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A Parting of Ways Premiere Contest Winner

A tortoise-shell sky on a slate afternoon
matched the deep charcoal mood of a storm

Silence, profound, was as sharp as a thorn

We walked in the shadows, then the trail parted ways
Regret on our shoes, while the teak-sodden trees
wailed with distress in the turbulent haze

Shaking their heads, they were bending their limbs
watching worlds come to an end...

Wanting us back
         calling us back, ...
                and hoping we'd try once again.


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7/8/17

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 3/29/2018 2:21:00 AM
Absolutely beautiful. Deeply touches and those images...
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Date: 1/25/2018 3:00:00 PM
Connie hit it right on the head with the word gem.
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Date: 12/30/2017 4:56:00 PM
This poem is so moving Carrie. A very late Congratulations on your trophy for this outstanding gem. The pain is palpable! I wish you a splendid New Year with much peace and love, Connie xxoo : )
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Carrie Richards
Date: 12/30/2017 6:22:00 PM
How nice to hear from you, Connie. Wishing you a happy and healthy year to come as well. And thank you for always being so kind to me, and my poems. Love and good wishes to you and your family ! XO
Date: 8/29/2017 6:17:00 AM
Dear Carrie: I have missed reading your poems. What a treasure trove of images in this one. The mood and tone so perfectly painted with your words. I can see why this was the winning poem. Blessings to you. SuZ
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Date: 7/21/2017 9:11:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie..,Really an amazing poem..
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Date: 7/18/2017 11:26:00 PM
Great poem, Carrie.
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Date: 7/18/2017 12:16:00 PM
This is really beautiful Carrie. Not the break up part, just the incredible way you have expressed. Perhaps someday I may write one as lovely. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/18/2017 12:00:00 PM
Back for congrats, Carrie! A first place treasure!
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Date: 7/8/2017 10:35:00 PM
Beautiful imagery! Wonderful metaphor!
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Carrie Richards
Date: 7/9/2017 9:27:00 AM
Thank you very much Kim !! I appreciate your kind words. (Had to do a little editing......when I realized I had too many lines for the contest! Hope it is works !)
Date: 7/8/2017 4:39:00 PM
If all breakups were this beautiful, people would spend their lives breaking up instead of falling in love:) I love this one, Mrs Carrie:)
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Carrie Richards
Date: 7/9/2017 9:28:00 AM
Hoping to take a look at your contest soon, Daniel. Thank you for always being generous with your comments... It encourages my pen !! Thanks again!
Date: 7/8/2017 4:16:00 PM
I love 'tortoise shell sky' and 'teak-sodden trees' They are so fresh and vibrant, and the verse so graceful. Beautifully done. I'm jealous.
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Carrie Richards
Date: 7/8/2017 4:31:00 PM
Such a nice compliment. Thank you, Dale ! :)
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