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A Poet's Dozen---Rush Hour

red tint of evening bleeds across a glazed skyline… crowds droop on bleak aisles The street lamps wane beyond rush hour; eyes missing the rarest flower… And city lights drain people’s bones, when aching shadows blur my view. How lonely the murmurs heaving around against the pitch of uptown’s restless mind; that my own breath, withdrawn, endures its sound replaying ticked moments of work’s toil ,blind lost in a haste when life cannot unwind. ----------------- ~One modern Haiku,A couplet,Free verse and English Quintain~ Silent One's A Poet's Dozen Contest 11/5/2015

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Date: 11/9/2015 10:52:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your great win, Nette! hugs!
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Date: 11/9/2015 7:17:00 AM
Congrats on your winning work..Very good poetic quality..I enjoyed reading this winner.Thanks for dropping by "A Haibun Memory"..I have finished if you care to read the ending..Sara
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Date: 11/7/2015 9:43:00 PM
You can feel the weariness, heaviness of the people from your words. Congrats on your wonderful win, Nette! Love, Kim
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Date: 11/7/2015 3:13:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your Poet's Dozen win. Love SKAT
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Date: 11/7/2015 1:52:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Nette, a 7! Hugs Eve
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Date: 11/6/2015 8:02:00 PM
Congrats Nette, on a super poem in a new form. " How lonely the murmurs heaving around against the pitch of uptown’s restless mind; that my own breath, withdrawn, endures its sound replaying ticked moments of work’s toil ,blind lost in a haste when life cannot unwind." Solid gold my friend!
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Date: 11/5/2015 11:23:00 AM
There is so much grace in your lines, Nette. hugs!
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Date: 11/5/2015 6:34:00 AM
- A beautiful mix, dear Nette - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/5/2015 3:00:00 AM
Man's isolation lucidly described through your bleeding quill. I feel your kind of loneliness. Fantastic poem rated above7!
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Date: 11/4/2015 8:06:00 PM
Did I tell you I love this poem?? wow
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Date: 11/4/2015 8:04:00 PM
WOW and WOW. From the contest aspect: everyone should just put down their pens; this is write-on (pun intended), from a poetry aspect: WOW - I have felt this way and you captured that feeling in every sense of the word poetry - absolutely superb imagery and feel - I am so delightedly impressed. Favorites and a 7 WOW ... CayCay
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Date: 11/4/2015 5:31:00 PM
Nette you have a wonderful way with words, great work and good luck. cheers Kev
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Date: 11/4/2015 4:41:00 PM
Impressive, strong poem. Using the after 5 pm syndrome to elucidate on a subject re taking for granted the more important things in life is very creative. A 7 for me!
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Date: 11/4/2015 3:49:00 PM
Verses that light up the soul's lamps of delight! A seven , dear nette and many, many, hugs! Good luck!
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