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A Modest Promise

I promise Not to promise Waterfalls from careless creeks I vow not to allow Expectations of mountains in handfuls of pebbles I declare to be fair about my dark coated heart I assure not to impure The scarlet blue surrounding you My intent though modest bent Heaven and Earth is what you're worth. 06/04/20

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John Hamilton

Date: 6/18/2020 11:05:00 AM

Very nice write Michelle, enjoyed, congrats on a fine placement!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/18/2020 5:53:00 PM

Thank you for placing me in your contest, John, appreciate it-

Funom Makama

Date: 6/8/2020 8:46:00 PM

Most profound expressions of your deep thoughts. A great, great piece!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/18/2020 5:54:00 PM

Thank you very much, Funom-

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/5/2020 10:19:00 AM

I agree with John Watt, your poems are always very clever, you put thought into them and you know what you are writing about - alway an intelligent, yet charming approach. Blessings, hugs, Jennifer.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/5/2020 12:41:00 PM

Many thanks for your kind comments, and blessings and hugs also.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/4/2020 9:10:00 PM

'Expectations of mountains in handfuls of pebbles,' to quote you: This is the stuff of most politicians' empty promises. They ought to read this, but never will, I'm afraid. Great write, Michelle!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/5/2020 12:39:00 PM

Wow, I've never been quoted before - and I agree, too many empty promises, not enough results, sadly.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 6/4/2020 8:55:00 PM

This is beautiful Michelle. xomo

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/5/2020 12:35:00 PM

Thanks Mo! xomo

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 6/4/2020 8:33:00 PM

I think promises can so easily be broken, I love the way you take care to keep them intact, through your poetic vow. Lovely write Michelle. xo

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/5/2020 12:35:00 PM

Yes, a promise should not be made carelessly, thank you for commenting-

John Watt

Date: 6/4/2020 6:13:00 PM

I like how much you say in a compact space, and with rhymes. It shows a lot of thought and care is put into your writing. I love your message too about not over-promising. Had you considering entering the Heaven contest, because I see this as doing very well with its terra firma view of heaven. You are such an intelligent writer, Michelle. Always a pleasure to read.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/4/2020 6:56:00 PM

Actually this was for the 'Promise' contest, but it closed so quickly (another one missed!) Thank you for the suggestion, I may enter it - and always a pleasure to read your work, too.

Rico Leffanta

Date: 6/4/2020 2:51:00 PM

Well thought out and scribed, Michelle! Aloha! Rico

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/4/2020 4:04:00 PM

Thanks so much, Rico!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/4/2020 2:51:00 PM

WOW! Loved it all, Michelle.. but especially..I vow not to allow Expectations of mountains in handfuls of pebbles..

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/4/2020 4:04:00 PM

Many thanks, appreciate it, Vijay-