A Shaft of Light

There, within the sinister forest of despair he stood
Numb, lost as to what next to do

Before him lay a pathway to where…so unclear
As an empty feeling grasped his psyche, instead 

Being a man, in subtle silence he bled
And in solitude made plans his heart held

Many boulders, stones lined the way
Soon became craggy mountains meant to stay 

With blind faith, his gradual steps moved him to find
A future yet unseen, yet vivid in his mind

Soon, his eyes widen as he watched the fading night
As slicing through dense thicket arose a shaft of light
~*~
02/13/13

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 3/2/2014 10:56:00 AM
so glad to see this beauty was a winner xx
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Date: 2/18/2013 12:26:00 AM
Congrats on the win. Enjoyed the poem:) Jag
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Date: 2/17/2013 9:34:00 PM
Annalise, stopping by to enjoy all of Seren's "Shaft of light " winners.. Congratulations with your awesome poem. xox~ PD
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Date: 2/17/2013 9:17:00 AM
Congrats on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 2/17/2013 7:05:00 AM
great write and win....Congrats Annalise
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Date: 2/17/2013 3:16:00 AM
Congratulations Annalise and thank you....seren
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Date: 2/17/2013 12:08:00 AM
wonderfully done Annalise, congrats on your win in the contest
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Date: 2/16/2013 10:27:00 PM
You've taken a different direction with your take on the shaft of light than the other's I've read on the winners list. I really like this journey...it shows bravery of heart. Congrats on your win...really great poem.
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Date: 2/16/2013 8:47:00 PM
yep, you are 5th place. Congratulations!!
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Date: 2/16/2013 8:46:00 PM
Here is one I had not seen before of yours. Glad to be seeing it now. I have not come from that winners list, but I am sure this one must be on the list! Later I will find out for sure. I loved how you introduced the shaft of light in the last couplet, rising through dense thicket.
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Date: 2/15/2013 12:04:00 PM
Annalise great message...David
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Date: 2/14/2013 1:33:00 PM
This was very enjoyable and I liked how it ended.
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Date: 2/14/2013 1:03:00 PM
yes, I agree with Russell - love it
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Date: 2/13/2013 9:50:00 PM
This is a fabulous write Annalise! I enjoyed reading it this evening! What a delightful poem, I loved it! Great Work!!
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