A Penny For Your Thoughts

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I edited this poem to achieve a consistent syllable count of 7 syllables per line. I am not sure if this will allow it to slip through the hoop of the Sonnet form. At any rate it was an interesting and unexpected exercise derived from this contest.

//There is nothing in this world that can trouble you as much as your own thoughts."// A Penny For Your Thoughts So he wandered deep in thought naked ‘midst the dreams he sought knowledge gleaned from ancient tomes lacking truth of self-turned stones There amid the silent din thought of things unknown to him saw the break of reason’s day logic freed from feet of clay Old ideal’s proven weak withering in coat meek listening to howling doubt’s empty melancholy shouts Those that paid the penny price found his thoughts not always nice. 3/17/2015 submitted to – A Penny For Your Thoughts – poetry contest sponsor – Sara Kendrick

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/25/2015 6:04:00 PM

John, thank you for entering my contest..I enjoyed reading your entry..I did want ten syllables per line but I let some slide on that and on the rhyme scheme..I enjoyed reading your work..It had a nice flow to it..Thanks for dropping by and commenting on my tanka.,.I was the old woman riding on the hover round well it is more like a scooter..I don't know what happened but I lost it in the gift shop and thankfully only one thing was broken..Sara

John Lawless
Date: 3/25/2015 6:15:00 PM

Appreciate the placement Sara. I got into that seven syllable rhythm and found it hard to expand it. I hope the item broken was not expensive.

Robert Lindley

Date: 3/24/2015 7:52:00 PM

Congrats on your win. Wonderfully deep write all the way. A7 "There amid the silent din thought of things unknown to him saw the break of reason’s day logic freed from feet of clay" Loved this part the most..

John Lawless
Date: 3/25/2015 6:11:00 PM

Thank you Robert for the high praise and high mark