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I am having that dream of dreams again The one that wakes me up in the night Then my Heart did ask me with a fright. What dream is that again? ‘Tis always the same dream The one that keeps me awake at night The one that shows me I dare not say Then my Heart says with no humor. Dwell upon that with me Let the Dream Begin ‘Tis a fall day in the mid of October When the foliage is in bloom Bright are the colors Red, Yellow with Auburn too! Then My Heart did say ‘Tis a lovely Fall day? Lovely indeed Gentle on the crisp breeze fall the leaves of Autumn Piling up on Heaping mounds A sweater day There is no better day And She is here! Your Lovely Fall Dream? Yes, My lovely Fall Dream We are playing as school children do Frolicking through the piles Tossing leaves into the air. Giggling and laughing as we do With such gaiety do we play Sweet and tender is our touch Chase is what we did The catch is what's in our hearts Holding Hands and feeling the warmth of her heart The softness of her touch 'Tis a lovely day There is none finer Then my Heart did say Please…continue! He is here too. I know him not by name Nor by his appearance But I know him all the same A friend, would you say? A Friend indeed, bonded we are In My Heart- I know this to be Bound together- he is a brother to me What comes after? The warmth is the sun and in our hearts. Bonding by friendship and courting Long lost in our song do we sing ‘Tis a frivolous day ‘Tis no frivolity when hearts are feeling in Ernest A day is spending with no malicious intent or callous ruin When souls meet with affection and understanding for one another Our grace is in the warmth we feel toward each kindly So, your Heart is laying bare upon this day? Yes, my heart is manifesting on this lovely fall day For the leaves of Fall and brightness of the shining sun To the love, I feel for My lovely Fall Dream And the affectionate fellowship to my dearest friend Blessed are you indeed Agreed, or so I am hoping. As the sun is seeking shelter in the westerly gloom The gentle breeze is softening to a whisper Music of our song is no longer playing its melody In its discord, am I starting to find in my verity The unthinkable! What is that? A Murder Most Foul. And to whom is this foul of murder about to be commit In my Heart of hearts, am I not able to note? The betrayal, the treachery, to being treated in such a way The offense is poignant and pointing at the reliquary of my Heart lost am I in my exigency; I cannot discern the quandary I am in I am aghast and flabbergasted with discorded disbelief A fellow I consider deeper than a friend Is leveling his difference at me. How can this be? Have I offended him in some way? Perhaps I am leading without thinking, or I am following without my Heart To this, I am unable to say, but disbelief is all I feel Can he no longer fire upon me than to fire upon his own Heart? I am approaching, I tell him so, making it known Whoa this is folly, a fool’s errand Put this from our site, and we will be as before You are kin to me. Born of the same Heart. He is silent! And unmoving as I grow near Gently I am bidding to sway his hand Unmoving it is Then! A ballista through the Heart! The look on my Lovely Fall Dreams face says it all There are tears in her eyes. I am falling from grace Darkness is closing in, all joy from the world is fleeing I am afraid! I am falling! How is this happening? Bonded are we, our Hearts are the same, him and I Can you discern his face? No, veiled to me still. A wraith as before Look closely now, focus! Will you catch me? I will Do you promise? I swear Then I will try to look again ……………. I do not understand, nor fathom the reason why How can this be? What is it? His Face. It is me! How can I murder myself in such a way? Where are you hit again? A Ballista through the Heart A Murder Most Foul Indeed! You have not caught me yet. Then my Heart replied, how will I? But you made a promise. I am afraid I cannot fulfill that vow, for I died long ago. On that day, hers was not the only heart you broke. 3/28/2020 Placed 1st STRAND CHOICE U,any form,any theme Contest Judged: 3/30/2020 Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Date: 5/19/2020 2:52:00 AM
Very intriguing. I must admit...I didn't forsee the ending. Great twist...great storytelling.
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Date: 5/16/2020 8:49:00 AM
No new ones, so I will use this moment to say hi and offer positive thoughts for a blessed day. ;0)
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Date: 5/14/2020 10:08:00 PM
I do enjoy a good narrative. Thank you for this treat.
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Date: 5/13/2020 11:50:00 AM
Hi J.C Hawkens hope you are keeping well and safe - have missed reading your awesome poetry! Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/11/2020 12:15:00 PM
What a narrative with so much intrigue ... your back and forth dialogue and zigzagging lines helped to draw me in and kind of mimics what a dream does (through text). You should be proud of this piece ... easy to read, yet open interpretation.
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Date: 5/13/2020 11:43:00 AM
Timothy, your words are overwhelming and most appreciated. Thank you for your encouragement. And thank you for the description on your take on my poem. Blessings my friend.
Date: 4/30/2020 1:35:00 AM
Creativity at its best, passion digging deepest. Your voice is powerful here. What an excellent piece.
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Date: 5/9/2020 12:13:00 PM
Funom, as always your words are most welcome my, friend.
Date: 4/27/2020 5:29:00 PM
Deep joint man, I like the movement of your voice here.
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Date: 5/9/2020 12:12:00 PM
Thank you for these Kind words My friend.
Date: 4/22/2020 10:23:00 AM
Hi JC, Let me say Congratulations, well deserved in the cleverly written out story. I savored every word and a well-penned story it is. I'll be thinking about your story for some time to come. Again , welcome to the Soup. Best Wishes, William
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Date: 4/23/2020 3:49:00 PM
William, Thank you for the words my friend and the wonderful visit. They mean so much to me, my friend. Blessings
Date: 4/21/2020 8:58:00 AM
I came back to see if you posted a new one. Please let me know when you do.
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Date: 4/20/2020 4:07:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this story in your amazing poetic style. Thanks likewise for your comments; I appreciate them. God bless you.
