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A Slave to Your Gaze

Stunning turquoise eyes
     Clear, bright and captivating
          Couldn’t look away

A slave to your gaze
     I needed to see your soul
          Peered through the windows

Deep warmth camouflaged
     Eyes locked as two became one
          Our joyful hearts soared




*For Michael's "Eyes First Meet" contest
by Carolyn Devonshire

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 11/12/2012 8:47:00 AM
Such a passionate Senryu here Carolyn!Enjoyed again.
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Date: 10/6/2011 4:13:00 PM
CAme back to this oldie of yours to say, I don't remember what I commented to jack about his poem. Usually he does short ones so I probably told him I liked it short? Anyway, I stand by that. The judge you mentioned is very different from me. She did not like one of my poems in one of her last contests because she told me it was not enough detail. I disagreed and would not change it. I think shorter poems are usually better (not in all cases but generally speaking!!)
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Date: 10/6/2011 4:13:00 PM
I lost too. haha
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Date: 4/9/2011 12:56:00 PM
by the way, I think that wedding song came out in 69, but I could be wrong. I was thinking I met Glenn(son of the preacher man in 69). since I am sure I was 14 then. Didn't you love that song? Glad you liked my ending. I was so repulsed hahahaha. Something you have to aquire a "taste" for!!
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Date: 4/5/2011 2:54:00 PM
...man...I'm really bad on the keys Carolyn, when I try to type fast, lol
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Date: 4/5/2011 2:52:00 PM
I'm not 'fin nin' ta read all these comment my friend ;) yet I do sea's that a Congratulations is in order here(((((claps))))) And it is a fine one write dear poet ! Have a great week Carolyn....much love, james....by-the-by; I'll be answering your e-m shortly;)
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Date: 4/4/2011 5:52:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Carolyn in the contest "Eyes First Meet" sponsored by Michael Falotico. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/3/2011 7:23:00 PM
just lovely Carolyn, congrats on your win in the contest
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Date: 4/3/2011 11:34:00 AM
Big congratulations on your win in Michael's contest," When Eyes First Met." I am so happy for you, Carolyn! Your amazing talent has brought, once again, to the top of the winners' list. Be very proud of your achievement and smile! God bless you and watch over you. May your Sunday be filled with inspiration and happiness. Peace and Love, Andrew.
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Date: 4/2/2011 1:58:00 PM
I really liked this. Glad to see it so high,Carolyn. WEll deserved win!
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Date: 4/2/2011 12:01:00 PM
So great to see this one at the top Carolyn, congratulations to you.. Love Wilma
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Date: 4/2/2011 6:19:00 AM
An awesome write from you Carolyn!Congrats on your 2nd place win--kash
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Date: 4/2/2011 1:43:00 AM
Sensatioanl string Senryu, Carolyn. Many congrations on your BIG WIN. Lainie
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Date: 4/2/2011 1:07:00 AM
Loved it first time round, gets even better second time round,congrats Carolyn, your words are so wonderful so full of meaning. Harry
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Date: 4/1/2011 11:53:00 PM
This sure is a very romantic write Carolyn- could almost picture those turquoise eyes too! Super congrats on your win :) hugs
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Date: 4/1/2011 9:38:00 PM
Many many heartiest congrats for this super win dear Carolyn.
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Date: 4/1/2011 5:40:00 PM
I knew this wold be high and glad I was right. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/1/2011 4:10:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 4/1/2011 3:09:00 PM
Congratulations on the second place win in the contest of Michael, Carolyn
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Date: 4/1/2011 2:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your amazing 2nd Place Win with this gem in Michael's "Eyes First meet" Contest, Carolyn! Love, Annalise
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Date: 4/1/2011 2:49:00 PM
like i said, this is a gem of a piece , carols... you've got that " staying " power!! super CONGRATS for the big win..:) huggs, nette
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Date: 4/1/2011 2:17:00 PM
Congrats my dear Carolyn on your 2nd place win in my contest... And I will be catching up on your work this weekend..love Michael
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Date: 4/1/2011 12:29:00 PM
Yes Carolyn, much much better! Cough medicine helped considerably -- coughed so hard my head ached:( Pharmacist did advise the cough medicine wouldn't entirely get rid of the cough though and she was right on that. It's tolerable;) This has been one of the nastiest colds I've had in a long time! Thought I'd let you know I'm on the mend:)
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Date: 4/1/2011 10:48:00 AM
a beautiful piece of poetry. thank you for reading my the cellar door and for your comment.
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Date: 3/31/2011 1:41:00 PM
three lovely poems each one individually worthy of a prize i like eyes so much and you have summed up their qualites so beautifully....well done Carolyn......you should win with this one Ok
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