A Picture of a Sub-Division-W

My sub-division is called the place of old people                     
There’re no young people in their formative age                 
With no kids but only single mom or dad in ample              
Known as the place of aged people of suffrage.                     

There’re no young people in their formative age           
To regenerate returning to their homes in picture                        
Known as the place of aged people of suffrage                                 
With no ambitions of the present or the future.                    

To regenerate returning to their homes in picture                        
No grown-ups with fervent hope and ambition                 
With no ambitions of the present or the future                    
But it’s place the with self-obsessed bohemian.                    

No grown-ups with fervent hope and ambition                   
Bothering no more for diapers no happy mother                        
But it is the place with self-obsessed bohemian.                   
To take children around to play no happy father.                      


Bothering no more for diapers no happy mother                        
With no kids but only single mom or dad ample                  
To take children around to play no happy father.                      
My sub-division is called a place of old people.  

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Rhyme Scheme: ABCD, BEDF, EGFH, GIHJ, ICJA.
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Seventh place winner
Dr. Ram Mehta
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Mehta Avatar
December 14, 2010 at 12:36 AM
Many congrats Dr Ram on winning coveted spot in Paulas Pantoum contest with this beautiful write. Saddening but true portray of Old people... Pray no Old aged suffers........ Luv/best wishes........Hitendra Mehta
Brown Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 11:28 AM
Congratulations on your win Dr. Ram in Paula's Pantoum contest. Love, Carol
Radke Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 5:11 AM
Dr. Mehta, this is a most heart-wrenching poem. You have captured the sadness of the 'subdivision of old people' so well. Congratulations on your win in the pantoum contest. Very well done.
Mannan Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 8:41 PM
A remarkable pantoum Dr. Mehta. Many congratulations for this win.
Haick Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 12:43 PM
Congratulations on your 7th Place Win in the contest, Dr. Ram! Enjoy! Love, Audrey
Kendrick Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 11:48 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest test..Sara
Devonshire Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 8:34 AM
So happy to see this excellent poem in the winners' circle, Dr. Ram. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
Sweetheart Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 7:23 AM
Congrats Dr. Ram on your winning poem in Paula's Pantoum contest with this vibrant write and win my friend.. enjoy another well deserved top ten victory with luv..
Villarosa Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 6:45 AM
Thanks, Dr. Ram for your congratulations, you placed 7th on this contest, well deserved entry for this pantoum contest of Paula. (^_^) Noel.
Guzzi Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 6:35 AM
A real and unque write stating so well what we of an age see from our perspective. Congrad's on your win. Light & love
Keogh Jr. Avatar
December 2, 2010 at 2:26 PM
Dr, Ram, you ended it well and upwards, which is a winning knack of yours. I think you will do fine in the contest! Regards, Gerard
Freeman Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 7:02 PM
I prefer to call your sub-division "The Place of Wisdom's STore" Dr Ram! BeaUTIFUL WRITE, MY MAN. "You Go Man!" Agape, Moses
Locksley Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 4:33 PM
Too many lonely people living in these subdivisions, Dr. Mehta. This form seems difficult to me, but you made it look easy. Great poem!
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November 30, 2010 at 8:56 PM
Dr. Mehta, this is such a profound and honest depiction of the elderly and aging. As my part-time occupation I work as a certified medical assistant and a certified nursing assistant in the private duty area. I work one on one with the elderly in the privacy of their homes and your poem sums up the spirit in most of the homes I visit. Beautifully done...Lay
White Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 7:22 PM
This is really well done. GL to you and TY for the nice comments
Sweetheart Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 4:28 PM
thankxxx Dr. Ram for your kind words on my poetry today.. continue to enjoy your words always my friend with luv.. my hubby is now home again..with luv..
Kendrick Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 3:24 PM
Interesting work..I hope just a topic and not really where you live..Children add so much to life..It is good to have young life around..I enjoyed your kind comments on my work "Honey My Love"..Sara
Maverick Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 1:07 PM
deeply meaningfull poetry, versus shallow leaning (ociety) well done Dr Ram.
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November 30, 2010 at 7:26 AM
I do have a soft spot in my heart for the elderly!I admire them for the will to survive,for their wisdom,for events they seen passing by. .Having no children when you get older can be painful,having children who forget you more painful,having children which gives you trouble is worse than having no kids at all.I wish to grow old one day,alone or not alone,i wish to live a life long life to say.. ThankGod,i'm old :). .lovely poem. .God bless your heart.
M V Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 5:54 AM
Dr.this touching picture of old age reminded me of my own old age which would be in a distant distant future.Exceptional write
Onclaud Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 11:24 AM
delicately woven to capture the nuances of age, dr. ram... just captivating! wishing you a big wn iin the contest! warmest, nette
Ruebel Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 11:12 AM
Hello Dr. Mehta, When I was younger I took special care to visit many "Old Age Homes" as they are called here. I loved listening to them and learning from them. It was a time I will never forget. You have captured this so well. Thank you As Always, Shar
Devonshire Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 9:34 AM
Our elderly often lead lonely lives, Dr. Ram. Sometimes even their own grown children fail to visit them. I wish we didn't have subdivisions that separate the old from the young. Both age groups can benefit from the interaction so much. A very well written pantoum with a strong message, my friend! Love, Carolyn
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November 29, 2010 at 9:23 AM
A very observant,descriptive write on the here and now.Good luck in the contest and thank you for your comments.Sandra
Sweetheart Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 9:00 AM
An intense and deeply motivated stirring write Dr. Ram .. a synopsis of dynamic issues of our day and time.. great descriptive features depicting the generation gaps and alienation in the process.. amazing and good luck in the contest.. a splendid piece ..with luv..
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