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A Poem In Paradise

She does not see him gazing at her there Immersed in lines of splendor, quite divine To him it seems she is an angel fair Her flowing robes caress a figure fine Pressed to her bosom is a blossom sweet The fragrance is to him what she exudes Upon her face the flush of midday heat No longer can he wait, so he intrudes “Pray tell me what it be that you peruse That hides from me the light of angel eyes? What makes your cheeks so rosy, my dear muse?” He asks and hopes his love she’ll not chastise And paradise is his with her reply “I read of you and now you have come by.” For Isaiah Zerbst's Contest A Poem in Paradise July 14, 2014

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Carrie Richards

Date: 7/23/2014 1:20:00 PM

A lovely poem to take one away to paradise! Lovely win, Eileen !! Good for you!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 1:59:00 PM

Thanks, Carrie. Glad to have a visit from you. I'm a romantic to my core...Love and passion. I have to pull it into everything. I know that makes me a bit sappy at times, but...it's the way I'm wired. Thanks for visiting me. I'm touched.

Paul Callus

Date: 7/23/2014 8:25:00 AM

Congratulations on a very deserved top win, Eileen!! I knew you would not let a chance like this go to waste; this picture is something that goes hand in hand with your romantic character. And you rose to the occasion in grand fashion. // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2014 11:21:00 AM

...and vice versa:)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 11:11:00 AM

Thank you, Paul. Yes...there had to be romance there somewhere. I'm honored to share the stand with you.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/23/2014 7:54:00 AM

Fabulous to see this hit the top spot. Hugs jan xxx

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 11:11:00 AM

Sweet Jan...Thank you for being such a supportive friend. Love ya.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/23/2014 7:51:00 AM

I am so pleased to see this beauty in the top spot! Congratulations Eileen!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 11:12:00 AM

Richard, bless you...for being there to support me through my highs and lows. Thank you...for recently encouraging me personally on my writing ability. You are truly my Guardian Poet. I thank you.

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/23/2014 7:33:00 AM

HUGE CONGRATS on your top win my friend!! “Pray tell me what it be that you peruse That hides from me the light of angel eyes? What makes your cheeks so rosy, my dear muse?” He asks and hopes his love she’ll not chastise" A beautiful write and lovely thought..

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 11:13:00 AM

Robert! I thank you for visiting me with your words of encouragement and praise. It does my heart good. I'm glad those lines resonated with you. I'm grateful for your words.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/23/2014 7:22:00 AM

Big congratulations to you Eileen for your TOP win which is well-deserved. Warmest regards!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 11:14:00 AM

Pandita...thank you for "well-deserved"! :) Makes me smile from ear to ear! :) Hugs

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/23/2014 5:48:00 AM

Fabulous write, sweet Eileen! Congrats on a great win! Hugs.. Arlene

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 11:15:00 AM

Arlene...thank you, my dear, for sharing this happy moment with me. I love writing for Isaiah. I know he takes his judging seriously. I'm glad to have this visit from you. :)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/23/2014 5:08:00 AM

Magnificent write my dear friend Eileen! congrats on ur wonderful top win!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 11:15:00 AM

DR UPMA!!!! Here is your smiling face blessing me. Thank you so much for your kind words. Sending you warm hugs

Mark Trichet

Date: 7/23/2014 3:39:00 AM

Beautiful written Eileen, such a clever angle to deliver from. I enjoyed it immensley. Congratulations!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/23/2014 11:10:00 AM

Thanks ever so much, Mark. I'm a hopeless romantic...so...there had to be a love interest there. Glad you liked it.

Justin Bordner

Date: 7/15/2014 2:03:00 PM

She, a Muse who rediscovers the love of song in her blood, He, a Poet who explores the rose and ritual his soul adores...this is what your divine poem has induced from me Eileen. I will incorporate these lines into a new write. I've already read this poem ten times. I fell in love with it the moment the words waved over my heart! This is classic yet fresh poetry, richly romantic! A masterpiece FAV...J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/16/2014 3:11:00 AM

Rose and ritual his soul adores...Wow! This is so deep, Justin. I'm intrigued by your comment and longing to know more of what you have in store. I am honored to know that this has sparked some inspiration in you. I'm waiting anxiously to read your words. TEN TIMES! What a sweet acknowledgement. Thank you X10! :) I hope to be able to keep waving words for a good time to come. Thank you for being good to me with your posts and comments, Justin. You bring me so much joy!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/15/2014 9:47:00 AM

I have not seen the picture but somehow through your words I feel I have. This has an ethereal feel to it.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2014 9:06:00 AM

Hi Eileen, I gave it a go.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/16/2014 3:08:00 AM

Richard, check it out. It is a lovely painting. I'm sure you can just turn this contest into something vibrant and lovely. Give it go! Waiting! :)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/15/2014 8:29:00 AM

I read of you and now you have come by~How I love this verse..and.there are so many other verses that I love,such as 'pressed to.her bossom is a blossom sweet '.Amazing.I.do.believe Isaiah is gonna get tickled by this : ).

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/15/2014 8:33:00 AM

Thank you, my sweet....You know me...I can't just look at a painting and not let romance come to play. Thank you for being specific about what you like about it. Love you girl.

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/15/2014 8:23:00 AM

A wonderfully romantic sonnet that just sings and sings of love's greatest promise! My wife after reading it remarked that it was a gem!! She rates in 3 ways. From greatest to great, 1, a gem 2, a honey or 3, a kiss. My friend, she gave us both a gem rating! I was pleased that she did as it shows her judgment is quite sound.

Robert Lindley
Date: 7/17/2014 10:18:00 PM

That make two of us that are glad. She doesn't write any poetry but her judgment on it seems at a high level. She often picks out my better writes and the contest wins prove her correct. However she rightly thinks my very best writes are about her and our love! A very astute and intuitive lady my darling wife is!!!!! I insisted she score both , she gave me a 98 and you a 99! I didn't disagree...

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/15/2014 8:34:00 AM

Oh....how absolutely delightful! Please give my words of appreciation to your wife. :) How sweet that she likes to read poetry. My husband is not interested. A gem...I'm glad that we have her vote of confidence on this one.

John Lawless

Date: 7/15/2014 8:21:00 AM

I like it, nice sonnetic shift in line nine and a wonderful sprint to the finish. I'm with Craig on this, I wish I'd written it too.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/15/2014 8:35:00 AM

Thank you ever so much for this wonderful post. I'm honored.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 7/15/2014 7:39:00 AM

very beautifully drawn piece eileen excellent vision

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/15/2014 8:37:00 AM

I've missed you....welcome back.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/14/2014 10:12:00 PM

Oh and this is why I adore you so!!! I haven't been around as much, and when I have some days off I will be catching up on some poems I missed!!! Its always such a pleasure reading yours!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/14/2014 10:15:00 PM

How sweet are you, Arthur. You know how to give a girl a lift with your words. I'm just catching up on some poetry before I get ready for my morning class at 7.30 am in which I will expound on the joys of grammar. ;) Need a good dose of poetry to put me in the right frame of mind. Thank you for your kind words. hugs

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/14/2014 10:03:00 PM

beautiful, wonderful, and as usual so very romantic!!!!!! Loved it!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/14/2014 10:05:00 PM

Hey...my dear. It's been a while. Thank you. Romance is my middle name....My first name? PASSION! ;) Hugs!