Vijay

Brandy Nicole January 19, 2019 at 11:07 PM Beautiful, emotional and tender. Your thoughts softly curl around me. A touch of sadness lingers. Love remains, yet- drifts at the same time. Congratulations Vijay, on both wins. ~ Brandy

Andrea Dietrich January 17, 2019 at 7:30 PM looks like you won again a year later with this one, Vijay. BElated Congrats. So glad for you it made Brian's list.

Eve Roper January 16, 2019 at 3:42 PM Well written, Vijay, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve ~`*

Vladislav Raven December 20, 2018 at 10:34 AM Hi Vijay, your pen can set its nib to any theme and bring forth excellence. An excellent write, and worthy of Silent's placement in the contest. Much belated congratulations in the contest my friend. Your heart does sing a true somber song. Such a deep write my friend. Wonderful to read you this afternoon. Have a wonderful Wednesday. your friend always....Mike.

Janice Canerdy February 27, 2018 at 5:16 PM CONGRATS on your well-deserved win, Vijay! Janice

Heidi Sands February 27, 2018 at 9:36 AM Congratulations for your win Vijay :)

Line Gauthier February 24, 2018 at 6:48 PM Congrats on your fine win, Vijay. Vijay Pandit February 25, 2018 at 11:50 AM Thank you Line.

Probir Gupta February 24, 2018 at 10:40 AM Congratulations for the wonderful win of this great poem , Vijay ... Plenty of alliteration and rhyme, the free verse form notwithstanding ... Vijay Pandit February 25, 2018 at 11:50 AM Thank you Probir..appreciate your comments.

Sathya Babu February 23, 2018 at 9:07 PM I love this Poem. Great Write. Many Congrats on your WIN!!! Regards,Sathya Vijay Pandit February 24, 2018 at 5:36 AM Thank you Sathya.

Barbara Barry-Nishanian February 23, 2018 at 2:48 PM Beautifully sad. You touch hearts easily. Congrats. bbn Vijay Pandit February 23, 2018 at 5:01 PM Thank you barbara.

Joseph May February 23, 2018 at 1:14 PM Congrats on your win Vijay Vijay Pandit February 23, 2018 at 5:01 PM Thank you Joseph.

Charlie Smith February 23, 2018 at 11:26 AM Wonderful, mournful write Vijay, congratulations... Vijay Pandit February 23, 2018 at 5:01 PM Thank you Charlie.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 23, 2018 at 6:27 AM - Bautiful written, Vijay :) - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs and happy weekend // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit February 23, 2018 at 5:01 PM Thank you Anne-Lise.

Silent One February 23, 2018 at 5:46 AM A melancholic song Vijay, great rhyme and flow.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. Vijay Pandit February 23, 2018 at 5:02 PM Thank you Silent One.

Eve Roper February 23, 2018 at 12:47 AM Beautiful write perfect rhyme! Good luck in the contest. Vijay Pandit February 23, 2018 at 5:19 AM Thank you Eve..appreciate your comments.

Connie Marcum Wong February 22, 2018 at 5:52 PM I love your reference to the song rainy days and Mondays always get me down. I really like that song a lot. It sets a beautiful tone for the rest of your poem. Lovely! Best of luck in the contest. : ) Vijay Pandit February 23, 2018 at 5:19 AM Thank you Connie..appreciate your kind words.

Joseph May February 22, 2018 at 7:26 AM A journey through gray skies and somber songs..GL in the contest Vijay Vijay Pandit February 22, 2018 at 11:32 AM Thank you Joseph..appreciate your comments.

Andrea Dietrich February 21, 2018 at 3:33 PM I like how you let the Monday morning blues capture you in this poetic moment, Vijay. Good work. Vijay Pandit February 21, 2018 at 4:26 PM Thank you Andrea..appreciate your kind words.

Nette Onclaud February 21, 2018 at 2:26 PM wow, you took the sullen, deep trail, vijay.. amazing poem!... huggs Vijay Pandit February 21, 2018 at 2:56 PM Thank you nette..appreciate your comments.

Mike Gentile February 21, 2018 at 12:28 PM A poignant write, Vijay. I especially like the last line, Good Luck !! Vijay Pandit February 21, 2018 at 1:32 PM Appreciate your comments Mike--many thanks.

Heidi Sands February 21, 2018 at 11:55 AM Very nice Vijay. I like the line - winds keep twirling remnants of fragrance -. Good luck in the contest :) Vijay Pandit February 21, 2018 at 1:32 PM Thank you Heidi..appreciate your kind words.

Maria Williams February 21, 2018 at 6:25 AM My goodness Vijay, you are such a prolific writer of any genre and this is no exception. I enjoyed your nostalgic poem and all the best in the Contest...Maria Vijay Pandit February 21, 2018 at 8:37 AM Always enjoy your visit and comments..many thanks Maria.

Supraja Kannan February 21, 2018 at 6:23 AM This is so deep but beautiful... Reads like a winner... So unique... Good luck in the contest.... Vijay Pandit February 21, 2018 at 8:36 AM Thank you Supraja. In keeping with the theme, I scripted a somber scene.