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A Murder Most Foul

I am having that dream of dreams again
The one that wakes me up in the night
                         Then my Heart did ask me with fright. 
                                                     What dream is that again?
‘Tis always the same dream 
The one that keeps me awake at night
The one that shows me
I dare not say
                        Then my Heart says with no humor.
                                               Dwell upon that shall we
                                                              Let the Dream Begin
‘Tis a fall day in the mid of October
When the foliage is in bloom
Bright are the colors
Red, Yellow with Auburn too!
                         Then My Heart did say 
                                           ‘Tis a lovely Fall day?
Lovely indeed 
Gentle on the crisp breeze fall the leaves of Autumn
Piling up on Heaping mounds
A sweater day
There is no better day
And She is here!
                         Your Lovely Fall Dream?
Yes, My lovely Fall Dream.
We are playing as school children do
Frolicking through the piles
Tossing leaves into the air. 
Giggling and laughing as we do

With such gaiety do we play
Sweet and tender is our touch
Chase is what we did 
The catch is what's in our hearts

Holding Hands and feeling the warmth of her heart
The softness of her touch
'Tis a lovely day
There is none finer
                        Then my Heart did say 
                                               Please…continue!

He is here too. 
I know him not by name.
Nor by his appearance
But I know him all the same
                          A friend, would you say?
A Friend indeed, bonded are we!
In My Heart- I know this to be
Bound together- he is a brother to me
                          What comes after?
The warmth is the sun and in our hearts.
Bonding by friendship and courting
Long lost in our song do we sing
                          ‘Tis a frivolous day
‘Tis no frivolity when hearts are feeling in Ernest
A day is spending with no malicious intent or callous ruin
When souls meet with affection and understanding for one another
Our grace is in the warmth we feel toward each kindly
                        So, your Heart lay bare upon this day?
Yes, my heart was manifesting on this lovely fall day.
For the leaves of Fall and brightness of the shining sun
To the love, I feel for My lovely Fall Dream
And the affectionate fellowship to my dearest friend
                         Blessed are you indeed
Agreed, or so I am hoping.
As the sun is seeking shelter in the westerly gloom
The gentle breeze is softening to a whisper
The music of our song is no longer playing its melody
In its discord, am I starting to find in my verity
The unthinkable!
                         What is that?
A Murder Most Foul!
                         And to whom is this foul of murder about to be commit
In my Heart of hearts, am I not able to note?
The betrayal, the treachery, to being treated in such a way
The offense is poignant and pointing at the reliquary of my Heart
lost am I in my exigency, I cannot discern the quandary I am in

I am aghast and flabbergasted with discorded disbelief
A fellow I consider deeper than a friend
He is leveling his difference at me.
How can this be?
Have I offended him in some way?

Perhaps I am leading without thinking, or I am following without my Heart 
To this, I am unable to say, but disbelief is all I feel
Can he no longer fire upon me than to fire upon his own Heart?

I am approaching, I tell him so, making it known
Whoa, this is folly, a fool’s errand 
Put this from our site, and we will be as before
You are kin to me. Born of the same Heart.

He is silent! And unmoving as I grow near
Gently I am bidding to sway his hand
Unmoving it is 
Then! 
 
A ballista through the Heart!

The look on my Lovely Fall Dreams face says it all
There are tears in her eyes.
I am falling from grace.
Darkness is closing in. All joy from the world is fleeing.

I am afraid!

I am falling!

How is this happening?
Bonded are we, our Hearts are the same, he and I
                          Can you discern his face?
No, veiled to me still. A wraith as before
                          Look closely now. Focus!
Will you catch me?
                          I will
Do you promise?
                          I swear
Then I will try to look again
……………. I do not understand nor fathom the reason why
How can this be?
                          What is it?
His Face.   It is me!  
How can I murder myself in such a way?
                          Where are you hit again?
A Ballista through the Heart 
                          A Murder Most Foul Indeed!
You have not caught me yet. 
                          Then my Heart replied, how will I? 
But you made a promise.
                           I am afraid I cannot fulfill that vow, for I died long ago.
                           On that day, hers was not the only heart you broke.



