A Sense For Sin

Hear the thunder within your ears,
Crashing down upon your fears,
See the footsteps from their meeting,
Behind it all, we are secretly bleeding,
Smell the blood upon the air,
Signaling murder without a flare,
Taste the embers upon your tongue,
Our weapons become obsolete, dull, and blunt,
Feel me tremble from your cold touch,
Sense the sorrow, fing the joy, although there isn't much.

~Ed Owens
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Antypas Avatar
September 2, 2008 at 7:25 PM
Right on!! Great poem!! Edit your last line, though (fing). Flows very well.
Burton Avatar
September 1, 2008 at 8:55 PM
great poem, reads smoothly and tends to gives me messages in each line. enjoyed it.
Matheny Avatar
August 31, 2008 at 3:07 PM
What R U Doin???!!!
Matheny Avatar
August 30, 2008 at 7:27 PM
What's up? Why Haven't you talked to me lately??
White Avatar
August 30, 2008 at 7:06 PM
Hi Ed welcome to the soup, this is a sad and deeple reflective write, I can feel the sadness and despair, pray and keep the faith, take care D-nyce
Matheny Avatar
August 29, 2008 at 7:00 PM
R u not talking to me or wat??????!!!!!!!!
Matheny Avatar
August 28, 2008 at 5:17 PM
Hey r u goin to talk to me, Cutie????!!!!
Matheny Avatar
August 28, 2008 at 4:45 PM
Hey, Whatcha doin????!!!!
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August 28, 2008 at 2:01 PM
Powerful poem. Did you mean fling instead of fing in the last line? Welcome to Poetry Soup. I hope you enjoy your time spent with us. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
Matheny Avatar
August 28, 2008 at 1:27 PM
Write Me Back Cutie????!!!!!!
Matheny Avatar
August 28, 2008 at 12:52 PM
When r u goin to write me back??????
Matheny Avatar
August 28, 2008 at 12:02 PM
Will u come over??????
Matheny Avatar
August 28, 2008 at 10:09 AM
Hey you should call me......?
Matheny Avatar
August 28, 2008 at 9:55 AM
I'm 15 years old. Where do u live? I live in South Lebanon,Ohio. And I'm sure you're hot inside and out.
Matheny Avatar
August 28, 2008 at 3:04 AM
R u homeschooled or do u go to regular school???
Matheny Avatar
August 27, 2008 at 7:24 PM
EXCELLENT!!!! How old r u???
Jordan Avatar
August 27, 2008 at 6:12 PM
Hi Ed - Very interesting poem - well written with a clear message - After spending many years in and out of Prison I'm trying real hard to be good and it feels good - God Bless and have a beautiful evening
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