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Date: 4/23/2020 3:47:00 PM
Beata, Your comments are wonderful, as always. Thank you, my friend, for the heartfelt comment and beautiful visit. Blessings.
Date: 4/19/2020 10:34:00 PM
This was just captivating from beginning to end, JC. I enjoyed it immensely. Congratulations on a well deserved win. :=)
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Date: 4/23/2020 3:46:00 PM
Thank you, Evelyn, I am so glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for a visit. Your comments are most welcome. I hope all is well.
Date: 4/19/2020 2:31:00 PM
Top-notch storytelling my friend...amazing write...await the next...cheers from the Wingster :o)
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Date: 4/19/2020 9:08:00 AM
I had to read through a second time. Congratulations as well for your first place finish. I commend Brian on his excellent taste.
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Date: 4/19/2020 9:01:00 AM
This is next level poetry. Many dream of writing something this good. I enjoyed reading your writing this morning. Blessings Rick.
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Date: 4/19/2020 1:13:00 PM
Thank you, my friend, for these encouraging words. I almost didn't post this poem for fear that it wouldn't be received well. Not poetic enough. I am still trying to find my confidence. But I do write from the heart. I am glad that you had a chance to read and enjoyed it.
Date: 4/18/2020 11:20:00 AM
What a story. How about making it into a book????? Enjoy your weekend.........
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Date: 4/18/2020 3:30:00 PM
Wow-what praise indeed. Not sure if I have the courage for a book, but I do love the compliment. Enjoy your weekend as well. Thank you.
Date: 4/16/2020 4:09:00 AM
I am no fan of long poetry, JC, but I have to admit that this one kept me glued right to the very end! At first my mind went for the usual love triangle, but the end twist brought forth a triangle of a totally unexpected kind. Excellent...a fav for me. Regards // paul
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Date: 4/16/2020 3:54:00 PM
Paul, you honor me with this beautiful comment. Thank you for the fav. I am so glad that you took the time to read my poem and that you enjoyed it. Thank you, my friend, JC Hawkens
Date: 4/14/2020 7:18:00 PM
A tour de force, JC...exhausting! ;)
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Date: 4/14/2020 8:22:00 PM
Thank you Wayne, for this beautiful comment. And I do love your Haiku's. Lovely musing, my friend. Stay Safe. JC Hawkens
Date: 4/14/2020 3:35:00 PM
wow, what an ending! I was half expecting it to be something like that, but also I was thinking maybe the "he" was a friend who stole your girl. However, the real "he" makes this a very clever ending!!
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Date: 4/14/2020 6:13:00 PM
Andrea, thank you for this beautiful comment. My muse had gone quiet on me. Then I started listening to my heart, and it whispered this story to me. Your words mean a lot to me. Thank you for your encouragement. I hope all is well, JC. Hawkens
Date: 4/12/2020 8:04:00 PM
Superb poem with superb imagery!
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Date: 4/12/2020 9:00:00 PM
JCB, thank you for these kind words. They mean a lot to me. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I do hope all is well. JC Hawkens
Date: 4/12/2020 7:42:00 PM
Reads and feels like an authentic nightmare. Falling,... falling... ~ Gershon
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Date: 4/12/2020 8:56:00 PM
Gershon, I am so glad that you had a chance to read my poem, And thank you for the beautiful comment. Stay safe. JC Hawkens
Date: 4/12/2020 5:11:00 PM
I thought I'd comment on this before, JC. Dreams that we dream that make our hearts race in the middle of the night, to wake not remember what we dream about. When souls meet with affection and understanding for one another Our grace is in the warmth we feel toward each kindly. Love the write and the imagery you created. Thank you for the wonderful compliment. On a day of Easter Sunday to get POTD, I am very honored. Have a wonderful Happy Easter to you and your family. Hugs Eve
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Date: 4/12/2020 8:50:00 PM
Thank you, Eve, for this lovely comment. And you are most welcome for your well deserved POTD. That one went into my favs. It was beautifully written. And such an excellent read for Easter. Happy Easter, and I hope all is well. JC Hawkens
Date: 4/12/2020 2:23:00 PM
What an intriguing, poetic story you weave so intricately here, JC! Love the dream like rhythm and cadence, the love story mixed with betrayal, and it is quite fascinating to read! Enjoyed this! :)
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Date: 4/12/2020 7:36:00 PM
Thank you, Laura, for this beautiful comment. I wasn't sure how it would be received. The incredible reception just overjoys me. I am so glad that you had a chance to read it and enjoyed it. Happy Easter, and I hope all is well. JC Hawkens
Date: 4/12/2020 12:34:00 PM
Where have all your poems gone? This was Poe esque..... Enjoyable read
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Date: 4/12/2020 2:44:00 PM
Alas, every time I go to edit Harbinger, it tells me that it's too long. So in with the short stories, it went till I can write correctly. But I am happy that you found this one enjoyable, my friend. Warm wishes and a Happy Easter. JC Hawkens
Date: 4/12/2020 8:54:00 AM
A lengthy but articulate poem, J.C. Bravo!
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Date: 4/12/2020 2:39:00 PM
Your comment is most kind. I do appreciate it. And I want to thank you for taking the time to read my poem. Stay safe JC Hawkens
Date: 4/10/2020 3:09:00 AM
There's a creativity hidden within you Hawkens. I enjoyed reading your long and thoughtful poem. Keep them coming my dear friend. Love and hugs!
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Date: 4/11/2020 3:07:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words. They are a blessing. When I first came to Poetry Soup, I doubted if what I did was Poetry. Or if it was any good, but the encouragement of fellow members like you have given me the courage to continue. And to this, I am very grateful. I am so happy that you took the time to read my poem and for these beautiful words of encouragement. Thank you. Stay well. JC Hawkens
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