Rachel D Poet Free verse

A Mistake That Killed

In a race
There I ride 
I took a turn 
And cost a life
With a gash in my head
I ran to the other car
Inside were two men
One I recognized
I pressed my face on the shattered glass
And found my father, whose life just passed
A rush of guilt
Killed my mind
But not as much
As I ended my father's life.

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Laura Mckenzie May 24, 2009 at 11:05 AM Sad horrifying Congratulations on your featured poem! Laura :(

Izzy Gumbo May 24, 2009 at 6:52 AM Rachel, congrats on the feature, you had me holding my breath the whole way and then POW, it was dad???? Omg, I so hope this story isn't true, but if so, I can only offer my arms around you my friend. Forgive and love yourself. blessings to your family dear heart.

Raul Moreno May 23, 2009 at 11:47 PM Rachel, congrats on your feature...Raul

Vince Suzadail Jr. May 23, 2009 at 5:03 PM Congrats Rachel on being featured this week. Vince

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen May 22, 2009 at 2:23 PM Rachael, this poem is strong and emotional. I hope it's not true. If it is, I don't know what to say. (Except forgive your self and try to do good in the world.) Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. Keep writing, Love and Hugs, Dane

L'Nass Shango May 21, 2009 at 6:47 AM Deep Freudian exhumations that urge my respect and admiration in one exhalation ... congratulation on being featured this week, my dearest Rachel.

Justin Hensley May 18, 2009 at 3:01 PM Great imagery! i like this poem even if it a sad one! Gratz on the featured poem.

Sharon Winter May 18, 2009 at 6:10 AM Congratulations on your featured write of the week. Sounds quite horrific. Hope it's not true. Love, Shar

Ernilando Tugaff May 18, 2009 at 3:46 AM Hello, did this really happen? Hope not. Anyway congratulations my friend on your poem being featured this week. More success. God bless. Ernilando

May 17, 2009 at 4:19 PM What a devastating event--well conveyed. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen

Brandy Megens May 12, 2009 at 7:51 AM WOW IS IT A TRUE STORY?I DONT WANNA KNOW BUT YOU COME ACROSS WITH SUCH PASSION AND LOVE GREAT JOB

Fernando Lachica May 12, 2009 at 7:11 AM You write beautifully with your heart out and I can feel your feeling about your father. Good work!