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A Solar Sacrifice

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Poetic Form: Sonnet
Inspired: 2019 August 17

*1st Place*
A Summer's Day Redo
Contest Judged: 2019 August 20
Sponsored by: Michelle Faulkner

Image: Sun rays at an isle at bay by AlphaBeta

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Temporal a passage traipse in units, Partitioned Earth's axis and Sun's movements. Temperate seasons buds the cosmos plains, Text the gods, links the nightshade, spare the chains. Constellate heaven, possession errs bliss, Lease the sky morning dew, sunrise--lips kiss. Evergreen sanctioned untrimmed yields to gold. Shade, consumed by the sun, glaring, behold. The complexion, the surface enlightens. Eternal trolls rest, withdraw the Titans, Unique tan for the wayward souls loosen, Fading footed beach traces ought proven. Temperate gold buds, untrimmed, lease heaven, The eternal god's shade Sun's complexion.

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Sandra Adams

Date: 8/30/2019 7:58:00 PM

This is breathtaking, it overflows in beauty, i stand in awe of your words, congrats on your top win with this worthy gem :) hugs

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/14/2019 9:14:00 PM

OMgoodness! How'd I miss this, nonetheless, manageable to address--THANKS! ~ Aloha always William

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 8/29/2019 11:35:00 PM

William, this is heavenly poetry - you so deserved your 1st placing - congratulations. I loved the power of the poem and the way the required words made this poem stand out proudly. Hugs, Jennifer.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/30/2019 12:10:00 AM

A super shout out to you all the way there from Hawaii --THANKS ~ ALOHA William

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/29/2019 5:52:00 PM

Wow wow wow William! I see why this brilliant poem garnered the First Place win! It is simply stunning. I had to put on my Sun glasses to read it! Congratulations on your most deserving win! I think I deleted your comment to my poem by mistake when trying to correct my response. Sorry Mahalo xxoo

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/29/2019 5:57:00 PM

I forgot about this but after reading it again since then--wow, did I write that? Thanks, Connie

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/29/2019 3:27:00 PM

Congratulations, William!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/29/2019 3:37:00 PM

Totally forgot I wrote bout couple weeks ago--thanks!

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 8/29/2019 3:02:00 PM

Wow, William, this is simply mesmerizing. I found it glorious, congratulations on placing 1st in my contest!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/29/2019 3:09:00 PM

Double wow, I've been misreading, misinterpreting and yes then there's the wow factor brings it all in -- my many thanks indeed ~ Aloha William