Lin Lane Poet Lyric

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A Painting of You

Anacreontic Verse 


With canvas primed
and brush in hand
I stroked on colors
that were not bland.
A shade of blue
like my love's eyes.
His woolen coat,
I painted red,
the one he wore
when he left the note.
It told me
what he left unsaid.
He wrote to me,
"I am sorry
if I hurt you but
this is goodbye."
What a coward!
I didn't cry.
Instead,
I painted
his body yellow.
What kind of fellow
ends it like that?
Painting finished
and sent to his house.
The note attached read,
"This canvas 
is for you.
I call it
'Painting of a Louse'."

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January 2nd, 2016
Anacreontic Verse 2
Sponsor: Edward Ebbs

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Keith Bickerstaffe January 4, 2016 at 3:24 PM I'm not familiar with the ANACREONTIC form but I DO know this is a fine poem. Marvelous clipped phrases getting your point across beautifully! Well done Lin! Best wishes, Keith Lin Lane January 4, 2016 at 3:28 PM Thank you very much, Keith. There are so many different forms to try ~ eventually I'll try more.

Eve Roper January 3, 2016 at 9:58 AM Wow! To some people "wow" doesn't mean much but I sincerely say the word <3 Lin Lane January 3, 2016 at 10:02 AM and I sincerely take your "wow" as a terrific compliment. Thanks and hugs

Jeannie Cronin January 3, 2016 at 12:06 AM Very cool Lin, way to tell it like it is! Lin Lane January 3, 2016 at 4:47 AM Hi, Jeannie. Thank you.

Andrea Dietrich January 2, 2016 at 7:09 PM haha, I LOVE how he got painted yellow. GReat color for him. This was a very interesting way to use that form !! Lin Lane January 2, 2016 at 9:58 PM Thanks...the yellow bellied coward lol I couldn't resist ~

White Sage January 2, 2016 at 6:55 PM excellent write Lin...best wishes for the contest Lin Lane January 2, 2016 at 9:56 PM Thank you so much, white sage.

Eileen Manassian January 2, 2016 at 4:36 PM Great job, Lin. This is very creative, indeed. Were we to incorporate ALL the colors? I only chose one. Lovely write....great use of irony. Eileen Manassian January 2, 2016 at 4:44 PM Thanks for the clarification. Good for you for using them all. It gives it that extra appeal. Lin Lane January 2, 2016 at 4:42 PM Thank you, Eileen. Instructions said to use at least 1, but as a painter all 3 appealed to me.

Jan Allison January 2, 2016 at 2:58 PM Love it Lin lol and great rhyme too:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane January 2, 2016 at 4:41 PM Thank, Jan. I'm a rhyme junkie lol