A Pair of Captivating Eyes

Was it in a dream when I first saw her, Or was it in the crowded street afar, Or was it on the beach by the setting sun, That she, my heart had won? All I saw then was a pair of eyes Beautifully set on a wan face As twinkling stars in the night sky Or gems on the moon’s diadem high They seemed to converse without end In a lingua of love with passions blend It was a captivating moment divine I thought the whole world was mine Those eyes had turned me blind That all other pursuits I left behind As her eyelids quickly fluttered Within me rosy dreams cluttered Hopes colorful crimsoned my sky On featherless wings I flew high In my thoughts for long I chased her Though chance was nil of possessing her Yet I hoped one day she would abruptly spring And merry ditties we would together sing Flowers blossomed and wilted Snowflakes hardened and melted Time made its hasty run Spring, summer, autumn and winter in turn Still I wait, looking in vain Never allowing my hopes to wane Devilment devastates devoted devotees, But devout devotees devour deities. October.20.2022 Captivation Poetry Contest Sponsor- Julia Ward
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Lawrence Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 7:29 PM
Love the ending and the word play and poignancy ! Wonderful longing and imagery throughout Valsa! Eyes hold power so deep..a bottomless well of mystery. Best of luck in the contest. Susan :)
Anaya Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 7:25 PM
She is untouchable. Is just a bit more sensual with Latin or just about any language, Valsa "The eyes are the windows to the soul" Large ebony soulful and glistening, yes!
Gorelick Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 2:45 PM
Your devotion is surly win out, to be consummated in this divine awakened union! Lovely, Robert
Leffanta Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 11:22 AM
Since ancient times, the eyes have it! Enjoyed! Aloha!
Pandit Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 6:09 AM
Eyes speak volumes--it is the language of hearts. A captivating write, Valsa. Apt for the contest theme.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 5:13 AM
Or gems on the moon’s diadem high… And merry ditties we would together sing… Snowflakes hardened and melted…and the last two lines: Devilment devastates devoted devotees, But devout devotees devour deities.//Very nice, Valsa! Enjoyed.
Cunningham Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 2:28 AM
Quite a romantic tale Valsa, you rose well to the challenge, best of luck. Tom
George Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 5:04 AM
Tom, if you feel it meets the challenge, I am so happy ! Thanks a lot for reading my poems and commenting on them !
Buhagiar Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 12:54 AM
Your poem is indeed captivating, dear Valsa. Best for a win.
George Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 5:02 AM
Thanks for your blessings dear Victor !
Tor Avatar
October 19, 2022 at 11:54 PM
Valsa the ending was great. Loved the whole theme. Great message shared by you Dear. Thank you for posting and best wishes for the contest...
George Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 5:01 AM
Thank you so much dear Michael. Glad you enjoyed it !
Horsman Avatar
October 19, 2022 at 11:27 PM
My captivations are always in my dreams Valsa, But this poetry is so much better so real, yes so captivating. Love it. Harry
George Avatar
October 20, 2022 at 5:00 AM
Thank you so much harry. Your visit and comment are much appreciated ...
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