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A Slave To Your Gaze

Stunning turquoise eyes
     Clear, bright and captivating
          Couldn’t look away

A slave to your gaze
     I needed to see your soul
          Peered through the windows

Deep warmth camouflaged
     Eyes locked as two became one
          Our joyful hearts soared




*For Michael's "Eyes First Meet" contest
by Carolyn Devonshire

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Kash Poet Date: 11/12/2012 8:47:00 AM Such a passionate Senryu here Carolyn!Enjoyed again. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/6/2011 4:13:00 PM CAme back to this oldie of yours to say, I don't remember what I commented to jack about his poem. Usually he does short ones so I probably told him I liked it short? Anyway, I stand by that. The judge you mentioned is very different from me. She did not like one of my poems in one of her last contests because she told me it was not enough detail. I disagreed and would not change it. I think shorter poems are usually better (not in all cases but generally speaking!!) Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/6/2011 4:13:00 PM I lost too. haha Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/9/2011 12:56:00 PM by the way, I think that wedding song came out in 69, but I could be wrong. I was thinking I met Glenn(son of the preacher man in 69). since I am sure I was 14 then. Didn't you love that song? Glad you liked my ending. I was so repulsed hahahaha. Something you have to aquire a "taste" for!! Login to Reply

James Peranteau Date: 4/5/2011 2:54:00 PM ...man...I'm really bad on the keys Carolyn, when I try to type fast, lol Login to Reply

James Peranteau Date: 4/5/2011 2:52:00 PM I'm not 'fin nin' ta read all these comment my friend ;) yet I do sea's that a Congratulations is in order here(((((claps))))) And it is a fine one write dear poet ! Have a great week Carolyn....much love, james....by-the-by; I'll be answering your e-m shortly;) Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 4/4/2011 5:52:00 AM Congratulations on your win Carolyn in the contest "Eyes First Meet" sponsored by Michael Falotico. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Francine Roberts Date: 4/3/2011 7:23:00 PM just lovely Carolyn, congrats on your win in the contest Login to Reply

Andrew Crisci Date: 4/3/2011 11:34:00 AM Big congratulations on your win in Michael's contest," When Eyes First Met." I am so happy for you, Carolyn! Your amazing talent has brought, once again, to the top of the winners' list. Be very proud of your achievement and smile! God bless you and watch over you. May your Sunday be filled with inspiration and happiness. Peace and Love, Andrew. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/2/2011 1:58:00 PM I really liked this. Glad to see it so high,Carolyn. WEll deserved win! Login to Reply

Wilma Neels Date: 4/2/2011 12:01:00 PM So great to see this one at the top Carolyn, congratulations to you.. Love Wilma Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 4/2/2011 6:19:00 AM An awesome write from you Carolyn!Congrats on your 2nd place win--kash Login to Reply

Elaine George Date: 4/2/2011 1:43:00 AM Sensatioanl string Senryu, Carolyn. Many congrations on your BIG WIN. Lainie Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 4/2/2011 1:07:00 AM Loved it first time round, gets even better second time round,congrats Carolyn, your words are so wonderful so full of meaning. Harry Login to Reply

Kabuteng P.Ink K. Date: 4/1/2011 11:53:00 PM This sure is a very romantic write Carolyn- could almost picture those turquoise eyes too! Super congrats on your win :) hugs Login to Reply

Tahera Mannan Date: 4/1/2011 9:38:00 PM Many many heartiest congrats for this super win dear Carolyn. Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 4/1/2011 5:40:00 PM I knew this wold be high and glad I was right. Congratulations. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 4/1/2011 4:10:00 PM Congratulations on your win..Sara Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 4/1/2011 3:09:00 PM Congratulations on the second place win in the contest of Michael, Carolyn Login to Reply

Audrey Haick Date: 4/1/2011 2:50:00 PM Congratulations on your amazing 2nd Place Win with this gem in Michael's "Eyes First meet" Contest, Carolyn! Love, Annalise Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 4/1/2011 2:49:00 PM like i said, this is a gem of a piece , carols... you've got that " staying " power!! super CONGRATS for the big win..:) huggs, nette Login to Reply

Michael J. Falotico Date: 4/1/2011 2:17:00 PM Congrats my dear Carolyn on your 2nd place win in my contest... And I will be catching up on your work this weekend..love Michael Login to Reply

Carol Fillmore Date: 4/1/2011 12:29:00 PM Yes Carolyn, much much better! Cough medicine helped considerably -- coughed so hard my head ached:( Pharmacist did advise the cough medicine wouldn't entirely get rid of the cough though and she was right on that. It's tolerable;) This has been one of the nastiest colds I've had in a long time! Thought I'd let you know I'm on the mend:) Login to Reply

James Foulk Date: 4/1/2011 10:48:00 AM a beautiful piece of poetry. thank you for reading my the cellar door and for your comment. Login to Reply

Sidney Beck Date: 3/31/2011 1:41:00 PM three lovely poems each one individually worthy of a prize i like eyes so much and you have summed up their qualites so beautifully....well done Carolyn......you should win with this one Ok Login to Reply

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