A Shipwrecked Heart's Lament

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Written: January 24, 2025 for contest Sponsored by: Miranda Hawley ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Refuse, to ignite fuse Whispers weave, wild bruise Faintly forced into mouthpiece Child playing robbers - police Shooting flute inside nose The breeze seeking repose Like egotistic carnival clown Wander behind his frown Hopes cowards trusted crime Burned past reveals slime Salty bitterness sprayed away Shipwreck on frozen day Comfort me into restfulness Never forget next zestfulness Climbing trees everyday fun And laughing has begun

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/31/2025 12:59:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing. Sara K

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/31/2025 8:37:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Lasaad! Lots of interesting imagery.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/31/2025 2:52:00 AM

- ... and laughing has begun, Las :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs

Terry Miller

Date: 1/31/2025 1:56:00 AM

Wonderful poem for the contest, congratulations

Miranda Hawley

Date: 1/30/2025 8:15:00 PM

There were two trees that my sister and I climbed on the regular at my granny's and buddy's (grandpa's) house. Not so sure about the shipwreck on frozen day, because that sounds horrible, but other than that line your poem is whimsical. Congratulations on your win in my contest.

Paige Hind

Date: 1/26/2025 10:43:00 AM

Wonderful rhyme- makes you feel so much

Jay Narain

Date: 1/26/2025 9:47:00 AM

Nice poem.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 1/26/2025 6:57:00 AM

SP, I'm with you. Having fun is much better as a pastime than not. At least we can enjoy the time we have left!

Ink Empress

Date: 1/24/2025 11:32:00 PM

The ending is beautiful and comforting to read, in a world that is often like a circus how one seeks for comfort and serenity can be felt throughout this profound and well written poem! I love the way youv written in such a descriptive manner as always dr sotto, especially lines such as “ Like egotistic carnival clown Wander behind his frown” deep and powerful! And “ Salty bitterness sprayed away Shipwreck on frozen day” there’s so much said there in those lines! Best wishes always.