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A Rattling Rhyme

I fell head over heels loving you, and you now say to me we are through! How can you be so cruel, make me blue, after all our great times, you construe to be free, and this choice now pursue? Just so quick, no review to undo what you say are bad things done to you, and no chance to amend in my view any change that will work to renew how you feel about me, work it through. But now wait, looking back, it's adieu! You're not worth my good heart, so hereto we are done! Without me, you'll unglue when a new love of life I ensue. No more head over heels loving you! Sandra M. Haight ~5th Place~ Contest: A Rattling Rhyme Sponsor: Nina Parmenter Judged: 08/28/2018 Fiction for Contest

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Date: 8/31/2018 1:15:00 PM
Somehow this poem reminds me of my ex husband who went on to marry three more times and is now alone. You did well Sandra, congratulations on your win! : )
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Date: 8/30/2018 1:58:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Well done. Enjoyed reading.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 8:00:00 PM
Thank you very much, Susan. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 8/29/2018 6:49:00 AM
Congrats, Sandra, on a piece that reminded me of of the old Gloria Gaynor song ' I will survive'. Kick ass! Viv x
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 8:00:00 PM
Yes, I can see that too! One of my favorite songs! Thanks for the congrats and awesome comment! Sandra :) :)
Date: 8/28/2018 7:19:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:58:00 PM
Thank you very much, Janice! Hugs, Sandra
Date: 8/28/2018 5:36:00 PM
Nice one, Sandra! Congrats on your win. Best wishes, Gershon
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/30/2018 7:57:00 PM
Thank you very much, Gershon! Sandra :)
Date: 8/12/2018 5:07:00 PM
I love how the tone turned from pleading to feisty - if we are through, good riddance to you!
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/13/2018 8:55:00 PM
Thank you, Michelle, for your visit and supportive comment! Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 8/8/2018 7:51:00 AM
A love lost, yet you win in the end:)
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/9/2018 5:50:00 PM
Thank you, Jo! Hugs, Sandra
Date: 8/6/2018 12:27:00 PM
You wrote this well Sandra, Lovely rhythm, good luck. Tom
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Sandra Haight
Date: 8/9/2018 5:50:00 PM
Thank you, Tom. It was a fun write! Sandra

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