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A Parting of Ways

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A tortoise-shell sky on a slate afternoon matched the deep charcoal mood of a storm Silence, profound, was as sharp as a thorn We walked in the shadows, then the trail parted ways Regret on our shoes, while the teak-sodden trees wailed with distress in the turbulent haze Shaking their heads, they were bending their limbs watching worlds come to an end... Wanting us back calling us back, ... and hoping we'd try once again. _________________________________________ 7/8/17

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 3/29/2018 2:21:00 AM

Absolutely beautiful. Deeply touches and those images...

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 1/25/2018 3:00:00 PM

Connie hit it right on the head with the word gem.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/30/2017 4:56:00 PM

This poem is so moving Carrie. A very late Congratulations on your trophy for this outstanding gem. The pain is palpable! I wish you a splendid New Year with much peace and love, Connie xxoo : )

Carrie Richards
Date: 12/30/2017 6:22:00 PM

How nice to hear from you, Connie. Wishing you a happy and healthy year to come as well. And thank you for always being so kind to me, and my poems. Love and good wishes to you and your family ! XO

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 8/29/2017 6:17:00 AM

Dear Carrie: I have missed reading your poems. What a treasure trove of images in this one. The mood and tone so perfectly painted with your words. I can see why this was the winning poem. Blessings to you. SuZ

Ra Shagun

Date: 7/21/2017 9:11:00 AM

Congratulations Carrie..,Really an amazing poem..

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 7/18/2017 11:26:00 PM

Great poem, Carrie.

Dean Wood

Date: 7/18/2017 12:16:00 PM

This is really beautiful Carrie. Not the break up part, just the incredible way you have expressed. Perhaps someday I may write one as lovely. Congratulations!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/18/2017 12:00:00 PM

Back for congrats, Carrie! A first place treasure!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/8/2017 10:35:00 PM

Beautiful imagery! Wonderful metaphor!

Carrie Richards
Date: 7/9/2017 9:27:00 AM

Thank you very much Kim !! I appreciate your kind words. (Had to do a little editing......when I realized I had too many lines for the contest! Hope it is works !)

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/8/2017 4:39:00 PM

If all breakups were this beautiful, people would spend their lives breaking up instead of falling in love:) I love this one, Mrs Carrie:)

Carrie Richards
Date: 7/9/2017 9:28:00 AM

Hoping to take a look at your contest soon, Daniel. Thank you for always being generous with your comments... It encourages my pen !! Thanks again!

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 7/8/2017 4:16:00 PM

I love 'tortoise shell sky' and 'teak-sodden trees' They are so fresh and vibrant, and the verse so graceful. Beautifully done. I'm jealous.

Carrie Richards
Date: 7/8/2017 4:31:00 PM

Such a nice compliment. Thank you, Dale ! :)