                                         3/28/2020



Placed 1st
STRAND CHOICE U, any form, any theme
Contest Judged:  3/30/2020 
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Bangalee Avatar
September 28, 2020 at 12:20 AM
I think it's one of your best......greatly shared
Manassian Avatar
May 19, 2020 at 2:52 AM
Very intriguing. I must admit...I didn't forsee the ending. Great twist...great storytelling.
Hawkens Avatar
May 28, 2020 at 5:32 AM
Thank you for this beautiful comment. I am so happy for you. What an honor to have someone perform your poetry. I can only imagine how blessed you felt.
Lamoureux Avatar
May 16, 2020 at 8:49 AM
No new ones, so I will use this moment to say hi and offer positive thoughts for a blessed day. ;0)
Hawkens Avatar
May 28, 2020 at 5:34 AM
I submitted another new poem. Been trying to get out of that dreaded block.
Carmack Avatar
May 14, 2020 at 10:08 PM
I do enjoy a good narrative. Thank you for this treat.
Hawkens Avatar
May 28, 2020 at 5:30 AM
Thank you for this wonderful compliment.
Proxenos Avatar
May 13, 2020 at 11:50 AM
Hi J.C Hawkens hope you are keeping well and safe - have missed reading your awesome poetry! Blessings, Jennifer.
Hawkens Avatar
May 28, 2020 at 5:29 AM
Thank you Jennifer, I hope to get over this dreadful block soon.
Hicks Avatar
May 11, 2020 at 12:15 PM
What a narrative with so much intrigue ... your back and forth dialogue and zigzagging lines helped to draw me in and kind of mimics what a dream does (through text). You should be proud of this piece ... easy to read, yet open interpretation.
Hawkens Avatar
May 13, 2020 at 11:43 AM
Timothy, your words are overwhelming and most appreciated. Thank you for your encouragement. And thank you for the description on your take on my poem. Blessings my friend.
Makama Avatar
April 30, 2020 at 1:35 AM
Creativity at its best, passion digging deepest. Your voice is powerful here. What an excellent piece.
Hawkens Avatar
May 9, 2020 at 12:13 PM
Funom, as always your words are most welcome my, friend.
Gist Avatar
April 27, 2020 at 5:29 PM
Deep joint man, I like the movement of your voice here.
Hawkens Avatar
May 9, 2020 at 12:12 PM
Thank you for these Kind words My friend.
Darnell Sr Avatar
April 22, 2020 at 10:23 AM
Hi JC, Let me say Congratulations, well deserved in the cleverly written out story. I savored every word and a well-penned story it is. I'll be thinking about your story for some time to come. Again , welcome to the Soup. Best Wishes, William
Hawkens Avatar
April 23, 2020 at 3:49 PM
William, Thank you for the words my friend and the wonderful visit. They mean so much to me, my friend. Blessings
Lamoureux Avatar
April 21, 2020 at 8:58 AM
I came back to see if you posted a new one. Please let me know when you do.
Agustin Avatar
April 20, 2020 at 4:07 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this story in your amazing poetic style. Thanks likewise for your comments; I appreciate them. God bless you.
Hawkens Avatar
April 23, 2020 at 3:47 PM
Beata, Your comments are wonderful, as always. Thank you, my friend, for the heartfelt comment and beautiful visit. Blessings.
Buehler Avatar
April 19, 2020 at 10:34 PM
This was just captivating from beginning to end, JC. I enjoyed it immensely. Congratulations on a well deserved win. :=)
Hawkens Avatar
April 23, 2020 at 3:46 PM
Thank you, Evelyn, I am so glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for a visit. Your comments are most welcome. I hope all is well.
Warrior Avatar
April 19, 2020 at 2:31 PM
Top-notch storytelling my friend...amazing write...await the next...cheers from the Wingster :o)
Lamoureux Avatar
April 19, 2020 at 9:08 AM
I had to read through a second time. Congratulations as well for your first place finish. I commend Brian on his excellent taste.
Lamoureux Avatar
April 19, 2020 at 9:01 AM
This is next level poetry. Many dream of writing something this good. I enjoyed reading your writing this morning. Blessings Rick.
Hawkens Avatar
April 19, 2020 at 1:13 PM
Thank you, my friend, for these encouraging words. I almost didn't post this poem for fear that it wouldn't be received well. Not poetic enough. I am still trying to find my confidence. But I do write from the heart. I am glad that you had a chance to read and enjoyed it.
Goldsmith Avatar
April 18, 2020 at 11:20 AM
What a story. How about making it into a book????? Enjoy your weekend.........
Hawkens Avatar
April 18, 2020 at 3:30 PM
Wow-what praise indeed. Not sure if I have the courage for a book, but I do love the compliment. Enjoy your weekend as well. Thank you.
