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A Slave To Your Gaze

Stunning turquoise eyes Clear, bright and captivating Couldn’t look away A slave to your gaze I needed to see your soul Peered through the windows Deep warmth camouflaged Eyes locked as two became one Our joyful hearts soared *For Michael's "Eyes First Meet" contest by Carolyn Devonshire

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Kash Poet

Date: 11/12/2012 8:47:00 AM

Such a passionate Senryu here Carolyn!Enjoyed again.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2011 4:13:00 PM

CAme back to this oldie of yours to say, I don't remember what I commented to jack about his poem. Usually he does short ones so I probably told him I liked it short? Anyway, I stand by that. The judge you mentioned is very different from me. She did not like one of my poems in one of her last contests because she told me it was not enough detail. I disagreed and would not change it. I think shorter poems are usually better (not in all cases but generally speaking!!)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2011 4:13:00 PM

I lost too. haha

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/9/2011 12:56:00 PM

by the way, I think that wedding song came out in 69, but I could be wrong. I was thinking I met Glenn(son of the preacher man in 69). since I am sure I was 14 then. Didn't you love that song? Glad you liked my ending. I was so repulsed hahahaha. Something you have to aquire a "taste" for!!

James Peranteau

Date: 4/5/2011 2:54:00 PM

...man...I'm really bad on the keys Carolyn, when I try to type fast, lol

James Peranteau

Date: 4/5/2011 2:52:00 PM

I'm not 'fin nin' ta read all these comment my friend ;) yet I do sea's that a Congratulations is in order here(((((claps))))) And it is a fine one write dear poet ! Have a great week Carolyn....much love, james....by-the-by; I'll be answering your e-m shortly;)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/4/2011 5:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Carolyn in the contest "Eyes First Meet" sponsored by Michael Falotico. Love, Carol

Francine Roberts

Date: 4/3/2011 7:23:00 PM

just lovely Carolyn, congrats on your win in the contest

Andrew Crisci

Date: 4/3/2011 11:34:00 AM

Big congratulations on your win in Michael's contest," When Eyes First Met." I am so happy for you, Carolyn! Your amazing talent has brought, once again, to the top of the winners' list. Be very proud of your achievement and smile! God bless you and watch over you. May your Sunday be filled with inspiration and happiness. Peace and Love, Andrew.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/2/2011 1:58:00 PM

I really liked this. Glad to see it so high,Carolyn. WEll deserved win!

Wilma Neels

Date: 4/2/2011 12:01:00 PM

So great to see this one at the top Carolyn, congratulations to you.. Love Wilma

Kash Poet

Date: 4/2/2011 6:19:00 AM

An awesome write from you Carolyn!Congrats on your 2nd place win--kash

Elaine George

Date: 4/2/2011 1:43:00 AM

Sensatioanl string Senryu, Carolyn. Many congrations on your BIG WIN. Lainie

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/2/2011 1:07:00 AM

Loved it first time round, gets even better second time round,congrats Carolyn, your words are so wonderful so full of meaning. Harry

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/1/2011 11:53:00 PM

This sure is a very romantic write Carolyn- could almost picture those turquoise eyes too! Super congrats on your win :) hugs

Tahera Mannan

Date: 4/1/2011 9:38:00 PM

Many many heartiest congrats for this super win dear Carolyn.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 4/1/2011 5:40:00 PM

I knew this wold be high and glad I was right. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/1/2011 4:10:00 PM

Congratulations on your win..Sara

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/1/2011 3:09:00 PM

Congratulations on the second place win in the contest of Michael, Carolyn

Audrey Haick

Date: 4/1/2011 2:50:00 PM

Congratulations on your amazing 2nd Place Win with this gem in Michael's "Eyes First meet" Contest, Carolyn! Love, Annalise

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/1/2011 2:49:00 PM

like i said, this is a gem of a piece , carols... you've got that " staying " power!! super CONGRATS for the big win..:) huggs, nette

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 4/1/2011 2:17:00 PM

Congrats my dear Carolyn on your 2nd place win in my contest... And I will be catching up on your work this weekend..love Michael

Carol Fillmore

Date: 4/1/2011 12:29:00 PM

Yes Carolyn, much much better! Cough medicine helped considerably -- coughed so hard my head ached:( Pharmacist did advise the cough medicine wouldn't entirely get rid of the cough though and she was right on that. It's tolerable;) This has been one of the nastiest colds I've had in a long time! Thought I'd let you know I'm on the mend:)

James Foulk

Date: 4/1/2011 10:48:00 AM

a beautiful piece of poetry. thank you for reading my the cellar door and for your comment.

Sidney Beck

Date: 3/31/2011 1:41:00 PM

three lovely poems each one individually worthy of a prize i like eyes so much and you have summed up their qualites so beautifully....well done Carolyn......you should win with this one Ok