Carrie Richards Poet Free verse

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A Parting of Ways

A tortoise-shell sky on a slate afternoon
matched the deep charcoal mood of a storm

Silence, profound, was as sharp as a thorn

We walked in the shadows, then the trail parted ways
Regret on our shoes, while the teak-sodden trees
wailed with distress in the turbulent haze

Shaking their heads, they were bending their limbs
watching worlds come to an end...

Wanting us back
         calling us back, ...
                and hoping we'd try once again.


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7/8/17

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Kai Michael Neumann March 29, 2018 at 2:21 AM Absolutely beautiful. Deeply touches and those images...

Vince Suzadail Jr. January 25, 2018 at 3:00 PM Connie hit it right on the head with the word gem.

Connie Marcum Wong December 30, 2017 at 4:56 PM This poem is so moving Carrie. A very late Congratulations on your trophy for this outstanding gem. The pain is palpable! I wish you a splendid New Year with much peace and love, Connie xxoo : ) Carrie Richards December 30, 2017 at 6:22 PM How nice to hear from you, Connie. Wishing you a happy and healthy year to come as well. And thank you for always being so kind to me, and my poems. Love and good wishes to you and your family ! XO

Suzanne Delaney August 29, 2017 at 6:17 AM Dear Carrie: I have missed reading your poems. What a treasure trove of images in this one. The mood and tone so perfectly painted with your words. I can see why this was the winning poem. Blessings to you. SuZ

Ra Shagun July 21, 2017 at 9:11 AM Congratulations Carrie..,Really an amazing poem..

Subimal Sinha-Roy July 18, 2017 at 11:26 PM Great poem, Carrie.

Dean Wood July 18, 2017 at 12:16 PM This is really beautiful Carrie. Not the break up part, just the incredible way you have expressed. Perhaps someday I may write one as lovely. Congratulations!

Kim Rodrigues July 18, 2017 at 12:00 PM Back for congrats, Carrie! A first place treasure!

Kim Rodrigues July 8, 2017 at 10:35 PM Beautiful imagery! Wonderful metaphor! Carrie Richards July 9, 2017 at 9:27 AM Thank you very much Kim !! I appreciate your kind words. (Had to do a little editing......when I realized I had too many lines for the contest! Hope it is works !)

Daniel Turner July 8, 2017 at 4:39 PM If all breakups were this beautiful, people would spend their lives breaking up instead of falling in love:) I love this one, Mrs Carrie:) Carrie Richards July 9, 2017 at 9:28 AM Hoping to take a look at your contest soon, Daniel. Thank you for always being generous with your comments... It encourages my pen !! Thanks again!

Dale Gregory Cozart July 8, 2017 at 4:16 PM I love 'tortoise shell sky' and 'teak-sodden trees' They are so fresh and vibrant, and the verse so graceful. Beautifully done. I'm jealous. Carrie Richards July 8, 2017 at 4:31 PM Such a nice compliment. Thank you, Dale ! :)