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April 16, 2020 at 4:09 AM
I am no fan of long poetry, JC, but I have to admit that this one kept me glued right to the very end! At first my mind went for the usual love triangle, but the end twist brought forth a triangle of a totally unexpected kind. Excellent...a fav for me. Regards // paul
Hawkens Avatar
April 16, 2020 at 3:54 PM
Paul, you honor me with this beautiful comment. Thank you for the fav. I am so glad that you took the time to read my poem and that you enjoyed it. Thank you, my friend, JC Hawkens
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April 14, 2020 at 3:35 PM
wow, what an ending! I was half expecting it to be something like that, but also I was thinking maybe the "he" was a friend who stole your girl. However, the real "he" makes this a very clever ending!!
Hawkens Avatar
April 14, 2020 at 6:13 PM
Andrea, thank you for this beautiful comment. My muse had gone quiet on me. Then I started listening to my heart, and it whispered this story to me. Your words mean a lot to me. Thank you for your encouragement. I hope all is well, JC. Hawkens
Brul Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 8:04 PM
Superb poem with superb imagery!
Hawkens Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 9:00 PM
JCB, thank you for these kind words. They mean a lot to me. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I do hope all is well. JC Hawkens
Wolf Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 7:42 PM
Reads and feels like an authentic nightmare. Falling,... falling... ~ Gershon
Hawkens Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 8:56 PM
Gershon, I am so glad that you had a chance to read my poem, And thank you for the beautiful comment. Stay safe. JC Hawkens
Roper Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 5:11 PM
I thought I'd comment on this before, JC. Dreams that we dream that make our hearts race in the middle of the night, to wake not remember what we dream about. When souls meet with affection and understanding for one another Our grace is in the warmth we feel toward each kindly. Love the write and the imagery you created. Thank you for the wonderful compliment. On a day of Easter Sunday to get POTD, I am very honored. Have a wonderful Happy Easter to you and your family. Hugs Eve
Hawkens Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 8:50 PM
Thank you, Eve, for this lovely comment. And you are most welcome for your well deserved POTD. That one went into my favs. It was beautifully written. And such an excellent read for Easter. Happy Easter, and I hope all is well. JC Hawkens
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April 12, 2020 at 2:23 PM
What an intriguing, poetic story you weave so intricately here, JC! Love the dream like rhythm and cadence, the love story mixed with betrayal, and it is quite fascinating to read! Enjoyed this! :)
Hawkens Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 7:36 PM
Thank you, Laura, for this beautiful comment. I wasn't sure how it would be received. The incredible reception just overjoys me. I am so glad that you had a chance to read it and enjoyed it. Happy Easter, and I hope all is well. JC Hawkens
One Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 12:34 PM
Where have all your poems gone? This was Poe esque..... Enjoyable read
Hawkens Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 2:44 PM
Alas, every time I go to edit Harbinger, it tells me that it's too long. So in with the short stories, it went till I can write correctly. But I am happy that you found this one enjoyable, my friend. Warm wishes and a Happy Easter. JC Hawkens
Sergi Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 8:54 AM
A lengthy but articulate poem, J.C. Bravo!
Hawkens Avatar
April 12, 2020 at 2:39 PM
Your comment is most kind. I do appreciate it. And I want to thank you for taking the time to read my poem. Stay safe JC Hawkens
Foli Avatar
April 10, 2020 at 3:09 AM
There's a creativity hidden within you Hawkens. I enjoyed reading your long and thoughtful poem. Keep them coming my dear friend. Love and hugs!
Hawkens Avatar
April 11, 2020 at 3:07 PM
Thank you for your kind words. They are a blessing. When I first came to Poetry Soup, I doubted if what I did was Poetry. Or if it was any good, but the encouragement of fellow members like you have given me the courage to continue. And to this, I am very grateful. I am so happy that you took the time to read my poem and for these beautiful words of encouragement. Thank you. Stay well. JC Hawkens
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