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August.11.2023
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A Rising Lament

I know, I grow old, I grow old…. As silver threads peek in my head. The flush on radiant cheeks wanes, And a pallid tint creeps unseen. Fading years have robbed the ardour, And a rigid sobriety sinks and settles. With EXPENSIVE health gadgets I cannot bring back my lost youth. I hear the howl of autumn winds, That come to shake off the yellowing leaves. Dragging tired feet through pavements I try in vain to keep pace with the young. Mind grows agitated and distressed As the bones beneath the skin go brittle. I drag myself with BRUISE in mind and body Like a rusted machine never overhauled. The soul grows anxious and annoyed, With no CONVINCING solutions to track.......! There is a tumult in my silence Like the undercurrents of calm waters. Through miles on dreary miles of gloom That stretch out before the eyes, endless, Where can I find a quiet haven To lower my burden and rest awhile?
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Empress Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 4:13 AM
I cant believe i missed reading this precious gem of a poem: i can see why this was a winner, as always it is the way you paint imagery and how descriptive your way with words is and the flow of your poems truly are worth every accolade. Sometime i wish too for a peaceful haven, slow down and just rest a while. The depth of your write is so moving, life and experiences. Etc. congratulations on your win
Poet Avatar
September 1, 2023 at 5:09 PM
Valsa, Congratulations on winning my contest with your beautifully written poem. Your poem is filled with deep thoughts and vivid descriptions, which brings the imagery to life.
George Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 1:39 AM
Thank you so much dear poet friend for the opportunity given and picking up my poem for a first place win.
Goldsmith Avatar
September 1, 2023 at 2:21 PM
Congratulations on your win. What a lovely write/story. Have a lovely/blessed day................
Narain Avatar
August 11, 2023 at 10:12 AM
Gee, you reflect my sentiment on growing mature. The key to happiness is to feel young at heart and keep going on.
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August 11, 2023 at 10:00 AM
Therefore we do not lose heart. Though outwardly we are wasting away, yet inwardly we are being renewed day by day. For our light and momentary troubles are achieving for us an eternal glory that far outweighs them all. 2 Corinthians 4:16?-?17 NIV Me to my dear friend, love your poem, thankfully I am getting older and not trying to keep up with youth today : ) maybe I was born a couple centuries late : )
Merryman Avatar
August 11, 2023 at 8:03 AM
Valsa, I can so relate to your wonderful poem! The descriptiveness is spot on! I especially like the 2nd stanza. Best wishes in the contest! Blessings, Kim M
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