A Nice Day -Revised

What joy I feel; this is such a nice day.
I like this beach we are at. In the sun
I want to swim, to jump the waves, then lay
out with no care. This is a day of fun.

Do not bring up one thing to turn me sad!
I need no stress in my life. For this while,
I want just fun and sun. Let us be glad!
This is a day of bliss to laugh and smile.

We too should sit and chat. Old friends are we
with much to catch up on! We ought to eat.
What would you like, my friend? Lunch is on me.
You see back there? They have stuff that is sweet!

I want some fast food. Do you want some too?
The best part of this day - I am with you!

 Sept. 30, 2019
For William Kekaula's Because It's A Tuesday 140 - 140 Sonnet
Composed of 140 one-syllable words, according to Howmanysyllables.com
(another counter says 142 because they count smile and while as two syllable words, but most dictionaries say those words are one syllable each)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019


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Date: 10/4/2019 4:42:00 PM
This should be a top winner Andrea. I tried this contest but didn't get past the first line. This is wonderful! xxoo
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/4/2019 4:53:00 PM
it already lost, Connie, just like I knew it would!!
Date: 10/2/2019 12:47:00 PM
Sounds like a fun day, Andrea. It's amazing how you managed to write this using only one-syllable words. That's quite a challenge, but you rose to meet it very well. Sending winning wishes to you, Carolyn
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Date: 10/1/2019 6:45:00 PM
G'day Andrea … What an effort. To be able to put together such a commendable sonnet using one syllable words . Well done indeed - Lindsay
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Date: 9/30/2019 12:25:00 PM
I didn’t see the rules until I’d finished reading. That you seamlessly strung 140 words together, all of single syllable, without it seeming choppy or contrived, is really unfathomable. I’m glad I wasn’t in a creative writing class with you, for I would surely have dropped out and become a chemist.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/30/2019 3:01:00 PM
I've written hundreds of them by now, so I got a lot of practice, Mark. this one is not even perfectly metered in some spots. Thanks so much for your comment. When I took a poetry class in 2001, I learned all about sonnets and could tell it was my forte. Wish I was as strong with free verse.
Date: 9/30/2019 12:22:00 PM
A nice day it is too, to be in a scenic place with the one you love. Tom
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Date: 9/30/2019 9:37:00 AM
Andrea, Love the day at the beach. Please wear sunscreen..SPF 50. I love fast food too, too much. But I'll take a #1 animal style. -Richard
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Date: 9/30/2019 8:58:00 AM
Glad to listen in on this conversation--true to real life, Andrea. All the best.
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Date: 9/30/2019 8:50:00 AM
A GREAT FLOWING POEM, ANDREA! tHANKS FOR YPUR COMMENT ON MY 911.
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Date: 9/30/2019 8:40:00 AM
Good one and Good luck Panagiota
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Date: 9/30/2019 8:38:00 AM
I love days like this... so much fun. All my best and blessings
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Date: 9/30/2019 8:35:00 AM
Andrea, a day of bliss? At the beach? I am living vicarously through this poem today.
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