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A Response To My First Poem

My first poem posted at Soup (it truly is one of my first poems since I enjoyed doing parodies of Christmas lyrics long before I began writing other kinds of poetry) I Heard Mother (to tune of "I Saw Mother Kissing Santa Clause") I heard Mother scolding Santa's elf As I prowled the house on Christmas Eve. He'd hid in St. Nick's sleigh And then sneaked out to play After having waited for his boss to fly away. Mother caught him gobbling all our snacks After he tore open every gift. Oh, when she glared down at his face, He went scrambling from our place Screaming, "Santa, stop the sleigh- I need a lift!" Written Sept. 28, 2015 - New Poem: The Elf’s response: A Helper Am I (to tune of “Santa Claus is Coming to Town”) A helper am I. I’m so underfed. I just want to cry; I only get bread. Santa doesn’t pay me a dime! I see all the gifts laid out on the floor. All year I slave so rich kids get more?! Santa doesn’t pay me a dime! Folks leave out milk for Santa. He hardly seems to care! And so I eat at every stop the snacks that I find there! A helper am I. I’m so underfed. I just want to cry; I only get bread. Santa doesn’t pay me a dime! For the Contest of the Silent One

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 10/9/2015 2:34:00 AM
Cute little poem,and you won with it too. Yesterday 7 Oct was my 60 th. I can't believe we are that old. I still only have 2 3 strands of grey/white hair by the ears :) Linda's brthday was yesterday too .,,, :)
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Date: 10/3/2015 2:00:00 PM
Congrats for your win. Beautifully crafted. Loved always my lovely friend,bl
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Date: 10/2/2015 8:55:00 AM
Such a wonderful sense of humor.
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Date: 10/2/2015 12:58:00 AM
Andrea, Congratulations on the response to your first poem ***SKAT
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Date: 10/1/2015 4:14:00 PM
Interesting lines penned..Enjoyed reading today..Congrats on your win..Sara..Sad
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Date: 10/1/2015 8:18:00 AM
Ha ha, this is fun Andrea! Mean old Santa! Congratulations.
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Date: 10/1/2015 1:22:00 AM
Wonderful both poems Andrea n so is the win! Big congrats!
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Date: 9/30/2015 10:27:00 PM
How creatively put! Congrats Andrea on your win!
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:48:00 PM
My friend, congrats on both fine poems and your win!
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:43:00 PM
I LOVE YOUR WRITE FOR THE CONTEST! CONGRATS! HUGS EVE
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:07:00 PM
lol! I love it when you're being funny, Andie. Loved both poems...I got to sing too! Congrats! hugs!
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:04:00 PM
Andrea, l just came back to say congratulations on your awesome win it was well deserved. :-)Alexis
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Date: 9/30/2015 8:35:00 PM
Wonderful win Andrea!
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Date: 9/30/2015 6:55:00 PM
Ha, ha....this write is so adorable and cute....when I leave cookies and milk out this X'mas I'm leaving a note that says for Elf. Excellent write and win! Hugs
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Date: 9/30/2015 4:25:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/30/2015 1:26:00 AM
Hahaha! I felt sorry for that little elf! Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 9/29/2015 10:35:00 PM
This is done well Andrea. I remember loving this first one you posted. GL In the contest. I have been on here too long and need to give my eyes a rest.
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Date: 9/29/2015 9:59:00 PM
Lol. Andrea this was so darn funny! Who knew santa was so cheap. This was a good response to your first poem. Great job. Good luck in the contest:-) Alexis 7
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Date: 9/29/2015 9:05:00 PM
How funny. What a poor guy. No wonder elves are so small
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Date: 9/29/2015 9:04:00 PM
How funny. What a poor guy. No wonder elves are so small
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Date: 9/29/2015 8:29:00 PM
I didn't know Santa was such a cheapskate! Fun ode! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 9/29/2015 7:50:00 PM
Lovely... I love the way Christmas presents so many opportunities to express our creativeness... very clever and entertaining. ~~X~~
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Date: 9/29/2015 4:44:00 PM
Another classic from you,,loved your first poem when reading it a while back,,and still today wonderful. has is your response..
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Date: 9/29/2015 3:02:00 PM
Now you did it. Got Christmas songs running through my head already. I do like it. I'm working on mine
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Date: 9/29/2015 2:07:00 PM
a very fun read. I so much enjoyed! all the best in the contest Andrea.
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