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A Nice Day -Revised

What joy I feel; this is such a nice day. I like this beach we are at. In the sun I want to swim, to jump the waves, then lay out with no care. This is a day of fun. Do not bring up one thing to turn me sad! I need no stress in my life. For this while, I want just fun and sun. Let us be glad! This is a day of bliss to laugh and smile. We too should sit and chat. Old friends are we with much to catch up on! We ought to eat. What would you like, my friend? Lunch is on me. You see back there? They have stuff that is sweet! I want some fast food. Do you want some too? The best part of this day - I am with you! Sept. 30, 2019 For William Kekaula's Because It's A Tuesday 140 - 140 Sonnet Composed of 140 one-syllable words, according to Howmanysyllables.com (another counter says 142 because they count smile and while as two syllable words, but most dictionaries say those words are one syllable each)

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/4/2019 4:42:00 PM

This should be a top winner Andrea. I tried this contest but didn't get past the first line. This is wonderful! xxoo

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/4/2019 4:53:00 PM

it already lost, Connie, just like I knew it would!!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/2/2019 12:47:00 PM

Sounds like a fun day, Andrea. It's amazing how you managed to write this using only one-syllable words. That's quite a challenge, but you rose to meet it very well. Sending winning wishes to you, Carolyn

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 10/1/2019 6:45:00 PM

G'day Andrea … What an effort. To be able to put together such a commendable sonnet using one syllable words . Well done indeed - Lindsay

Mark Peterson

Date: 9/30/2019 12:25:00 PM

I didn’t see the rules until I’d finished reading. That you seamlessly strung 140 words together, all of single syllable, without it seeming choppy or contrived, is really unfathomable. I’m glad I wasn’t in a creative writing class with you, for I would surely have dropped out and become a chemist.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/30/2019 3:01:00 PM

I've written hundreds of them by now, so I got a lot of practice, Mark. this one is not even perfectly metered in some spots. Thanks so much for your comment. When I took a poetry class in 2001, I learned all about sonnets and could tell it was my forte. Wish I was as strong with free verse.