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A Pond's Melody

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June-9- 2025

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A pool in the shade. water torn with small ripples. goldfish darted up and down, in limpid water. when the carp leaped suddenly, I heard the pond's melody.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/20/2025 11:04:00 PM

Oh I love this. Soupmail for you

Rob Carmack

Date: 6/11/2025 7:50:00 AM

Perfect pairing with the picture. Congrats.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/11/2025 7:14:00 AM

This one made me smile! Unique! Hugs and congrats!

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 6/10/2025 10:53:00 PM

A nice take on pond melody. Congratulations.

JCB Brul

Date: 6/10/2025 6:25:00 PM

This is so delightful! A delight no AI can mimic! This is an absolute FAVE! ^__^

CayCay Jennings

Date: 6/10/2025 1:50:00 PM

Oh, oh - gorgeous. Sound, motion, visuals, so much delivered by Choka. You truly took me there, not exaggerating. So glad I clicked over to this. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/9/2025 11:12:00 AM

Dearest Valsa, gifted poet, I adore your vivid imagery and the vibrant action captured in your splendid poem. I was especially struck by "water torn with small ripples" -wow! The splish splash of "goldfish" darting and "carp" leaping in the pool brings the "pond's melody" to sunny, sparkling life in my imagination. A picturesque poem that teases and delights the senses. Warmest wishes, my creative friend.. ~Susan

JCB Brul
Date: 6/10/2025 6:26:00 PM

I couldnt agreeeeee more!!!^__^

Jay Narain

Date: 6/9/2025 11:03:00 AM

A nice choka poem on a quiet pool with fish playing around.